Prologue
3rd person POV
Explosions ripped through the streets of Canterlot. Elites and Orks fought each other in the alleys while Chaos forces battled Canterlot Royal Guard forces equipped with Lasguns. In an hidden bunker, two armored bipedal figures prepared to engage the enemy force besieging the city.
" It's time." One of the figures said. The armor that he was wearing signaled that he was a Adeptus Astartes of the Dark Angels Chapter.
" It's been an honor fighting with you, bud." The other figure said. The armor that he had on revealed him as a UNSC Spartan Orbital.
With those words, both figures charged out with a battle cry: FOR THE EMPEROR, FOR THE UNSC, FOR EQUESTRIA!
As they ran towards the battle, the Dark Angel thought back to the events that had culminated up to this point.....
35 years ago
Chapter 1: Arrival
1st Person POV - Sebastian (Sasha)
Sebastian's house
So we're all dressed up for a local convention, and I can't find a weapon to save my life!
And my friend Sebaste was getting impatient.
" Come on, Sasha! I really don't want to miss this convention!" He said.
I chuckled," Don't get your armor in a twist, I'm trying to find a weapon for my costume!" I replied.
He was dressed up as a Red and Silver Halo 4 style Orbital Spartan . Me? I was dressed up as a Adeptus Astartes of the Dark Angels chapter.
Oh, I forgot to introduce myself, I'm Sasha, it's my nickname, since I don't really like being called Sebastian which is my actual name, my friend's name is Sebaste Roakanov, he and I have been friends for a long time now. We both like Halo and play against each other in games of WH40K and just recently got into MLP.
Finally, I gave up and decided to get a weapon at the convention. We arrived at the spot where it was taking place to find it packed! There were vendors galore, and I also saw a few cool costumes, like
Scorpion from Mortal Kombat, Nightmare from SoulCaliber, and Master Chief from Halo.
Sebaste split off from me to check out the Halo merchandise, while I looked around the different stalls. As I was walking past a Mortal Kombat stall, I noticed what looked like a vendor in the shadows. I called to Sebaste, "Hey, come over here, I found something!"
He walked over and looked over to where I was pointing.
"What the hell?! Who's that?" He asked.
"I don't know, let's check him out." I replied. We both went over to the shadowy vendor and got a good look at him as we approached the stall. He was wearing a WH40K Rogue Trader costume and what he was selling... Holy Throne! He had all sorts of things, an Assault rifle from Halo, the Ivy Blade from SoulCaliber, and a bunch of other video game and even a few Miniature based game stuff! But there was one thing that really caught my eye: a Godwyn pattern Bolter.
I checked the price and it cost about $45, I had $60, so I had enough to get it. Sebaste bought the Assault rifle which had cost about $35 dollars.
The Merchant then said, " May they prove useful to you, for you'll need them for the times ahead..." Both Sebaste and I were confused as to what he was talking about, but before we could ask him what he meant, there was a flash of light and he and the convention disappeared as we blacked out.
"Oy, what happened?" Was my first thought when I regained consciousness.
I looked around to find myself in a wooded area. Sebaste was lying on the ground across from me.
I looked over at him and suddenly a crosshairs appeared on my lens! "Holy shit!" I yelped. I then noticed that I was more heavily muscled than before and when I tapped my armor, it felt like solid ceramite. I picked up the Bolter, noting that it was heavier than when I had bought it and when I pressed on the trigger, it actually shot a round! I nearly dropped it when the first shot rang out.
"Holy throne!" I swore, then I realized that my voice was a lot deeper than before.
" Oh you have got to be kidding me! I'm an actual Space Marine!"
Sebaste jolted awake at the gunshot and my swearing.
"Ooh, my head! What happened....?" He trailed off in shock at where we were.
"Where the hell are we?!" He asked.
"I don't know, but what I do know is that I'm now an actual Space Marine, and my bolter's real also."
"You're kidding right? That means I'm now an actual Spartan?"
I nodded.
"Bloody brilliant! What's next, we've ended up in Equestria?!" Seb said sarcastically.
Just then, we both hear a scream. We both looked at each other, Seb picked up his assault rifle and then both of us ran to where the scream originated from. But what we saw when we arrived, shocked us beyond belief.
"You've got to be friggin kidding me!" Said Sebaste.
In front of us, surrounded by what looked like wolves made out of wood, was a Purple unicorn with a VERY familiar mark on her flank.
" I don't think we're on Earth anymore..." I said
"Gee, no shit Sherlock!" Sebaste said sarcastically. "That's Twilight Sparkle getting attacked!"
I quickly shake off my shock.
"Okay, here's the plan. You go to the left, try and get the wolves attention. I'll go to the right and take them out." Sebaste nodded and then jumped out from where we were hiding.
