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Titan Commander Sebaste


Guardians, roll out!

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In the grim darkness of the far future... THERE IS ONLY WAR!

It all started when I picked up that Bolter at the convention , the guy was dressed up as a rouge trader and I was looking for a weapon to go with my Dark Angel costume, my mate Sebaste was with me and he grabbed a Assault rifle that the Merchant had, next thing we knew, we're sent to Equestria! Now we're Equestria's only defense against the forces of the Covenant and whatever Xenos and traitors appear in the country.
My name's Sasha ( or rather Sebastian), and this is my story....

Warhammer 40,000 belongs to Games Workshop

Halo belongs to 343i

My Little Pony belongs to Lauren Faust and Hasbro

Rated teen for some mild gore and language

This story has been approved for the War of Shadows
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Chapters (28)
Comments ( 262 )

you story is good but I can't really judge it in till chapter 2 and you did timber wolfs like me I helped:pinkiehappy:I'll tell you somethings in the talk so replie when you have the time too listen

6715218 Thanks for the compliment! I'm planning on doing Chapter 2 soon!

we must hunt him down and feed him, TOO THE FLOOD!:flutterrage:

You spelled "rogue" incorrectly in your description, unless you meant to say that the merchant is red.

How much is the capacity in this wagon? There's no maximum capacity in this wagon, so let's just make another SM and another Spartan from this world's people and throw them into Equestria. :ajbemused:

More Spartan and SM? Anyone? Maybe a CSM? Or an Unyufex? The Merchant is open 24/7 at every conventions in this world, no matter what they are. Warning : the products may cause an interdimensional displacement, followed by a degree of immortality, an unbearable annoyance caused by a certain curly maned pink pony or a petrification, a banishment, a criminal life, or a brainwashing. Or everything above at once. No warranty is added. Usage of these products at your own risk. May not feed them to children. Or just feed them to children. We actually don't care either. Thanks for wasting your precious and short time to read this.

6715673 I'm not trying to make them OP, Chaos Marines are really tough opponents!

6715680 the mane 6 could beat them how did they do that with what they are shown to be able to do and the warp sounds worse that the stare how did they win if there not op?

6715692 I said they tied them up, meaning they kept the marines distracted, they weren't beating them by a long shot

6715697 how do you tie up something that can lift two tons with out power armor that makes them strong
can they lift two tons without the armor? I forgot but remember seeing it somewhere

6715714 how would I know? you need to make it so people know that.
you make it seem like the mane 6 tied them up

edit.
I misread your comment:derpytongue2:

6715624 You seem like you've read a few pretty bad fics.

I like the new part but still

The five Elements that were fighting had managed to tie up the Chaos marines, but they had gotten hurt in the process.

this makes it look like they tied up the chaos marines it should be something more like (the chaos marines had there hands tied with the five Elements they we're fight and have hurt some of them in the fight) or (the five elements that we're fighting have managed to keep the chaos marines hands full, but they had gotten hurt in process)

I'm not being mean I'm trying to help, please don't stop editing my story!:fluttershysad:
I'M JUST TRYING TO HELP!:flutterrage:

6716032 :rainbowlaugh: no need to go into a panic attack! I know you're trying to help, and I appreciate it!:twilightsmile: so get yourself together soldier!

6716107 I'm joking and I have a godzilla fanboy following me and I am a godzilla fanboy just not a die hard but I don't like it when things I like lose but I accept it if it true and the internet somewhat cut out on me so I had to reset it which is why it took me so long to replie

6716312 would this Godzilla fanboy be the author of 'Godzilla vs Zilla'?

6716341 did he talk about your name not being what it's is before saying he was messing with you?

6716371 ok and thanks for taking my advice you may have got hate for it being confusing

6716403 I mean more people coming and getting confused and leaving just because they can't take a simple mistake those are the worst kind of people for a fic writher

6716470 hooray I'm useful but don't know how to post images woop woopwoopwoop:trollestia:

I understand that this isn't exactly shaping up to be the greatest fanfic ever written, but I feel like this guy's received more negativity than he's due. I mean, it's not easy to put yourself out there like that by publishing your stuff for other people to see. Very, very few people (if anybody) actually deserve more dislikes than likes. I gave the story a thumbs up just to try to help balance things out a bit.

Keep writing Halo40KInquisitor. Whenever we do anything for the first time, we kind of suck at it. The only way to suck less or altogether cease to suck is to just keep doing whatever it is you're doing. You're off to a much better start than I am. Whenever I get an idea for a fanfic, I start writing it, show nobody because I'm too self-conscious and then eventually scrap it. I've taken so many classes on the process of producing literature as well as classes like Lit of Author, where we just study a single work or collection of works from as many perspectives as possible and all the while thought about writing stories of my own, but for all the time I've spent thinking about it, I haven't completed a single one.

I sincerely hope that someday, when I publish what I know will (at least at first) be some pretty terrible fanfiction, you'll show me the same respect that I have for you...

6733911 Thanks! And I will do the same for you, you can count on that!

I'll put this story under tracking, simply because I like your idea, but I want this fic of yours to be better. Hope whatever chapters you put up later will give you more likes than dislikes. Don't let the dislikes discourage you by the way. Just keep making stories. Some people dislike my fics but they don't give a reason why.

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6733911 Thank you, both of you for giving me some support.
Believe me, I'm trying to do my best and seeing those dislikes kinda put a damper on things, but it's nice to know that there are others that enjoy it:twilightsmile:

6734833 do not let the haters get to you friend as they will have a insane guy you know of coming for them if they try too hard to hate, for the almighty's!

6735091 You're right, if they do keep this up, they'll face the combined might of the Imperium and the UNSC!

6735134 and you know who.

HAHAHAHAHAHA!:pinkiecrazy:

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new chapter of oh captain, my captain is out, I'm must read dis

6745816 I'm moving to Philadelphia this week, the only time I'm able to work on my story is when I'm on break from packing

6747438 Thanks! I had fun doing the 2 parter crossover with The Dark Brony!

You know I have just the ork for this.

6770388 Well, if you want to do a crossover with him, I'm game!

the orks are real! stop them before they get works!(they don't do space's!)

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