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Canterlot is getting ready for the wedding of the century, Princess Mi Amore Cadenza is marrying the Captain of the Royal Guard and part of the draconic royal family will be in attendance. In addition to helping prepare the most high profile wedding Equestria has seen in living memory, Celestia has tasked Sunset Shimmer and the rest of the Elements of Harmony with befriending the future queen of the Dragon Empire and her entourage, the first Sorcerer the Empire has ever had. One thing is certain, this will be a wedding that nobody ever forgets.

(New description has be made by none other than DoomManta)

(Story has been inspired by This picture) Go check out the person who did it Zig-Word

New cover art is drawn by http://akerabronzpaw.deviantart.com/ It may say a different name but same person.


Note to all: This story has been made before the season 6 ep 5 "Gauntlet of Fire" was made but may have some details about it. ;)

First Published
27th Dec 2015
Last Modified
19th Jan 2017

It's a good start, I like it so far, I'm looking forward to the rest.

That said, the number of literary errors...:pinkiesick:

Sunset, you just jinxed yourself.:ajbemused:

...Prepare for the invasion, people- er, ponies...whatever. Actually, I wonder how that's gonna work out here...?:moustache:

This is new, and great! Hope to see more of this soon, I tried giving a thumbs up but it seems to be broken for some reason. Eh, that's technology for ya. :facehoof:

>>6771684 yeah....... I'm not a great writer:twilightsheepish: but people can still read it right!

Right?

The very idea of the story deserves  thumbs up...keep up the good work man, it looks like this is the your first  fiction and I am starting to like you. (Followed/thumb up)

>>6771721 well you got to wait and see, for how long that I have no idea :derpyderp1:

>>6771778 New? I don't know about that but thanks for the comment.:pinkiesmile:

>>6771806 I have done a fanfic before -shamless plug: Magic: the gathering: friendship is magic (I think?)- I just am not a great writer, but thanks for the thanks:pinkiesmile:

>>6771803 yeah it's readable, I was just in a critic type mood earlier today. :twilightblush:

Ok this is a bit rough around the edges but I love the idea behind it.  I look forward to the mane 6 and Spike meeting Twilight.  Keep writing and you can only improve.

>>6771981 That is what I hope for and keep telling myself, but I'm happy people are enjoying the story

Since Sunset said what could happen, everything will happen.

Chrysalis, Discord, Nightmare Moon, even Sombra.

Sunset. :ajbemused:

"Oh come on Spike it's just a wedding what could go wrong?"

:facehoof:Sunset, you never say stuff like this, regardless of the circumstances.  Never, ever.:facehoof:

Murphy's Law, girl.  Murphy's Law.

And that comment just called it into action.:ajbemused::facehoof:

>>6772087

>>6772081

Murphy's Law my friends Murphy's Law.............. is such a bitch. BWHAHAHAHAHA!:pinkiecrazy:

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Yeah... I see potential in this, but you really need to get an editor.

>>6772106 Yeah........ I really do....... :(

Oh, I really like this.

Chrysalis is gonna get her bugbutt kicked.

Twilight meeting her birth family will be interesting.

Looking forward for new chapters.

>>6772191 I'm saying that the law is a bitch, I think Murphy is a ok kind of guy.

>>6772110

There are some groups on Fimfiction.net that you might be able to find an editor and/or pre-reader at.  The idea is fantastic and not something I remember seeing before, you just need a lot of polish on things like spelling, word choice and perspective (you switched from 1st person to 3rd person and back at least once :).

Definitely try to find someone.  I can actually SEE the idea you have, which is huge, it just needs to have the actual words on the page smoothed out.

>>6772198 Okay.

I think I misunderstood.

(Which isn't very hard when a gal is still about half-asleep.)

