• Member Since 30th May, 2012
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Ripcord


I dont like teh biographies, or geography for that matter anyways.

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I woke up in my cell again, the magic barrier prevents me from experiencing anything beyond the confines of my cell. My only contact with the outside world is the occasional visit from the doctor. I'm not crazy, not mad or insane, I'm just a test subject. My name is subject 7, the tests done on me are excruciating and almost kill me, but something deep inside me burns. A fire that tells me to live on for one day I will be free.....and that day came sooner then I thought.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 10 )

It's a good start. Keep it up.

Amazing start to what I believe to be an amazing story.

This is a wonderful concept, and I found myself really enjoying every idea that you were throwing at us. However, there are a lot of errors here. I highly recommend that you hunt down an editor that can help with fixing this. Good luck!

Yup. A proofreader is highly recommended.

Alright, well then I'm going to take your advice and find a proofreader, or an editor either way thanks :derpytongue2:

Loved it:heart:!
I found one mistake on paragraph 4. "I spear was sent into my back" replace the I.

I think you mean Apple Bloom not Apple Blossom. There are also a few spelling mistakes, but nothing too bad.

Found a spelling mistake: When 7 arrived at twilight's to hide the poem. Twilight said 'I already so it'

Found another. The paragraph after " I promise you'll be safe" I whispered to myself. There is a missing letter "W were nearing"

I don't know whether to laugh or cry at that one:facehoof:

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