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Co-authored with my sister, Darkstar38

Princess Celestia has a bad habit. Politics sometimes get in the way of making smart choices. In a busy life, it's hard not to cut a few corners sometimes.

To Princess Luna, this is not an appropriate excuse. She plans on invaiding her sister's dreams and showing her the true repercussions of her problem.

Written in two days as a part of the 8th F--k this prompt writing competition.

Now with edits by OkemosBrony

Awesome Art by: KP-Shadow Squirrel

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Comments ( 52 )

Why does this feel dark to me?

How will she "reunite the original six elements of harmony" when Twilight went bang?

Comment posted by Semaj deleted Dec 15th, 2015

The solution is more changlings obviously

6731584
At first we wanted to make it go on and on with more random ponies who were replaced. Unfortunately we had a deadline to meet...

When did Rarity get replaced I wonder?

6731600
I'll be honest... We don't know either.

Yeah! How dare Celestia not look for Rainbow Dash! A Princess of Equestria shouldn't act like this! By the way, Luna, did you go and look for Rainbow Dash? You know, being a princess and all. Just checking.

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Luna= Hypocrite

6731690 Then why doesn't Discord show her how much of one she is?

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Honestly, from the way she reacted at the sight of her 'friends' when the masquerade finally started to fall apart, I could see Rarity as the only member of the original mane six that wasn't a changeling at that point.

6731938
That did cross our minds. Maybe something for a future revision.

Interesting

bat? It's spelled BAD.... You will find this mistake in the introduction. :ajbemused:

6732041
Shoot. I'm sorry! I was very pressured to get this finished in time. I hope you at least tried to read it.

6732041
It's fixed.

6732048 I'm reading it. Don't worry. I'm strict, not cruel. :moustache:

Problem: Any

Solution: Throw Changelings at it :pinkiehappy:

Comment posted by Semaj deleted Dec 19th, 2015

6732099
That's politics my friend!

I liked it. But to me this seems odd. Mostly because it would actually cost more bits, time and resources to replace an Element Barer of Harmony with a Changeling than to give the Element Bearers the medical treatment they need. Like really, give Pinkie some antidepressants and a therapist rather than REPLACE HER BECAUSE SHE IS IN AN EXISTENTIAL CRISIS!

Forget it.... This should be taken as a Dark Comedy. It's an interesting concept. But one that would fall-apart rather quickly. And The way that I took Starswirl's Spell is that the idea was to Destroy the old caster's body, so that the matter from that can be used to forge a new Alicorn body for the caster using the power from the Elements of Harmony. For all we know Twilight may have died and resurrected, and that whole sequence with Celestia singing was actually a near death experience. Celestia might have just gone along with it because of the sheer madness that would ensue if ponies realized that there is a way to be truly be resurected, so she covered it up and instead crated a cover-story where Twilight was meant to be her successor and that only her can be turned into an Alicorn. And Equestriasn being under a prosperous rule like that of Celestia where not going to question it, because after a thousand years of relative peace, any country would become complacent.

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That is exactly the point. It would probably be easier to save the old elements. It's supposed to be farce comedy. The humor comes from the needlessly contrived situation. Celestia does something that she perceives as easier, but most rational humans or ponies could tell you that her plans are ridiculous. I hope you still drew enjoyment, and I thank you for giving well-thought-out constructive criticism. There honestly isn't enough of that on the Internet .

it reflect humorously our politics reality. it very good

6732232 I still got a chuckle out of it. I gave you a like.

“Well lately a lot of things. Where do they live? What do they do in their free time? Why do ponies hate them?...

Gee, I dunno, maybe announcing their presence to the world by trying to conquer it could possibly have influenced the ponies' opinions ever so slightly. :raritywink:

6732191 Twilight = Pony Jeebus

She died and rose again, to save everypony from time loops! And possibly Fruit Loops... so much sugar and artificial colors...

:trollestia:

The voices of the unseen crowd around became audible once more. However, instead of simple gasps, the townsponies now found themselves caught in a riptide of....

... green flashes as one after another, all the ponies in Ponyville revealed themselves to be changelings.

Luna blinked. "Wait... I didn't put that into the... Celestia. How many changelings are in Ponyville?"

Celestia grinned sheepishly, "You'd be amazed at the attrition rate the population of ponies living next to a dark forest full of pony-eating monsters achieves..."

At that point, Luna just gave up and stuffed her face full of moon pies all day, learning that fighting the madness is an exercise in futility.

Meh. The concept is great and generally well fleshed-out, but Celestia is too OOC (especially in that final scene) for me to fully enjoy the story.

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I understand. There is no evidence in the show that Celestia acts this way, but it was a silly concept, so we made her a silly character. I guess it's not an appropriate excuse, but I just like to imagine her like this.

6733722 The OoC-ness is perfectly justified. The story doesn't really take itself seriously, so stuff like that is fine. If it were being serious, then there'd be a problem.

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So who's going to invade HER dreams and torture HER? You know, for her own well-being, of course.

I can see this Celestia going nuts, running out of changelings to use, and capturing Chrysalis to make more changelings.

"Just a few more and everything will be fine."
receives incident report.
"Just a few hundred more and everything will be fine."

6732099
Just like Chrysalis throwing changelings at a magic shield that's in the way. Or in the comics where she threw a changeling at a dragon.

This... This is freaking scary...disturbing... ahhhh...

Fu**.

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I hope you enjoyed it anyway.

6739391 Yes, I did. I just think that it's really deserving of the "Dark"-tag. ;)

“Thank goodness I saved that last slice of cake!”
is....is she actually going to ignore that whole dream? or is that just a (fuck Mondays, i need some cake) and then going to fix the problem?.......Celestia is sick, and soon enough there would be more changelings then there would be ponies to stop them, all the ponies would be in pony prisons taken there by ponies.....self destruction indeed

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I'm going to go with the "fuck Mondays" one.
However I encourage you to interpret it however you want.

6756613 so what about the changeling thing? did she think of that? and what would she do if that became the case? would she just rule changelings instead of ponies? would she give the ponies to chrysalis? does she have a heart anymore?!

6760673
Plot twist she replaced herself with a changeling years ago.

I hope they won't imprison the changelings again, they did what they were asked to.

Cya
Raziel-chan

6782637
No we're not that mean. Also thank you for the favorite!

I expected that Luna is a Changeling too

6797235
Maybe for another story

That was a nice bait-and-switch at the beginning there. A less funny story would have just gone with that joke and made some sort of sappy drug addiction allegory out of it.

6870597
Thank you! I'm glad we aren't the only people who found that clever.

Comment posted by Twilight is the BEST deleted Jul 14th, 2016

Hjidecbdheichiuedhvdscheduich that last line wtf :twilightoops:

Celestia damn it.

Edit: One would think she'd have replaced Twilight twice already; once after Lesson Zero and once when the elements blasted her.

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Aw, shoot missed opportunity

8285729
Also thank you for the favorite!

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