In the mind there are hidden desires like the stuff of both fantasy and nightmares. For Rainbow Dash, she struggles with the fact that the pony she loves is too young to date. And even then she knows what would happen if anypony found out that she even thought of a filly, and even other fillies like that. To seek the necessary help she hopes that by confiding to her friends that they'll help her see reason to this odd mental state she finds herself in. But when revealing one's secrets, she may find out that it may not always be the correct way to reveal her secret; even at the cost of her delusional romance with Scootaloo.
Thank you so much to retroman000 and Feather Note for their awesome editing.
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That's sad
Poor RD
6779921 Indeed.
Just wondering... Will there be a conclusion to this story? You left it off with a cliff hanger and now I'm intrigued as to what will happen
and you just end it like that....
6780134 I literally have no idea what will happen next.
6780157 well when you figure it out please let us know
6780168 Sure. And any suggestions will be appreciated if you've got any.
I agree that this only feels like half a story, and that's kind of sad too, considering how well this is written in terms of grammar and the understanding of the subject matter.
That's it? You call that 'complete' I want more. That wasn't solved at all
6780506 Some things in life never get solved. Some problems stay with us forever when there are secrets that can't be told.
6780425 The wiki also spells it Soarin.
6780322 Maybe there'll be a sequel one day. Maybe.
6780425 It's spelt SOARIN on every official merchandise that's come from Hasbro, there's no instance of SOARIN's name being spelt in the show and the wiki states his name as SOARIN.
You might want to google your facts before you start shouting nonsense.
This is a great story so far and I would love it if you continued it, even if you've marked it as complete.
My only gripe is how when RD explains how she sniffed at Scoot's nethers, the Twi isnt that bothered. But when RD kisses Scootaloo while she sleeps, Twi flips out.
Perhaps if you switched the order of the actions RD did. So say kisses her on the lips while she sleeps in the same sleeping bag as her. And then while asleep on the train, RD leans her on the bench seat, gets off the bench to smells her musk.
That way both events still happen and Twi is more justified in her reaction at the end since clearly it would show RD was slowly losing self control.
Anyway I'd still love to see more of this story but if you want to leave it as is, then I hope to see more foalcon stories from you if they are of this type. I'm always a fan of Foal x Adult romance, more so if their romance has to enduce so much struggle.
6781392 whoa. Calm yourself there killer. Just telling you what I thought was correct. Don't go getting mad at me. My bad for messing up. Soo guess its Doctor Hooves and not Doctor Whooves since that's how its spelled on the merchandise
6780566 wiki can be changed at anytime but ok Soarin it is cause I give my opinion and people bite my face off so guess I'll keep my mouth shut. I forgot this is the internet. You can have an opinion but you're wrong
6781505 You didn't phrase it as though you were stating your opinion, you phrased it as though you were trying your hardest to 'correct' our oh so obvious mistake. You cannot have an opinion over a fact that is backed up by official evidence to prove it true. Cause if it doesn't fit in with what you know it's completely wrong, actual facts be damned.
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Apparently you don't quite understand the pun filled fun that is MLP's naming system. Basically, Soarin is a pun on the name Soren.Remember, the names in mlp are all references to the character's talent by blatant reference in english terminology with an added pun if available. So Soarin would be the correct spelling in the MLP universe as Soren doesn't have a specific English definition.Edit: Nevermind he deleted his comment.
Anyway message to the author, this issue is actually a rather interesting concept that most shy away from and its a pity you ended this here. As far as I can tell RD's issue is actually just an extreme case of a fairly typical issue that affects a small minority of people when they develope, namely sexual age of the target not aging at the same rate as the individual. I dont think it normally haults in most cases and instead just slowly increases over time, but I don't really want to contaminate my search history any further by fact checking.
6781596 man you love attacking me don't you. I made a mistake so how about you make like Frozen and let it go
6781399 I originally intended on leaving it open-ended, but after all the feedback the story has been getting, I would love to continue it. The only problem is I literally have no idea what should happen next.
I was trying to have Twilight Sparkle bite her tongue until she finds out the true extent of Rainbow Dash's exploits so that she wouldn't be too hasty in deciding what to say to her. That could have been conveyed better if I wrote a bit more about what Twilight Sparkle was thinking.
Suppose Rainbow Dash could just be suffering from that issue. But after contaminating my internet history researching for this story, I didn't find much about sexual age of the target not aging at the same rate as the individual.
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Was this meant to be a reply to someone? I'm not sure if you mean does the adult still have interest in their young lover, even if they grow older then the adults preferred age range? Or did you want to know if the age they like changes as they get older?
If you want some information on real life scenarios in order to help you craft your story, may I suggest speaking to Flutterpony. He is the head of this Foalcon group and has even wrote a fanfic that deals with a foal x adult relationship, with use of real life stats and research, but ponified of course. I'm sure he can point you in the direction of what you are looking for.
And well at least you can always clear your Internet history or use incognito browsing if your browser supports that.
