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Alex Prior


I've many faces, many names. Different name in every forum. Earl Annex in FF and dA. Alex Prior on SpaceBattles. Whatever strikes my fancy here. That's pretty much me all right. Also, I'm crazy.

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For most of her time in Ponyville, Twilight Sparkle has insisted that she is not, in fact, a Changeling.

Today, she has something important to tell her friends.


Written for the F*** This Prompt #8 contest.
Partial inspiration from The_One_Butcher.

Chapters (2)
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Comments ( 74 )

Hehe. Nice punchline.

...aha! I get it!

Actually pretty good.

To be honest, you'd think changelings would be able to at least tell ponies and disguised changelings apart by their presumable inability to feed on the latter. But hey, at least you didn't do the atrocious "My secret is actually that while I'm totally not a changeling, I'm actually gay" thing.

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That is actually a thing? :rainbowhuh:

6712399 It is not just a thing, it's a cliched thing. I try to watch out for signs of that, but occasionally still run into it when cleverly hidden. This fandom, seriously. (There's also "My secret is actually that I am a vampony" and all that kind of stuff, but while those are usually also stupid they're not quite as annoying.)

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:trixieshiftright: I've never run into that, to be honest.

6712426 Well, I do read an awful lot of stories... maybe I just have bad luck.

Okay. The flow from disbelief to acceptance it kinda strange. You'd have thought that there was something like "Okay, if you wanna be a pony you're a Pony, we don't judge." or some kind of proof.

Very nice! I loved the idea you toyed with throughout the whole story, although to be honest, I knew the twist ending was coming a long way off.

Spoilered thoughts - HEAVY SPOILERS AHEAD:
Everytime Rarity speaks, she kinda makes it obvious she's a changeling, but maybe that's just me.
Also, Twilight is loved by basically all of Equestria. When she went to the Trade stalls, for example, she was mobbed by about everypony there. Your argument in the story still works - and is still really powerful, so don't go changing it, I'm just commenting.

Very strong story! Good luck in the competition!

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Everytime Rarity speaks, she kinda makes it obvious she's a changeling, but maybe that's just me.

Oh, that was intentional, I assure you. She did assume Twilight was one, too, and saw no need to conceal.

Also, Twilight is loved by basically all of Equestria. When she went to the Trade stalls, for example, she was mobbed by about everypony there. Your argument in the story still works - and is still really powerful, so don't go changing it, I'm just commenting.

Twilight became loved by all of Equestria, or at least well-known enough, only after Alicorn Ascension.
This story is set before Magical Mystery Cure. :twilightsmile:

6714313 Ah. The first I suspected, the second I derped on. Excellent explanations! Thank you.

Please continue xD somehow just continue it, its great

:rainbowlaugh: Good job!
But I would really love to find out how did they manage to confuse Twi for a 'ling.

Nice comma.
All im saying. :P

Niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice. I liked this. Also don't be sorry.

Now we only need a story where X is(or isn't) half-ling :trollestia:

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Tiny typo

What was that silly even that spurred all this misunderstanding?

event

Well that was a fun little read.

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It's funny, isn't it? But even so, they didn't notice Fluttershy wasn't one of them during the battle in Canterlot.

mrk

Ha ha! Not bad.

6716501 Maybe they just didn't have time to focus during the hectic battle.

Nice. The only thing my critical ass can complain about is some OOC moments, particularly this one:

What was that silly event that spurred all this misunderstanding?

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I don't see how Rarity's revealing herself. Even reading it afterwards, I can't spot anything particularly revealing, expect specifically calling Twilight out as an infiltrator. And possibly an overuse of Darlings.

CCC

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Maybe they all thought she was a changeling, so they just didn't bother trying to feed on her?

now all is right in the world.

The ironic subversion of a trend is one of the more annoying themes in modern works. You get a point for not going grimdark, pervert everything, philosophical doubletalk bull. That's about it.

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:trixieshiftright: ...."Ironic" subversion?
:trixieshiftleft: I could have sworn I went for the real subversion.

6719087 ...I retract the point I gave you, then. That's worse.

Fun little read. Short, sweet, and to the point. Poor Twilight, though.

Anywho, caught a small error:

She suddenly found her muzzle pressed shut and a dragon glaring at him.

Liked/fav'd :eeyup:

Short, sweet, and gave me a good laugh. Couldn't ask for more with this kind of shitty prompt. Good luck in the contest.

HiddenMaster out.

suddenly her friends willingness to believe chrysalis over twilight before the wedding makes so much more sense!!!!! :pinkiegasp:

LOLS that ending.

>Written by Flowey
NOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPENOPE!!!!!!!!

JK, I'll read it some time, just marking it for now. ;P

6719319 Aw, shut up. Who put the "I saw this twice in stories I willingly read and so it's overdone" stick up your whatever, anyway? The stories are good anyway.

Cute, though I think a story about the incident that led up to this would've been even funnier. Still, an enjoyable read.

Gotta be honest I read a previous story where Twilight found out every pony except her, Celestia, Luna, Trixie and Blueblood where changelings. It turned out Equestria was made up of different changelings swarms each under the impression their swarm was seamlessly blended into pony society. I expected this to be Twilight reveling to her friends that she now knew they where all changelings but she was a real pony.

6734286 Ooo thats sound interesting, do you remember the title? I would like to read that.

I enjoyed this. Stories that turn a common cliché on their head like this always tickle my funny bone somehow.

Oh that's hilarious! They're all Changelings!

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That's slightly misleading. After all, Twilight is not.

Author's Note:
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I am so sorry.

AS YOU SHOULD BE :flutterrage:

JK :trollestia:

6734286 I heard the reading for that. I kept on expecting Luna to pop in at the end and say " Did she buy it?"

Snrk, that punchline. :rainbowlaugh:

Cya
Raziel-chan

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