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Arcanum Symphonis


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Twilight's annual assessment is coming up, and she must go to Canterlot to visit her mentor. She decides to practice a spell that's sure to impress, but it goes horribly wrong, with potentially disastrous consequences. Princess Celestia and her sister Princess Luna are forced to pick up the pieces that remain while maintaining a cover on the scandal.

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Twilight's magic fails somehow. The results can be comedic, romantic, or even horribly dark, but it's always a messy magical mishap from our mane mare. How often has that been used now? It's almost too easy.

Anyway, this is something I came up with while trying to break through my writer's block on my other story. It'll probably be 2 or 3 chapters long, but if people enjoy it enough, I might extend it.

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Comments ( 53 )

:applecry: Can we have more?

1.21 giga-arisuns, eh? I see what you did there.

"...And that, students, is why you don't mess with time magic during lightning storms!"

Well, usually I don't dig the "Twilight messes up a spell" trope, but I'm interested to see where this goes...

38344 Great Scott, you figured it out! I had originally put in random numbers, but I saw an opportunity and went with it.

Poor Twilight. :rainbowlaugh:

I'm always happy to see a story focusing on Celestia and Twilight and this looks like it might be quite interesting. I'll be looking forward to seeing more of this. A question though, does this spell effect Twilight's memory or would it just effect her emotional control given that she's been turned to a week old filly?

Oh wow, this looks awesome.

Can't wait for the updates.

this is wicked cool hope you update this soon:twilightsmile::heart:

:facehoof: Okay, this one I'm not completely happy with, but it's done and I can move on. Sometimes you just need to write a chapter made of nothing before you can write anything interesting; if you try to skip it, it just jumps too far and you have a big gap in the middle. Still, it's over with now.

I just spent this chapter having Celestia taking care of an adorable young child; otherwise, nothing really happens. If you enjoy it anyway, good for you. If you don't, I can understand, and I can assure you it will (probably) get better.

This is adorable. I want more. I crave more. I need more.

Poor Twilight so it seems she did lose her memories.

Hmm Twilight seems to be partially there at least. For she was able to give limited responses. Could be that she is more or less in a state of shock, and is mostly running off a week old foals instincts. Would like to see some more of this from Twilight's perspective.

PS:Can't wait for Celestia to have to explain this to Luna.

It wasn't that bad Arcanum. A bit slow but it did have its cute moments with the interaction between filly!Twilight and Celestia, and it'll be interesting to see how Celestia reacts to being a 'working mom' so-to-speak given how see doesn't seem to have much knowledge of children in this and is wanting to keep Twilight a secret. :trollestia:

The only thing that I found odd was that Celestia not bothering to check Twilight's balloon to see if there might be any clues that can probably be put off for clues, but I guess that could be put off on her being to surprised at seeing what happened to Twilight and then being to worn out by the time she had the time.

46655 Or just plain busy keeping Twilight occupied and happy (and keeping the situation secret). Seriously, kids take a huge chunk out of the life you once had.

Also, I was quite tired writing this one; you may be able to tell from the fairly rushed-looking second half. I'll try to speed things up a little, keep the pace flowing. I reckon two, maybe three more chapters could see an end to it already. I never intended it to be long anyway.

Urk! *gasps* Too sweet! Someone call Wilford Brimley and/or his mustache! I am in need in diabeetus medical supplies!

HAHAHAHA! What will happen in the end? Some (Un)lucky stallion will have to sire her foal just so she can be a mother? That would be:derpyderp2:......don't know. Definitely a comedy i will awaits development.:rainbowlaugh:

46802 Hahaha, interesting thought there. I'm doing this one semi-"on-the-fly": I've got an ending planned out, but I'm writing each chapter as I go, with no forethought into how the next chapter will turn out. I've got three or four different paths it could take, and which one it takes will be down to my whim at time of writing. I've scrapped chapters that have been almost complete simply because I want to take it in another direction.

...perhaps that's part of why it takes to long for me to update...I guess I should stop that.

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Know what you mean. And with Twilight as bright as she is, it's probably even worse.

But seriously I liked this chapter. Is there any chance that we might get to see Celestia go 'mother bear' at some point?

50731 I...I'll admit, I have literally no idea what you mean by that.

Anyway, glad you liked it. Knowing that just means I can slack off- *cough* I mean, I'm not so pressured into making it spectacular; if you liked that, then I don't have to put so much effort into writing, and I can hopefully bring out chapters a little faster.

So update? :twilightsmile:

57521 ...yeah, overtime at work. Haven't been getting back until about 9, and I have to be up at 5 the next morning, so I haven't really had time. Perhaps half-an-hour here, 45 minutes there.

It's Friday, though, so I'm getting to work on it now. May have it done by tonight, but more likely chapter 3 will be up tomorrow during the day some time - after about 11, as I have some overtime to do this Saturday too. (Note: I live in the UK, so my times will be GMT. You should know which time zone you live in, so that gives you an idea of when I may be done local time.)