This story needs to continue. RD needs to face down her feelings and judge whether they're right or wrong and she needs to tell Scoots how she's felt and Twilight..... she needs to be a bit better therapist instead of just automatically assuming the worst possible choice for RD's emotional state at the moment.
6781744 I'm pretty sure this is the first time i've ever seen you on this site, so I really haven't had the chance to grow fond of attacking you yet. Although....
Anyway, as my earlier statement stands, make sure you know what you're talking about before you try to correct someone on something, otherwise you end up looking like an A**hole. This is the internet, as you said, here we don't take fondly to mis-information! *Maniacal laughter*
6782629 TBH most therapists react in a similar fashion to what Twi has done here. Even just saying you have an attraction to young ones, can end up with the patient's confidentiality being broken as the doctor reports the patient to the authorities.
It's very brave of RD coming out like that to her friends and its sad Twi can't be more understanding. Perhaps she will control her knee jerk reaction and try to work more with Dash. But only the author knows what will happen here.
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Therapists may recommend cutting off contact with a child one has a particular affection for, but they won't get all emotional and accusatory about it. The entire reason one goes to a therapist in the first place is that they are an objective ear with no emotional stake in the matter. Rainbow going to Twilight for this was actually a terrible decision on her part.
Anyway, the story was intense, as one would expect, but there wasn't really any closure. Not that closure in this sort of situation is a possibility, I suppose, in the real world. Well, not until something truly terrible and regrettable happens. Strong stuff.
Think the ideal place to continue is a few years down the road when Scootaloo is a young adult when Rainbow can grapple with whether she finds Scootaloo attractive for being a filly or as an individual.
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It was in response to my comment. The idea is that when you first develop attraction your ideal aged companion can remain somewhat static for some people and their 'target age' for their attraction doesnt increases at the same speed as they do. So if you were 14 when you got interested, a decade later you might be 24, but the age of those you consider attractive may not have aged 10 years as well.
I remember some scholar papers discussing the concept, but I honestly cant find them anymore so maybe they don't exist, memory is a faulty beast. Though I do remember something about it being an extension on the same reason a lot of people are into adult 'teen' videos.
I'll be honest, I laughed a few times reading this, if only because it reminded me so much of 'to catch a predator' with the things RD described wanting to do. It was a decent story, I was actually wondering if something like this existed since I thought it would make for a good emotional drama, and it did... only the clunky dialogue kind of killed it at times, I don't believe RD would be so explicit in what she wanted the first time she opened up about this to someone, and it was already mentioned but I think Twilight's reaction was kind of whack,"sniffing kid's genitals is a-okay but kissing, now that's too far
", Really I think she was far too calm throughout the whole thing if she was going to turn around and tell RD she was a danger. All in all it was a decent enough short story which I don't think needs to be continued, I think you'd only run the risk of damaging the sensitivity, and it's already rubbed plenty of people the wrong way judging from the like/dislike ratio (although I don't see why, maybe I'm wrong but I didn't interpret this as being a sexual thing)
Well, that was genuinely compelling. It also appears to be well researched.
Twilight is really bad at this, but her conclusion was probably for the best.
Honestly I wouldn't recommend doing any more with this story, as you said there is nowhere that this could go that would result in a happy ending. (Unfortunately).
Well done anyway.
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Happiness is subjective!
Besides, Scootaloo could always come clean with liking older mares, and being aware of everything that Rainbow Dash did to her.
6802440 If you are looking for another story like this, may I suggest extremely highly the fic Fallen Angels by Flutterpony. It follows Fluttershy on her struggles with her pedophilic temptations. I wont say more about the plot though since it would spoil reading it. But I will say its heavily researched and while its in the land of magical talking ponies, it does use a lot of real world references too.
Anyway sorry for kinda necro-ing your comment but you sounded interested in such a fic.
I get what you were going for at the end, but if you're going to go FULL-ON-ANGST at the last portion of a romance story, PUT IT IN THE FUCKING TABS.
Also: PLEASE continue this story with another chapter. I swear, every time I read a good Scootadash story, there is almost always a plot twist or (forced) angst thing shoved in to derail it. All in all, you kind of ruined my Wednesday.
P.S. also make Rainbow Dash a tad bit less....you know.
6821226 I love that story!
it's one of the few foalcon stories that actually seems like it could be a real novel(the depth is insanely deep).
6832240 Hehe yeah I wouldn't be ashamed to have a hardback copy of such a book. And I think we should have more foalcon with a plot.
It's a lil too full with just mindless clop at the moment. Thats why my hopes go high when I see any sfw foalcon stories, since there is a much higher chance of a narrative being there.
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I don't know.
She should have raped Scootaloo.
lol jk
sweet story.
7050221 Wow, thank you!
Maybe in the sequel.While the story itself is written well enough, the ending is just too open ended as is for me to give it a fave.
7051688 I really do hope this eventually gets a sequel where RD DOES admit her feelings to Scoots.
I'm pretty sure Scoots would love her back.
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It does feel unfinished....
Uh, no.
Nope.
She doesn’t.