(Crossover with The Old Republic. Its more based on the time period then the game but I used both as a source.) (Takes place after season 4 but before season 5.)
Santhal a Sith Warrior (marauder class) finds himself stranded in Equestria. In a land of peace and harmony will he be driven to the brink or just maybe come to appreciate the ways of these pony creatures he's encountered.
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Credit for opening crawl goes to Deadreaderz.
Some revisions were made to chapter 1.
Chapters (4)
interesting possibilities. I'll follow.
not bad, I'll follow. But I regret to say that this chapter, while pretty good start, feels a little cheap.
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How so?
6764600 Well, In my option, you went a little fast.
You placed the entrance of a new planet, finding an alien, waking up in a "hospital", and first introductions, so cramped up that it feels like it's on fast forward.
Now to be fair, you did a Ok job of the introduction of the Ponies and the Sith warrior, but maybe you could add a bit more detail.
for EX:
That isn't enough to tell us anything, and the only reaction the ponies have is simple amazement. Perhaps, you could take to hole history of the two sides into parts for the ponies to learn as time (Chapters) go on. (I know Twilight would be interested on the differences of the Force and magic)
I look forward to your next instalment. 
You still need to resolve the problem that he is a user of the Dark side (forced to or not), I don't think Rainbow and most of the Princesses would just put it off, at lest for long.
My last request is probably the biggest. Your OC, Santhal, seems to have no emotion (and from a sith that is surprising XD (bad joke)) I just don't see much of a personality, oh he has options, but that doesn't tell me who he is. Please fix this.
From that, all I can ask is you could add a bit more detail on how the Ponies or the warrior feels or thinks about the situation.
I'll keep watching because of the penitential in the future, how would he adapt to the Pony world, how would they adapt to a Sith warrior ( And killer) and the politics! how would a divided world react to this relation, would they pick a side? would they hate their visitor. Or would you ignore it all together.
SO MANY OPPORTUNITIES!
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You make some valid points. I'll keep them in mind and maybe make some edits.
6764795 thank you for being civil.
Ok so I recently saw the new Star Wars movie, and will see it again with familiar you soon so I am still on Star Wars high... I'm going to track this story since this looks like a good idea.
6764743 I agree with you on that, I feel if I never played any of the KotOR or TOR games (Knights of the Old Republic and The Old Republic) I would have no idea about the Sith or the Sith Empire. In my opinion, try using less time skips. That made me seem like the chapter was rushed leaving out detail like you pointed out above with describing the main factions.
Since I been a lot Nerdy on Star wars right now since the newest one, I found this interesting Star wars crawl creator website that lets you make your own crawl.
It's good that I made your crawl so tell me what you think?
But, there's like 2 downside:
1.)Seems there's no way to leave it blank, even when I want it to put the episode part blank, so I just like "screw it, I putting this as BOOK I."
2.) The crawl is so slow that it ended despite it didn't show the whole backstory, so you might wanna type some small words, but luckily your text is short enough to show the whole intro.
Overall, I made the crawl for you, and hopefully you'll enjoy it.
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Awesome! Will use.
Not bad, I´m interessted, while I know the online game, and the possibility to be a good Jedi, he kind of sounded like he wanted to be a Jedi, but didn´t had a choice, then again even if I´m not sure if I understand his personality already, he seem to be some sort of grey Jedi/Sith.
I said not bad, because even if I´m in a better mood, I just don´t really get in the mood to enjoy it completely today, since I always have to think about something important. I was informed about something while I have vacation, and now I´m just nervous about it.
Made some changes to ch. 1.
Keep writing you got me interested.
Yes please keep writing liking it so far I love star wars and seeing this kind of mix is awesome with THE SITH!
I hope he doesn´t let Celestia and the others change him to much, he seems more or less more realistic than them. He should maybe open their eyes.
I actually like the game ideas, like the one from Shin Megami Tensei, where neither ultimate good, or ultimate evil is a good thing. Usually the middle thing, the grey zone (grey Jedi?) is the best you can get.
she starts to look like the stupid, stubborn good side final boss.
Not sure if that exactly happens in any Star Wars movie, but I guess the eye thing is the special stuff in this story right?
Well overall it was a good chapter, till now I like his personality, I would like it if he would continue a rather grey zone, that he knows when you can´t smile your enemys into submission. I guess that descibes it the best at the moment.
So far Santal is making an impression that he does not hesitate to use the dark side yet still has some compassion for other lifeforms.
6830696 heh.... although my main toon in SWTOR is a Merc, I always play my Warrior and Marauder as grey sith, with their actions all being influenced by my mood that day, and what has gone on that day. For example, the day before the Paris Attacks in Novemver, I was almost all light-sided choices, while the day after I was exclusively dark-sided as a van to vent a bit in a relatively less destructive way than, say, shooting several thousand dollars of assault rifle ammo down range at the local gun range like my brother did.
I would like to have a new chapter please.
Show Sombra the true power of the Dark Side of The Force, show him no mercy.
Is this story canceled?
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It's not canceled I'm just not sure when I'll get back to it or my other stories.
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Oh ok
I don't know if i should But i will have hope and wait to this series to continue