>>6772200 It's one of those 'I saw the picture and a couple of sentences of a What if this happened! and came up with a story about it.' kinda deals. Also to say about the whole perspective of the story it's going to be in the first person PoV, What happened in the first chapter I have no idea why it was all over the place. That's my bad on my part.:twilightsheepish:

Comment posted by TheNotSOWittyOne deleted at 9:24pm on the 27th of December, 2015

I really like this story so far hope to read more soon

twilight the immortal dragon pony

>>6772324 twilight the Magic immortal dragon pony lol :P

>>6772337 haha yeah man when celestia is goanna see twilight

'as twilight walked into the room when celestia saw her celestia's mouth dropped to the floor for she had never seen a pony dragon hybrid before'

man it is goanna be so fun

>>6772394 lol yeah......... Oh god that's going to be fun to write :trollestia:

Murphy's law is constantly in effect

>>6771803 I'm going to be blunt. Get an editor. I was actually having some difficulty reading this, and I want to be able to read it for enjoyment, not decryption homework. I'd offer to do it myself, but I already have a overflowing plate of stuff I need to do. That being said, there are a few groups of people here on the site who'd gladly do so for you, and they shouldn't be hard to find either.

On the upside of this story. LOVE the idea, and I wait eagerly to see what happens When Twilight shows up. Ya know, at the wedding that her birth family is at, and the possible madness to ensue from it.

>>6772106 Agreed. This is painful to read. Great idea, but needs an editor like an infested house needs fumagated.

I'm looking forward to whatever happens in this.

Darnit, I wanted to write a story based on that same art after seeing it in an HiE thread. You actually seem to be kind of following the general path I would have taken too. I'd say it looks good, but with that said, such a compliment would be a bit self serving in my mind. :twilightsheepish: Can't wait to see more!

>>6771803

There are actually groups of people who are willing to act as editors. I'd recommend getting one or two to get a look at each chapter.

A unique idea in fimifiction? Good God the End of times is near!

I love it. i hope you makr more soon:pinkiehappy:.

>>6772597 And I'm one such editor who nearly had a stroke reading that. I'm busy till the fourth but after then I'll be more than happy to take a look and offer my two cents.

From what people are saying, I don't know if I could stand reading this. :unsuresweetie:  If the description was clearer, I'd be more inclined to give it a shot.  ...  Ah, what the heck.  I'll put it in Tracking and maybe read it later tonight. :twistnerd:  You should really fix the description though.  For instance, I can't tell if Twilight is part dragon now or what. :applejackconfused:  Congrats on making the featured box by the way.

>>6772474 Well I took what I said and this is what I can tell you........ Oh hell yeah I really do need a editor :ajbemused:

>>6772788 To answer your question, Twilight has dragon aspects such as Dragon scales, wings, claws, fangs, and eyes. How she get them, I'm going to lean on that she was raised by dragons and something with her magic and maybe the rainboom that happened when she was a filly.

Also This story was in the featured box:pinkiegasp:!really? I guessed I missed it.:twilightblush:

>>6772757 I may have an editor by then but I'll keep you in mind thanks and doing what you can do :twilightsmile:

>>6772562 Truth be told I saw the same thing, I just believed that by the time I got one chapter out some people will have their version out there

You need an editor, I could already spot out multiple grammar errors just in the summary. I'd be willing to help, though I  might be a bit slow at it *cough**cough*school*cough**cough*.

>>6772963 Well I was a bit slow to jump on it myself, I was working on something else that was part of a random idea I had. Now I'm considering whether or not it's still worth it to write up my own version when you've basically nailed it to a T when it comes to the general idea of how it'd start.

>>6772981 I know that I need an editor and I have been talking to people and I might have one by New years. I'm not trying to sound rude but I been told that I need one, hell even a moderator told me that lol

>>6772991 All I can say is that you should still make the story, it may have the same kind of setting but it may go off in a different direction then mine, and hell I would read it just to see a different view on things. :pinkiesmile:

>>6772414 yeah Tia's reaction will be epic.  But Shining's reaction, now that i can imagine is gonna be something else :rainbowlaugh:

I really like the idea, and cannot wait to read more. :pinkiehappy:

I hope the editors you've been talking to are able to help.  I'd offer as well, but grammatical editing is not my strong suite. :twilightblush:

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