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Daxn


Vidi Terram Novam, Vidi Caelum Novum. Terram, Terram Novam in Hanc Vitam! Mazda descedentem et absterget omnia dolori lacrimas!

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Principal Cinch, after suffering the humiliation that was the First Challange of the Friendship Games, has decided to resort to fight fire with fire, by forcing Twilight Sparkle- student extraordinarie and researcher of magic- to unleash the power she has sealed inside a peculiar device.

The trouble is, there's no garauntee that said magic will actually make the user stronger... or limit its effects to the bearer.


Alternate ending of the "The Friendship Games" EQG movie. Contains physical regression and, later on, diapers. Ye be warned.

Credit to the Stargrazer for the cover art.

Currently ShadowMane PX-41 is helping me writing this.

Chapters (12)
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Well, Svengallop just lost his place for worst jerk of all time...

After what she felt like it had been an eternity in covering her eyes, the ringing waned and she also felt a little bit more stronger and healthier than before. "Let us see what happened..." Principal Cinch said to herself as she lowered her arms to watch the ongoing mayhem.

This whole pare is extremely confusing. It doesn't make sense at all. Also waned? That's extremely archaic, subsided works a lot better in my personal opinion but that is really a stylistic choice :twilightsmile:! Also there is no reason to have it as "Let us" it should be "Let's".

"What. Has. Just. Happened." She said to herself, setting the glasses back on her nose and slowly turning her head on her right, and there many toddlers and children looking alike to her students, their bodies barely covered by their unfiroms- now too big and baggy for them. Some of them simply sat on the ground crying, others were huddled together either for warmth or safety, and others- the ones least effected or not at all effected by the apparent regression-inducing explosion- tried to pick up some of their less fortunate comrades buried under the piles of discarded clothes.

"What. Just. Happened?"

"Listen up, you disgrace!" Principal Cinch bellowed, as she mushed her nose against' Twilight's. "You have failed me immensely and thoroughly. You made me spend time and money to enroll your pretty face to Everton, and you repay me with this?! How dare you? Look at what you've done!"

Not much is actually wrong here but, I'm a little confused by the bold part! ^^ seems it doesn't need to be worded as a question.

"As for you," she shouted, keeping a crying Twilight under her left armpit. "Regression is no excuse to skip school! I shall call your parents now, so that they may bring you back home, but tomorrow, you'll come to school in your uniforms, no matter how oversized they are, and you will behave like the students of a prestigious school should, no matter how brown their underpants get! Was I clear enough!?"

May bring her home o.o I think they would bring her back home! :P

No one answered back to that, as the stundets were too busy in forming an organzied line by ptting themselves in rows, with the front ones composed by the most affected, passing throught a row compsoed by students regressed to second-graders, and the last row composed by the ones completley untocuhed by the magic's youthening powers. Principal Cinch smirked and nodded: she had always boasted that her students were nevver goign to break order no matter the circumnstances, and she was now having the definite proof of it.

Organized, students, putting, through, composed, never, circumstances. You spelled those wrong haha. There are more minor spelling errors and some other things I may have missed. Otherwise the story is pretty interesting, I'll follow it and try to post any further errors I find :twilightsmile:

What the hell, Cinch?! Twilight told you herself she didn't know how to control the magic or what it would do, so you're blaming her for an unintended event happening due to using magic she didn't know how to control, that you made her use, before she could figure out how to control it?


And why the hell isn't Cadance trying to stop Cinch and get Twilight away from that witch, she's Twilight's Sister-In-Law for crying out loud?! And what about the other Mane 6? Were they all reverted to babies to, it's the only reason i can think that they're not stopping her?

Also, how the hell does Cinch plan on making this call? She does realize she's going to sound like an utter nutter (a thank you) when she tells them their daughter and the majority of the student body are babies again, doesn't she?


Phew. Didn't think i'd rant on the first chapter, but there ya go.

Looking forward to the next chapter, if only cos i really wanna see how Cinch plans on explaining this to the school board. "Oh, i was forcing one of my students by blackmail to use magic she unintentionally stole from Canterlot High's students, magic i did not know the possible outcome of using and now the majority of my students, as well as Canterlot High's, but how cares about them, are babies, toddlers and the like. Oh, and we deserved to win the games because, despite my forcing my student to release the magic having caused this disaster."

Yeah, i can see that going over well for her

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Looking forward to the next chapter, if only cos i really wanna see how Cinch plans on explaining this to the school board. "Oh, i was forcing one of my students by blackmail to use magic she unintentionally stole from Canterlot High's students, magic i did not know the possible outcome of using and now the majority of my students, as well as Canterlot High's, but how cares about them, are babies, toddlers and the like. Oh, and we deserved to win the games because, despite my forcing my student to release the magic having caused this disaster."

same here

Glad to see this story's not dead.