"Oy, are you trying to do 'Who's gonna bite who' or are you lot just a bunch of dumb mutts?!" He yelled.
Let me tell you, those wolves did NOT like that! They turned around and charged at him, only to be met with a hail of Bolter shells from me as I charged in from behind. The crosshair on my reticle helped a lot with aiming at the mutts, as soon as one went down, the targeter leapt to the next one. I also noticed that my ammo counter had an infinity symbol on it, so I had infinite ammo, sweet!
Unfortunately, we got a bit too cocky, and we didn't notice the wolves reforming until one jumped on me and tried to bite me, luckily my armour was too tough for it, the wolf ended up breaking it's teeth as it bit down. Suddenly there was a magenta flash and the wolf was sent flying into a tree. I look over to see Twi with her horn aglow, she then turned and fired off more magic blasts at the wolves surrounding Sebaste, he quickly finished off the rest of the pack surrounding him and put away his assault rifle.
"Thank you, I wasn't sure if I was going to be able to get away from them!" Said Twilight with a relieved look, then she looked puzzled. "If you don't mind my asking, what are you?"
"We're what you'd call Humans" I replied. " I'm an Adeptus Astartes, or Space Marine of the Dark Angels chapter, my friend is a Spartan from the UNSC or United Nations Space Command."
"I've never heard of a 'Adeptus Astartes' or of this 'UNSC' or of a 'Human' ." She said with a confused look
"Well, that's not surprising, seeing as we're not exactly equines or from your world." I said.
"We're called ponies!" Twilight snapped.
"Sorry." I apologized.
"Well anyways, my name is..." Twilight began.
" Twilight Sparkle, personal student to Princess Celestia and bearer of the Element of magic" I cut her off before she says anything else. "We both know about you and your friends." She was shocked to hear that.
"How did you know?! Were you spying on me and my friends!?" She shouted in anger.
Oh boy, this is gonna be hard to explain....
you story is good but I can't really judge it in till chapter 2 and you did timber wolfs like me I helpedI'll tell you somethings in the talk so replie when you have the time too listen
6715218 Thanks for the compliment! I'm planning on doing Chapter 2 soon!
And who's the wise guy that downvoted me?
we must hunt him down and feed him, TOO THE FLOOD!
You spelled "rogue" incorrectly in your description, unless you meant to say that the merchant is red.
How much is the capacity in this wagon? There's no maximum capacity in this wagon, so let's just make another SM and another Spartan from this world's people and throw them into Equestria.
More Spartan and SM? Anyone? Maybe a CSM? Or an Unyufex? The Merchant is open 24/7 at every conventions in this world, no matter what they are. Warning : the products may cause an interdimensional displacement, followed by a degree of immortality, an unbearable annoyance caused by a certain curly maned pink pony or a petrification, a banishment, a criminal life, or a brainwashing. Or everything above at once. No warranty is added. Usage of these products at your own risk. May not feed them to children. Or just feed them to children. We actually don't care either. Thanks for wasting your precious and short time to read this.
6715624 HEY I'm my worlds annoyance
6715443 Thanks, I'll fix that!
6715624 Yo, this is my first story! Cut me some slack!
Ha-ha! It's time for my favorite game:
MXCPointing Out Stupid Things; Spite Edition™Roll credits.
Overdone Cliché. Works if the situation it's used for is interesting, but the "right before big battle flashback" has been done to death, pronounced dead, then done again.
Apparently all it takes to be displaced is checking the prices. It's not like he bought it according to the wording. Shit, imagine if he checked the price of anything else.
Since when can someone tell their muscle mass while wearing stupidly thick space marine strength enhancing armor?
That's a oddly specific location to name drop. I would have guessed space Kansas. Then again that is also specific, so I can't judge. Well, actually, I can. Moving on.
Wow, they are taking this REALLY well. Youd expect more reaction, but that would require character.
Infinite ammo. Not, idunno, slowly regenerating ammo?
You might say "But what's wrong with that? Also, your butt is looking nice today!".
First: Infinite ammo is a stupid and lazy way to make your character OP. It's not very fun to read about OP characters, as there is no tension in the story.
Second: Thank you, I agree.
I'd be more worried if a massive metal thing with extremely deadly weaponry that makes a lot of noise came bursting out of underbrush and killed a bunch of stuff. Like really.
Anyway there's more sillyness that I can't be bother to point out, and that's not including the kinda crappy structuring, awkward dialogue, and bland characters. I'd recommend an editor. That would atleast sort some of the problems out. Good day!
Sincerely,
A substance with an almost terrifying resemblance to food.
6918322 Y' make a good point, but twas there really any need to be spiteful?