Just trying to think on what to write *shrugs*
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In one sunny summer day, you go out swimming. But due to wild waves and bad timing, you start to drown. Fortunately, you're rescued by a rainbow haired girl.
However, that rainbow gal turns out to be your crush from school. With her saving your life, do you have the courage to confess your feeling towards her?
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Interesting story, and has potential for this universe to be continued. I think you should try that, and write a sequel.
Time for some grammar error checking! (SPOILERS!)
You glance at the deep, blue sea and an good idea came across your mind. A nice swim in the ocean would be the perfect thing for this summer afternoon. a good, not "an good"
The rainbow gal pulled out a towel and a bottle of water from her bag, then she poured the water on the towel and began to clean to clean the wound. You wince in pain as she cleans the wound. After cleaning the wound, Rainbow began to apply steady direct pressure to stop the bleeding and she wrapps a bandage around your feet afterwards. double "to clean"
Rainbow says nothing, looking at you for a moment. Just then, a smile forms on her face forms and she just shrugs. double "forms"
"R-Really?" you stammer, a bigger blush appearing over your checks. Cheeks
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Wow, I said WHAT even before reading that "What?" parahraph
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Fixed.
Cute.
I think it's a cute Rainbow Dash Shipping Story, so I like it.
7296085 YESH
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"parahraph"
paragraph*
If you write anything criticizing editing or proofreading, there will be a fault of some kind in what you have written.
7296597 Whoops
, I know it's no excuse but it was dark and the G and H keys on my keyboard are too close to each other, so I typed H instead of G soo...¯\_(ツ)_/¯ I'm glad I am a human who also makes mistakes
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7296122 I cringed
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It's pretty good, though rushed.
Wow rainbow's so hot!
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I know.
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It's true, Rarity. Rainbow's hot.
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*blushes red* Gah... uh...
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Umm, are you okay?
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*fans face* Perfectly fine, darling
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For a moment I thought you got jealous.
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Uh! Pfft... A lady never gets jealous! T-the very thought! *scrunchy face*
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Anyways, Rares, what do you think of my story?
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It was so cute, and sweet. I can tell you really like Rainbow, hmm?
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Much. :)
7299119 This is really a great story to read from time to time, though I never expected that Rainbow Dash to be well um... kinda hot in her appearance at a beach.
Still I give it a two thumbs up for it's romantic moment and waiting to see if it'll have a sequel with or without a series of chapters in it. 
Well, since this is rated T, I guess I can't use the 'Rated E for Everyone!' joke, can't I?
Well done! This is a really nice and very well written story.
Have a like and fave. You earned it.
7296122 um, that's not normal. See a doctor?
normally im not a huge fan of one shots (that's not to say I don't like one shots or don't read them), but this was very well done! great job man!
Nice and cute little story. Have a like.
Also find a couple mistake.
You and I think her speech should end with a full stop rather than a comma.
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Open the link above in another tab and listen to it as you read this story.
You are welcome. (bows politely)
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Kinda fits, exepct that Rainbow's skin is cyan.
Goodness! Congratulations on 100!
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Thank you, Rarity.
7301596 (puts an arm around you) Elec? My friend? My boo-boo-boo? Comrade?
Just shut the heck up and enjoy the voice of Don Henley and ignore the brown skin lyric of the song, okay?
Now in other news, how is Elec doing this beautiful evening fit for a midnight feast?
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The song is alright, but I'm more into metal music. And why you ask?
7301765 I'm peckish.
Also I was just being polite. But sorry I asked, I suppose...
Maybe I'm being unfair, but I'm really tired of 2nd Person/Anon stories where the protagonist is a complete whimp.
Cute story. It's funny how small things can become something greater.
It was good, if a bit rushed. I'm personally never bothered by 2nd person stories, they can be great if done right, *coughShowStoppercough* It would have been better if Rainbow had spent more time with Anon. We're told RD had feelings for him for a while and that's fine, but the difference between a good story and a great story is that a great story will show RD developing feelings for him.
Over you? Really? Would she scoot over to, on top of, and then a meter past him?
'Tis still a good story.
Thank you Pizza Man!
Geez, what's up with Rarebear? She so silly :3
I really liked this one, it was the bestest thing in the world! And Rainbow's a hu-man now!
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I think she's jealous because Rainbow now has a boyfriend.
Sometimes I wish the equestria girls mane six were real and lived in my city so I could have awesome nice friends(which would be them)
7646156 I wish the same thing
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So I guess that Gilda was just expendable at the time then? Or, if you want to get all pissy about that example of her not living up to that sentence, then how about the time she abandoned Twilight Sparkle at the Canterlot Wedding, when Twilight tried to warn them about the fake Cadence? Allow me to explain exactly what happened there. Rainbow Dash chose someone she had just met over someone who she had saved the world with two times over by that point, and who had got her tickets to the Grand Galloping Gala. Does this sound like a loyal friend to you? Hell, does it sound like a friend to you? Of someone that you'd even tolerate, for that matter?
Second: Edit this mess of a story sometime, would you? It's to the point where all of the errors are distracting.
You might want to credit Grasshopper Keller and rewrite the description to say what story inspired this one.
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You mean Reunited In Strenght? Well, if that's the case, I'll credit him.
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I agree but then again Rainbow always did jump into *ahem* "things" pretty fast.