A new pony has arrived in Ponyville on the day of Summer Sun Celebration. Who is he? He's nice but when the residents of the town learn more about him, even more unanswered questions seem to pop up.
Can anypony figure out this mystery?
Probably when they actually ask the right question.
Are they going to?
No
Will he interfere with events?
We'll see.
This is just an idea I had and wrote by hand (later edited onto a computer) in a matter of a few hours. I have no delusions that this is a perfect story. Just some fun I had when writing out ideas. For the most part it will focus on different ponies crossing paths with him as the series goes on and not directly follow him. This IS technically a Human in Equestria story but by no means is he ordinary, both in body and mind as you will notice in the first chapter. He WILL be unrealistic, so please no comments about him not reacting to the situation like a normal person.
As for the back story of the character, I had originally included it but at second glance, I felt it would be better for both people inside and outside of the story to figure it out.
The amazing artwork was done by Mix-up. You can check out his other artworks on his Deviant Art page.
Not bad. Looking forward to the next chapter!
P.S. FIRST!
normally i don't like human turning into pony fics but this seems to
make me smile for some reason i really like it it's cute
Huh, that was actually rather interesting. I always enjoy stories with a premise like this, especially where it's from the ponies perspective so you can see their confusion and theories.
However, the only part I didn't really like was Fluttershy's idea as to why he would mention being a quadruped again. Mainly, it's hard to imagine her coming to that conclusion because it makes no sense. First, why would he say it like that? Why wouldn't he instead say something like, "Oh wow, I got my leg back!"? Second, regaining a lost limb would probably lead to a reaction a little more intense than simple amusement.
Still, an interesting story so far.
That fic looks cool ! I want the rest now. Looking forward for more !
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In my mind that was the ONLY conclusion someone could come to, because I doubt any type of transformation their world has can make THAT kind of shift. So I figured that was the best shot in the dark anyone can guess. Not the best explanation but I'm sticking with it.
I'm not sure where he comes from or anything but it seams intersting, I'd like to see a bit of a higher wordcount on the next chapters though...
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You know, that was honestly what I thought of at first, but then as I thought more about it I realized that they actually have quite a few examples of shape shifting. The spells Twilight use to change the fruit (including turning a frog into an orange, or was it the other way around?), turning those mice into horse like things, the changelings, and similar things.
So I could actually see it either way. Enough so that I don't really see it as a minor issue anymore. It's still interesting though.
Alright, just read the second chapter. Still rather interesting, but I'm seeing more and more errors popping up with grammar. Do you have a beta reader? If not, I'd highly recommend looking around on the site to see if someone would be willing to help. As it stands, there were a few places where I had to go back and reread a few times to finally get the meaning. Also, there was this part:
Honestly, no matter how many times I read this I just can't figure out the meaning. What does his coat and mane color have to do with anything? Like, it's honestly left me utterly baffled trying to figure out what any of this means.
6755353 Don't forget the Breezy episode. Twilight knows a shapeshifting spell. Heck, Rainbow Dash wanted Twilight to turn her into a griffon!
I've seen those episodes but at no point do they change physiology into bipedal shape, each example is still a technical quadruped, if there ever is a point when there is a shift from quadruped to upright biped, without the use of ancient mirrors, then I will concede your point. Though I won't retract what I wrote.
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Ya, the drop in grammar could be attested to my own negligence or the fact I wrote this and the next chapter on my phone. I have no real drive to get a beta reader because this isn't something I feel deserves that kind of serious consideration.
As for that quote, quite honestly my thought process of that was "I wonder why Rarity doesn't like green in Boast Busters, maybe because she associates it with the ground and other dirty things, headcanon" again not a good excuse but that's my reasoning.
I give a chuckle.... 'I call it my poker'
Hmmm, at first I thought this felt rushed, but so far I am greatly enjoying it!
Another sweet chapter, this is building to something I hope?
I am liking this a lot. Who is next?
I'll bet he and Pinkie will hate each other for no reason
Seeing your own misgivings in the summary I had my doubts but this was an pretty enjoyable first chapter.
Good work.
Nice work.
I'm enjoying this so far. Do post more chapters post haste, my good Author!
Awesome fic man. I'm eager to see more.
...That might be intentional but just in case... You do know that peach is this shade, but Fluttershy is this shade? It might be hard to tell the difference, especially on this background, but peach is more pink, and Fluttershy's coat is yellow.
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I didn't know there was that much of a difference, but calling it peach sounded more adorable then saying yellow. So yes it is now intentional
Another nice chapter. You captured Pinkie Perfectly!
Applejack next?
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Applejack is last but only because I have something special planned for chapter 7, completely not canon or makes any sense but I just HAVE to do it
I agree, too much is simply too much, but I tend to enjoy a story where it happens at least once in a while, since it pretty much happens in the show, Pinkie shaking the camera for one is a great example.