Basically that as smart (and driven) as Twilight is that the baby version of her is probably going to even active and curious about her surroundings then most baby's are.

=D Love this story already, can't wait for the next part.

Can't wait for update, this is a good story so far.

Interesting plot. This puts a very unique twist on the 'Twilight messes up a spell' concept. I honestly can't wait to see where you'll be going with it. It isn't 5 stars-- for me, rarely anything ever is; but this is one of the few that are pretty darn close. Kudos on that short poem/rhyme in the beginning too; The Equestrian Princess' Mare. . . a very adorable title.

ONE POINT TWENTY ONE JIGGAARISUNS! GREAT SCOTT!

Oh, whoops. This is what happens if you don't read the other comments before posting :twilightblush:

I'm liking where this is going!

118878 Very soon! Perhaps tomorrow! I'm working on it right now!

Explanation: I had hoped to write something over Christmas, but noooo. My family decided that for half the time I'd be "with them as a family", and the other half of the time I'd be redecorating the dining room. I had almost no time whatsoever for writing, and what little time I did have was unproductive, mostly thanks to the large amounts of turkey sandwich I had to devour; I can't work on an empty stomach, but I can't work on an over-filled one either.

Now that I'm back at work, I should have more time. (Wow, I never thought I'd say that.)

hope you update soon not to rush you but i'm ill so often i have nothing to do but read and play my ds though i think it's great so far :heart::heart:

Are any updates in the works? I was sifting through my tracked stories and noticed this waaay in the back.

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Right, sorry about that. Work, games (stupid addictive LoL) and other things have been keeping me from writing a bit more than I had expected - plans for my sister's wedding in June certainly not the least of them - but I am now making time for it. Chapter three is in the works and a fair way along, and the story will likely be over by chapter 5 or 6.

Again, thank you for your patience, and I'm really, really sorry for the wait. How long has it been, 3 months? I promise I'll have it out soon.

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Completely understandable. Life always takes precedence over fanfiction. Congrats to your sister on the wedding. Take your time.

Also, I desperately tried to implement the words Time Never Dreamed as a joke when writing this comment. I tried, but I failed. I just thought you should know.

499393

Shame. I love a good, awful pun as much as the next guy. (My gaming group don't call me the Pungeon Master for nothing, you know.)

Still, I would have, in all my time, never dreamed that others would like my silly little scrawls and scraps of ideas so much. I'll be sure to repay that by finishing this story in due time.

...*cough*. Yeah. That worked. I think. (Also, to be honest, the title was one of those random things I came up with as a last-minute thing. I never think about titles until it's time to upload, and then it's just whatever comes out of my head first. The title for my next story has already been decided, though.)

Can't wait for the next chapters :yay:

So long without a update to such a lovely and unique story :raritycry:

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Not any more, thanks to your comment. I won't be able to do anything tonight or tomorrow, but I've finally (finally!!) set aside Saturday to get on with it. Chapter 3 was already a good way done, but I may have to go through and re-read/re-write some of it. Hopefully I should have something by the end of the weekend.

And I know I've said it many times already, but this time I will. Or you can just shoot me. Either or.

EDIT: Geez, has it really been nearly a year since I first posted this? Ouch. I thought Varanus with Composure was bad.

Aww I could never shoot you. I love this plot. Although... I will sick fluttershy on you if you take too long. :flutterrage:

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You may have noticed I'm a bit of a Grammar Nazi around these parts. It's "sic" when used in that form. Type it in. There's no wiggly red line there.

Anyway, I'll get on with it at the weekend, and I'll be sure to finish it soon after...if starting writing again renews the joy it gave me before. As I kept saying before, this was never meant to be long, but it was too long for me to make a one-shot.

1622185 Ok. Thanks for the heads up. I saw it in a story earlier as 'sick' but i thought it might have been wrong.

whoa wait? Will we for realsies be getting a new chapter? will it be long will there be luna please let there be luna.

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Well, I'll be taking a break for the episode, but I'll get on it, and I'll try and get it out by the end of Sunday (though I aim for a Saturday release).

As for Luna's involvement, I'm not saying anything.

Neato. Celestia as a caretaker/mother? Oh wow, there are so many ways that could be spun into amusing chaos. :rainbowlaugh:

I hate finding dead fics. Especially good ones. Someone give this a Phoenix Down.

i am sorry to bug you i was just wondering if by any chance you know when you might post next chapter :fluttershysad: i understand that life can get in the way and i don't want to rash you or anything i just asking if you don't know that is okay and take your time on making a grate chapter

Is this dead because I like it

Sorry for bugging you but are you going to post a new chapter or is this story dead?

sorry for bugging you yet again but do you by any chance know when the next chapter will be posted???

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