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Perfectly Insane


I've been writing for, like, 8 years, and I still don't know what I'm doing. https://ko-fi.com/perfectlyinsane

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Does this story take place in the Sombra timeline that appeared in The Cutie Re-mark?

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yeah I know, its just my grammar isn't the best so I'm going over it and correcting everything I can. As soon as I do I intend to add another chapter and then start on other stories.

awesome I'm also keeping an eyes on this one nicely done

I am not sure this is the way to go to get Dash back in your corner...

By war, do you mean the one from the Sombra timeline that appeared in The Cutie Re-mark Part 1? Will Pinkie be badass in this story?

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7884367 The war has already been explained, It's the Meotrizen war, this fanfic has nothing to do with that timeline. But, yes, Pinkie will be badass.

More? Pls say if you make more.

Wow. This story is amazing so far! I really hope you continue working on it. The pacing, the details of the story, the plot, everything, is just great! I have to say you are a really talented author. Thanks for the uploads!

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8047662 I plan on uploading a chapter every weekend, actually. If my scheduale will allow it.

Pinkie you probably should have let him talk instead of trying to get your tiny bit of satisfaction from the guards. Oh well you will know soon enough.

That DAMN MEOTRIZEN!!!! Also when are we getting an appearance of one?

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8220369 Technically, you’re not. They all died in the war, except for Sylia and her family. Their bodies died, but through spells and alchemy, they entered a sort of ethereal form. The meotrize themselves are completely extinct, but the spirits won’t be. But don't worry, later on, I intend to show what they looked like.

My thoughts when reading:
Oh.
Yes!
What.
Oh.
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In conclusion, good chapter!

Please tell me your gonna update soon?! :pinkiesad2: I reeeeeeaaaally miss this story! :raritycry:

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Sadly, it'll be a while. I'm working on the finale for one of my stories, which is going to take a long time. You'll just have to be patient.

8434964 Well, then I guess I will have to wait and see what happens.

I am curious have you changed the chapter at all? I ask because I remember Pinkie having a thing for Rainbow Dash but for some reason I did not remember Dash finding Pinkie attractive in her new "look".

Regardless I hope that you write more chapters for this story in the future.

" We destroyed him, his entire body was torn apart by magic and spread out across the land, not even some pony as powerful as he could have survived that!" Twilight shouted angrily at her mentor, one of the few times that's ever happened.

He did kinda wipe two Alicorns that one time...
Not that anyone wants to remember that. Or knows that for that matter.

I'm seeing a incomplete tag! Yay! Continuation! :pinkiehappy:

Hmm I wonder if Pinkie will regret not staying with Dash in this situation?

I see the cover image and assume it's anthro but there is no anthro tag.

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Sorry for the mislead, it is not an anthro story. Realizing this, I’ll be changing the pic. Otherwise, what did you think of the story?

I kinda wished Pinkie would yell back about their flaws and then go for the attack.

Hey I was wondering if this story has any sex in this story? If so than is it part of the story? Or is it skip able?

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There is sex in the story, though a sex scene has yet to be implemented. It will be skippable, I don't intend to make a sex scene that has that much significance to the story.

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So completely optional? If you could put a disclaimer than that would be nice thanks :)

Wow that's a long chapter, and great writing too.

I don't mean to be a critic. I have Grammarly on my browser and it's urging me to correct the mistakes. It's fine though. Everyone makes mistakes. I know I do.


She wasn't entirely sure how that made her feel, could it be considered good1 to get used to dreams like that? No sane person2 would think that's a good thing, then again, Pinkie isn't ordinary. As she got up to try to get3 through another night of gore, horror, and sweat, she looked in the mirror4 on her way out; expecting to see her usual state of being covered in5 sweat and tears with dark circles under her eyes.

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This accusation hurt Twilight, but she was also a little surprised. She would1 never have considered the possibility that Pinkie would have thought2 of something like this; not that she felt that the ex-party planner3 was stupid or anything. Just that she wasn't that smart or cunning4, 5It was so unlike Pinkie; crafty, emotionless, aggressive, and so6 lacking of joy. While Twilight knew some ponies would think these would7 be good traits to have, she did not. They were just so unlike Pinkie, so alien, and Twilight didn't like it one bit. It was at this point8 that Twilight noticed not only the emotional changes,9 but also the physical10 changes.

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"I'm not entirely sure how or why he is still alive my little ponies, we are1 having some of the smartest investigating the matter as we speak. But the problem at hand2 is that he is back,3 and with allies. Luna and I aren't sure how long he's been hiding, but we have confirmed he has made an4 alliance with Chrysalis, and now has control over an army of changelings. That is why we have asked you and your 'friends' to help us either5 buy time or investigate Sombra. Both are equally important,6 because without knowing how he came back and how to prevent it, he will no7 doubt keep coming back. We need as much help and time as we can get." Celestia said calmly, as she looked down at all the ponies in the room, except for one.

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Besides, even if she was, if Dash at some point in time had feelings for her1, it was for the old Pinkie, not whatever she was now. Whenever Pinkie had realized this, she tried her hardest to ignore her emotions; But2 she couldn't help but feel her heart flutter at the sight of her.

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Pinkie had just started crying, it was understandable, considering what has1 just transpired. Twilight already knew beforehand2 that this was the most3 likely outcome since Twilight already planned how she and the rest of4 her remaining friends planned to gently tell Pinkie that they couldn't5 be her friends anymore, in hindsight, she probably should have realized6 that there was no gentle way to do that. Beforehand, Twilight had7 spent the entirety of last night thinking about the possible outcomes8 since she always overdoes things that she experiences for the first9 time, she thought up a total of seven results, the one now was simply10 the most likely considering her personality type.

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Part One Finished | Part 2 Coming Soon... Maybe

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Oh don't get me wrong, I do appreciate it, but it is mostly unnecessary. This is one of the first stories I ever wrote, and as a writer, as was very very different and only slightly better than an amateur. Now I've had years of experience at writing and I'd like to think I've gotten significantly better, and I do now have an editor. Thank you for the effort though.

Right now, I am only currently writing two series. One of them I just recently started, and the other one is my long term series. In my long term the writing gets better and better with each chapter as I try to improve, and with me recent one it seems to be well received, so I'm hoping it is above average in terms of writing.

Are you ever planning on releasing a sequel? Just curious.

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No, this story was mostly just to help me improve, I don’t think I’ll ever make a sequel to it.

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Back in 2017, I wondered when we would have an appearance of Meotrizen. If there's the possibility of no sequel, then could you show us what a Meotrizen looks like or describe what it looks like.

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I had intended to eventually give them an appearance and description. Since I don't intend to continue this series as of right now, I don't mind. This was the main inspiration for the appearance I had intended to give them. I was going to adjust them to be more equine, such as giving them more horse like faces, but that was essentially what I intended them to look like.

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I will also mention that one of the main reasons I don't intend to continue this is because of the what I'm working on now, which is my Men and Monsters series. Meotrizen, and this entire story in general, were kind of the foundation of it. It is similar in a lot of ways, and I admit to either re using some ideas, or adjusting them a tad before reimplementing them in some way.

If you liked this story, I would recommend you read Men and Monsters. It is going to be very long and very very similar to how I more or less intended this story to go down.

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