Keep it up, Daxn.

How is Cinch fine with all these students being turned into kids and babies???

6831516 same i just can't wait for more. so do keep it up

Also, what about Sunset and the rest of the Shadow Six? You gonna leave them out of the equation too, Daxn?

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The Shadow Six are actually going to be the actual focus on the story, once I feel that Principal Cinch's POV has been done enough for my tastes. As for Sunset, not really going to figure in this story.

6833416 So, do you mean Baby Shadow Six?

Hoo-boy. What's going on now?

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Simple: many of The Academy's students did not go to school, so the few that did organize a parade to detail The situazione to Principal Cinch while also keeping in line with Crystal Academy's spirit (unity and stoicism to The pointless bitter end.)

6845795 my thoughts exactly after reading it

6844576 from what i can teal she is about to get the boot

Alright. Now we're getting into the deeper parts of the regression process...

Please make more chapters like this, Daxn.

But also, work on your grammar a little more...

Lemon Zest next?

Please make it so, and do it fast...

I'm getting a Twilight Velevet from From The Start vib from Sunny Flare's mom:fluttershyouch:

i want to see twilight and other and are Wonderbolts affect to or was crystal prep?

interest like to see more twilight and Principal Cinch's or dean Cadance or see how other mare 5 are think of this?

So who's next, Daxn? Indigo or Sugarcoat.

Personally, I's like to see you do Sugarcoat next, as I'm intrigued to see how she'd react the most...

And now we get Indigo.

Let's just hope she's more like Twilight and Rainbow Dash in terms of age...

People read AR fics for babies mostly.

Did sunset get hit with the age down or no. :rainbowhuh:

Well. That happened...

Also, what the actual hell is with the italian stuff in these stories, Daxn? I've tolerated it for a while now, but the fact that almost every chapter you publish has something that I won't look up due to time constraints just really frazzles my nerves.

Oh, and also, this story's really starting to tumble in quality due to both the punctuation, the characterizations, and many more. Now, I don't mean to sound narcissistic here, but I believe that I could write a much better Age-Regression fic than this...

Oh well, at the very least, you tried. You tried to spice things up, but you took a number of stumbles and almost shot every arrow in your bag. If you can't turn it all around in the next chapter with both your writing and your plot, then I'm gonna have to drop out.

Now, I'm not in anyway rude, but in the words of Sugarcoat: "You're really bad at this!"

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Also, what the actual hell is with the italian stuff in these stories, Daxn? I've tolerated it for a while now, but the fact that almost every chapter you publish has something that I won't look up due to time constraints just really frazzles my nerves

Well, technically the Phos Hilaron is a Greek chant. Not that it makes it much better, I guess.


Also, the tumbles should not surprise you. I expected them, considered I pulled them out of my ass in frustration at the plot bunny of this story hothering me at inappropriate times. Reading my other stories should tell you how good can I really write, given time and more effort, but, this time, I wanted to see if writing as fast as I could and getting rightfully criticized was going to stop that shit or not (which would mean changingmy writing strategy entirely, as I would write everything up beforehand, then publish chapters on whatever schedule I wish)

“I will take it as a yes,” Cinch said, while typing in her husband’s phone number. “Anyways, now that your parents have been called, I can pass to call my dear husband Sombra to prepare himself to see me like his old flame again.”

OMG SOMBRA IS HER HUSBAND!!!??? GAH!!!!!!!! SO CRAZY!!!!

I love how you re-did it, I still loved the old version but it's a lot better now!

The Book to equestrian send a message to princess twilight about so she get contact her parent! or one the princess may like second change at teach her right.

6991049 that is provided the book is still able to reach equestria after SciTwi took the portal's magic. Maybe it return after the release, but we don't know that yet.

Of course, even if Twilight could get in contact with Sunset's parents, i'm not sure how well it would go

6993621 you are really know how ruin things.don't you. Plus sunset send early in movie.

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Plus, that is assumimg that anyone else but Sunsest and the other girls know about the book.

I'm glad you didn't give up on the story all together when you cancelled it :twilightsmile::twilightsmile:

i hope sunset is doing ok! i am worry for her.

where Equestria twilight? so sunset go home to Equestria and be with her real family?

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Nowhere to be seen.

7025801 What! she should arrive! sunset send a message to her hours ago!

Where is equestria twilight to get sunset so she can go home?

7027330 I agree with that where is she?

Daxn? Sometimes she's Battery Acid, other times, she's Sweeten Sour. Pick one, or your viewers are gonna call you out formit.

The same can be said with Deicer/Good Bad. Only one name fits. Your choice.

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7027342 What do you two think of Baby Indy, Sour, and Sunny?

7029085 Unknow right now. I'm only consuring with sunset!

7029085 I'm more ingress with twilight and sunset!

Why haven't equestria twilight for sunset should have right to be with her really parents?!

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