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Broman


A guy who loves to create stories and has a big imagination. Also wishes to become a famous Actor and Director.

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The First Contact War, a war that nopony could have predicted. Throughout the war there were many tragedies and many violent acts committed. The horrors of war are a constant reminder as to why many wish for a better tomorrow, a true lasting peace that many longed for. As the war lingers everypony wished for the war to be over. However, for some, peace had already came to late.

Hammer and Anvil, two members of the Royal Guard, are on a patrol in the city of Prancy, the last bastion that their enemy holds. Both are complete opposites of each other. However, despite their differences and views, both are committed when it gets to a fight. Along the way they find a small filly, who they believe was abandoned. When they eventually take her in they will witness the reasons of how the filly survived but also find something else.

Both will learn what is worth fighting.

Rated Teen: Some language, disturbing images, and violence

This story was part of the Writeoff Association Contest, Out of Time.

I would like to thanks my prime editor and Proofreader for this story. FDA_Approved has spent much of his time in shaping and developing this story along with me. He showed me the flaws and pieces that needed extensive cuts and I have so much thanks to give him. This story would not have been able to come to be without his talent and help.

Also like to to thank Monokeras for the help with the french language and getting the words said correctly.

Be sure to check them both out and I hope you will all enjoy my latest story.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 10 )

Very good! I loved this story:heart: , when i Read " Fisrt contact war' and the introduction, I realized it would be great and I wasn't wrong, Thank you for this great story :pinkiehappy:

6706766 Thank you so much! I'm glad that you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

A sweet story in a dark set up.
Not bad, a taadd sappy though.
Especially the whole sugar tie up. (back in last chapter)

You do have some behaviour issues at the beginning.
Why in Equestria would they be patrolling those streets, without some sort of preparation in case of a raider attack ? They obviously know that they're in nobody land between the lines.
Hammer and Anvil acts as if they are well aware of this, and then by the next street corner, have forgotten everything about it.
Either or please.
:pinkiesmile:

Oh, by the way, your editor missed something.

less then my deepest

common then you realize

:twilightsmile:
Aand I think I spotted a couple other oddities.

Read the first chapter and then some. It's a good read. You better keep that up. :ajsmug:

“Silence! The Gryphon empire will never lose! The ponies have not won! They will never-” The five griffons quickly turned the corner and ran straight into them.

Don't you mean "The five griffons quickly turned the corner and Hammer ran straight into them." It was really confusing for me as to who was running into them.

A fine start. I like where this is going.

Someone likes The Clone Wars or this is a trope of sorts.

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I think it was the inspiration for this book and for its sequel.

Honestly it sounds like not every griffon wants this war.

Nice prologue.

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