6758487 She is my favorite, I look forward to your rendition
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I'll try my best, but if you're going to expect some southern twang, then I'm afraid I'll have to disappoint. I've no real experience with that so the best I'll get is replacing 'I' with 'Ah' and the occasional 'ya'll'
Season 5, badass rainbow.
P.S. not bad, i gonna track this and read.
Hehe, funny.
Those two got along far too well for my peace of mind...
Funny.
Did he tip the waiter?
Another well done chapter. Keep them coming, good sir!
When he done meeting main six, but he still not meet the other pony. Like mayor mare
and some other pony.
P.S. It's better, he doesn't follow the main six. If will be... "Not unique story - Yeah... we have already met someone do this before twice"
+ Human wakes up in the Everfree Forest.
+ Human takes apple(s) from Applejack's Orchard.
- Human chased by timberwolves
- Human gets magic
- Human gets other assorted super power
- Human enters into romantic relationship with mane 6
- Long annoying flashback that eats up at least one chapter that nobody actually wants to read
- Human wakes up in Ponyville
- Human makes friends with mane 6 within 72 hours of entering Equestria
- Human possesses foreknowledge of MLP
- Human freaks out about foreknowledge altering the timeline.
- Human goes out of their way to alter the timeline
(Note: i'm gonna borrow some text)
Well we're at 8 9 10, thus far, which is better than a lot of HiE stories. Then again it's hard for most to have an original HiE story opening. It really nice he talk like that, not some crazy "BIP". Let's see how this goes.
Maybe make a joke about Nightmare Moon? Just make every pony in town think...
Martin... you are a Wizard!
P.SS
And then, Twilight have a flashback. I like this guy. several! damm right!
While some pony's
and waves his hives at her while making
1: ponies.
2: waved his hooves.
Just a couple typos that slipped through.
I'm really loving the way this story is going. I like how you're showing it from the perspective of the ones he interacts with, but I don't see it lasting forever, is it going to change after chapter 7 if you go further than that? Or do you want to leave it a surprise?
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Don't worry, he won't actively follow any of them, if they leave town then they won't encounter him. As he explained he needs to stay put in order for his friends to find him
6762308 Thank you. It's gonna great. Oh, and... More words - details ok?
P.S. Just done fix my comments.
P.S. Again, Martin... Sound like Martin mystery.
upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/e/e1/Martin_Mystery_cast.jpg
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There's no definite right now, but it's after 8 things really start to change formula. Chapter 8 will be the series premier ending, with the end of Nightmare Moon. If I can get creative like I want to, then he will have personal episodes where each character will try to delve deeper into his past and/or present.
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Oh, uh, about details, yaa, that bit was always my weakest part of writing. I'm horrible with thinking of descriptions. I'm a more dialogue driven kind of writer, that's why this focuses more on what they say and what they think. There will definitely be more words after chapter 8 because the first few chapters are just each individual characters first impression of our protagonist.
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I loved that show as a kid, I actually had no motivation for Martin's naming, it just had a ring to it when I combined it with his best friend. Just saying Martin and Theo together felt right.
6762340 Now that explain the way he talk now. Now i really miss that show.
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this is an interesting story so far, it is certainly interesting to see a human with so much chipper attitude in his personalty and that he is more curious about the world and easily goes to interact with the natives of this world to understand it more about it instead of just trying to hide the fact that he is human from the rest of the population. Seeing that he doesn't seem to really try to be discrete in his exploration, I don't mind the fact that this story start at the first MLP episode like it has been done so many times before. I am intrigued on what is going to happen next and I am looking forward in seeing more of this story in the future.
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Honestly, I think that's getting to the point of putting too much thought into things. She just doesn't like the color, especially since it doesn't look very good on her.
The reason the explanation in the story doesn't make any sense is that all ponies no matter if they are pegasus, unicorn, or earth pony have a ridiculously wide variety of colors.
Of course, I definitely have a bias regarding that, since I've never been very fond of head canon being introduced into a story when it is either unnecessary, or if the actual canon has an answer.
I fell out of my chair that is all.
I wonder if she'll realize the joke upon reflection, and still be upset like Twilight was with the friendship spell, or accept the joke and that she got played being the straight mare.
Martin used Headbutt. It was Super Effective!
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There won't be a follow up scene to that chapter, but I think her family would explain what was actually happening and she'd want to apologize for yelling at him when he was actually telling her.
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Then again, he did choose the names. I bet he did it as a joke to entertain the other workers, or do you think he was oblivious to the issues it could cause?
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I had it set up as him being oblivious, yes.
So, we have a guy with an upbeat mind, and a history of at least one series of transformations. And also having an interesting start for a story around him. Definetly going on my watchlist.
Since his name is Martin we can assume he started out as a human. He then stated that he is a quadrupled again (not a pony), so he did at least two transformation beforehand. Now let's start the conspiracy theories about his origins during these chapters!