and I just feel my hole throat close up for a few seconds.

That should be "whole".

Velvet pretended not to see Shining roll her eyes yet again

Should be "his"

Nice to see some family bonding~

I love how you care about actually creating a relationship between the two of them. Makes it all the sweeter.

7009615 I know right, It actually makes it more arousing, down boy, down john

“Crossbows?” Velvet asked inquisitively. “I figured they’d teach you how to use the weapons that you’d hold at your post, but never thought they’d teach you firearms.”

Since when is a crossbow a firearm?