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Applejack abandons her pie deliveries out of worry and goes back to check on her little sister who's home alone. As a result, she winds up acting extremely over-protective to Apple Bloom, to the point of stalking her.
But what if, instead of sneaking out to make the pie deliveries herself, Apple Bloom snapped and said something in a fit of anger that cut deep into her sister's soul?
An alternate take on Somepony to Watch Over Me
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That line with Apple Bloom would cut deep, especially if we didn't see the Perfect Pear in the first place (or maybe after seeing it too).
This was really good. Liked reading it.
I love these "What If?" scenario structured stories, they're always great. 😃
You made an awesome and heartwarming story out of one of my least favorite episodes!
Yeah...
Technically AB, that wasn’t an actual mountain to begin with
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Ouch...
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Truer words have never been spoken Pear
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Yes, exactly
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It’s alright AB, I forgive you
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Apples to the Core
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Reference to the actual episode
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She is, she really is...
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Me too, I’m actually planning to do a series regarding that
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Cool. 😄 I'm thinking of posting this MLP horror story I had in mind for a while. ^^
“What If” stories are usually hit or miss. This one however hit the bullseye.
Meh.
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I’d love to see it
Bittersweet cute. Rather well written, especially in regards to the small backstory behind Buttercup and Bright Mac. I also added this story to a few groups for you, so enjoy that.
Oh the feels were so damn strong & well written too. This is "What if" one-shot makes me wish that this had happened, instead of what we got.
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I'm a post a preview of it in a blog sometime. 😄
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Nice
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I posted a preview blog just now, but it's not the horror story, it's for my main MLP story I thought of for 3 years. 😄
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Cool 😎
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Thanks. 😊 I'll post the horror story preview hopefully soon. ^^
( I see you use the pony emojis, I'm probably the only one that doesn't like using those XD )
This is the kind of character development I crave for the show. This is so well written.
This should’ve been the ending for the episode
Is the title a play on Slipping Through my Fingers and by extent a reference to the ABBA song of the same name???
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DING DING! We have a winner!
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Yay!
Nicely done
You took a cringy episode and made it into something very heartwarming and feelsy. Well done.
Holy cow this was an amazing story to read. I'm kinda half and half on the actual episode, but found this to be awesome. If this had actually happened in the actual episode, I would've loved it.
Man, I hate that it took me so long to get to reading this story.
Great work, man, really excellent stuff.
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It's okay, glad you enjoyed it and that your trip went well.
Fuller review here, but in brief: definitely preferable in my book to the show's take on this. I liked the flashback, but felt there was a bit too much of it. The "single tear" is a huge cliché too, but for the most part this is pretty readable stuff.
I. AM. SOBBING.
This is Exactly how I feel about my little girl growing up, and the same advice my mom gave me. Plus the Mamma Mia reference is so badass. This story really touched something deep inside of me. You really captured the bond AJ had with Buttercup. I applaud you, and all of your hard work. This is truly a masterpiece. Thank you so much for sharing this with us. It really does make everything so worth it. Thank you, from the bottom of my heart.
Here, have a baby Dashie.
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This would have been a better ending. Well written.
Slipping through my fingers all the time
I try to capture every minute
The feeling in it
Slipping through my fingers all the time
Do I really see what's in her mind
Each time I think I'm close to knowing
She keeps on growing
Slipping through my fingers all the time..
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Replace fingers with hooves...
What it made me think of!
You’ve gone too far, Apple bloom
Made more sense than what actually happened and it would have been interesting to see an interaction between Applejack and her mother.
personally I thought she should have done it during the show. Her sister was acting crazy overprotective. Even babies don't get codled that much.
It made me cry.
Going in my favorites.