This story is a sequel to The Conversion Bureau EarthGate Saga: Through the EarthGate
Book2B of the EarthGate Saga.
The Star Officers, lead by Admiral Sevin Truax XCVIII of the Hierarchical Stellar Empire (male)
The Funesti, lead by Governess Susan N‘Gahli CII of the Confederation of Funestia
The Observers, lead by President Tom Seminazzi C of the Observant Confederation
These three nations are of human decent, and as such are very ticked off about Earth's current state. They start to eagerly rally around the Clerisy's Crusade to heal the Earth. With their combined strength, they will bring down judgement upon the Equestrian Oppressors.
Lapis Opal Amethyst, youngest of the three children of the late Rubeus Obsidian Diamond, is a private in the Equestrian Special Forces. But after a promotion from Celestia herself, Lapis finds herself under a lot of pressure to live up to her family name. What will become of this Crystal hybrid?
Trixie was one of the ponies to openly support the Anti-potion movements. As such, she is currently on the run, constantly searching for a safe haven where she can be safe from Celestia's clutches. Will she find her safe haven in time?
This has the makings of a good addition to the Saga! it just needs some polish, some spelling and grammar errors removed, and it might do pretty well! Just a couple things irk me here that I have to say right now: It's "Funestis", not "Funestus", and it's "Clerisy", not "Clericy". Also, the hybrid pony's name was just way too long. I'd suggest trimming it down a bit, for the name's a mouthful.
Also, please post in the timeline thread in the forum when these events take place so the Book 2 timeline can be updated accordingly.
6805422 Thanks for the advice and the fave!
If this is you first story then good job, needs a bit of cleaning up which can easily be done w/ an editor but if not then all i can say is you can do better. Also slow done the pace just a bit because to me it seemed a bit to fast switching between all the factions, but whatever floats you boat.
6807370 Thanks for the advice! I'll try and keep it in mind!
6809688 no prob i enjoy helping others get better at their skills, also if you need an editor i will gladly do so for you, i mean i helped Dolphy and look at where he is know.
6810714 Actually, Dolphy suggested that I ask you to be my editor, for this fic at least. I was gonna PM you about that when I got the chance, but you brought it up here, so I thought, why not instead take you up on the offer here? I'll need some way to get the Gdocs files to you, though.
6811058 i'll PM you my gmail
Pony ships are gonna get rekt.
6822680 Well, yes, they will meet much opposition, that doesn't necessarily mean they won't get a minor modicum I'd success before they are driven back.
the entire equestrian space based campain is dependant on one thing. the fact they are using converted human ships that are basicly ireplaceable if they are lost they will lose air supiriority and their transports if they don't make a spell to get to landnade
6922397 That's the point. We're here to cripple the Equestrian Oppressors, after all.
FIRE IN THE HOLE, Celestia is screwed undoutably
sir, i came here expecting explosions of world ending proportions explained in blistering detail, with fancy words, i have got none of this but yet i read on, why because these stories are fascinating, also I'm bored.
7929594 Hey thanks. And sorry about the cliffhanger- I just felt like this would be a great way to hook people in anticipation for the sequel. Now, regarding that, I have no clue when I'll get that out- after all, I want to wait until Dolphy Blue Drake finishes his story that's like a companion to this one, The Conversion Bureau EarthGate Saga: Prisoner of War and starts its sequel. Who knows how long that'll take? So brace yourself for what might be a very long wait.
7929682 bracing and shoring up the defenses will commence immediately, also pestering the other author will commence very soon as soon a P.R. Get's back to us.
brain command to memory: sucessful
Before I read this, what is the Gore tag for ?
And how bad does it get ?
8077696 The gore is only really ever "implied" in this fic. It doesn't get too bad, hence why it's only Teen.
Will this get finished