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I will kick you in the Lyra Heartstrings. To help me do that, here's my patreon https://www.patreon.com/peacevic?ty=h

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During an attack on the Princess of the Sun, in a moment of pure desperation, Captain Vigilant Shield received a portion of Celestia's strength. The attack was repelled, the enemies driven back, and the Princess was protected.

But no pony was meant to hold that much power.

First Published
7th Dec 2015
Last Modified
7th Dec 2015
#1 · 67w, 5d ago · · ·

  Very nicely done story

#2 · 67w, 5d ago · · ·

So.........No one rushed to the hospital or got maybe a bucket of water to take out the fire or am I reading this the wrong way?

#3 · 67w, 5d ago · · ·

From what I understand, both Celestia and the guard knew that he was going to die. A sad tale for sure, though I do feel like it was quite an oversight by Celestia herself. :trixieshiftright:

It was a nice read otherwise. Felt like the pacing was a bit rushed and it could have a been a little bit longer; but from what I am used to, it is a nice change of pace.

7/10

Quality work, you get a like from me. I am anticipating more from you in the future. :unsuresweetie:

#4 · 66w, 3d ago · · ·

Where are all the readers this should have? Far as I'm concerned, some seriously underrated work here. Well done, that was very well-written with few to no errors. You should write more, you look like a fairly talented one :ajsmug:

#5 · 66w, 3d ago · · ·

>>6739274 Thanks, I'm glad you liked it.

As for more, you might want to check out the Genetic Research series. It starts here. The first one is the first I posted, so they get more polished as they go.

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