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Bow chicka bow wow

Maid to order, I guess.

Reads this whole story and ends up getting a wing-boner Damn it! Why now!?

Wow! That was worth the wait! These two are so lovely together and you're doing a beautiful job showing how much they care for each other. I am so jealous!! Great work. Defiantly eager for more!

... Holy fucking shit, more please!

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So hot

Heeheehee, a gloriously well done update man! :D Nicely done, nicely done!
Heheh, can't wait for the next part *waggles eyebrows*

Featured again on 12/15/15 fam!

yus

Who doesn't love a cute maid. lets see where they take this game.

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No shameless promotion there!

I'm just thankful that he didn’t include any of my stories in the library.

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I hope this one is just as good, hehe. And I'm no body.

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I hope so!

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That's pretty much exactly how Henry does it.

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Ummm.... Well this one took me a while. I want to say... 10 hours of work total.

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Damn, dude...you don't half ass nothing do you?

Umm, nope lol. I try really hard to make these things enjoyable.

So what's it like to crap out awesome stories and art after breakfast?

I wish I was that fast.

Thank you thought! I'm glad you can enjoy my stuff so much!

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Hehe, glad you like it!

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Haha! That would be pretty cool.

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You'll be known in history as the guy with the least stories with over a 1000 followers....

That would be fun, haha.

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Why not now?

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Thank you! I'm glad you like it so far! I hope the next chapter is just as good for you! I do like how I have these two interact though. It was a lot of fun to write.

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More will come soon!

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More sex to cum!

So simple, yet so boner inducing~
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bravo! good job. was a fun read.

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It's not over yet! There is still one more chapter to come out lol.

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My job is complete then.

6737764 Whooo who cant wait! :)

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Where did you find that?

Dayum. That was an impressive scene.

Nyessssss, Nezel likely pre11.deviantart.net/34ea/th/pre/i/2011/033/4/d/bueno____by_megasweet-d38nbib.jpg

You know I keep getting this image in my head of the story ending with Lily's sisters coming over to wish him a happy birthday and walk in on them seeing their sister in a maid outfit with him just as they finish lol. Just the pure silence of the moment and the image of all their faces is hilarious to me.

Okay... Positives:

Kudos for keeping the perspective solidly on Lily throughout. That's unfortunately uncommon in too many stories involving sex. Kudos, too, for the first chapter of Lily enjoying getting ready to please her mate.

What really sticks in my head, though, is how she's super nervous about indulging in his fetish after he's already indulged in her prey fetish. Naughty nurse is somewhat a freaking huge step down on the kink-o-meter from prey fetishism, but she's acting almost more nervous than that. I get that she wants him to be happy, I really do, but it feels like you're trying to pull her "The horror!" trope into more than it can really support given that this is a sequel to Chase Me.

Unless this is the prequel/sequel thingie. In which case: stop taking notes from George Lucas!

In all seriousness, I did think her nerves were overplayed and they didn't come across to me as genuinely and organically grown from the character we've seen thus far. A little nerves, sure, especially when she's presented herself right at the moment. That's a cusp moment. The only real thing I could see coming out of this as character growth would be a reveal that Lily has trouble overcoming her own insecurities, and this is all a part of her mate helping her grow as a pony into a more secure and mentally stable individual.

But the little bits here and there of her backstory seem to show that she's, if anything, more adventurous than her sisters. So... I guess I'm saying that her character feels somewhat inconsistent.

Don't get me wrong, though, I did enjoy the other parts of it, and her being nervous does make sense, but it feels over-the-top in places.

But maybe I'm examining it too deeply.

Aw-riiiiight.

Gimme a sec.

unzips heavy winter coat
unzips jacket
unzips second jacket
takes off sweatshirt
takes off tank top
takes off bra

Hold on.

unzips winter coat pants
unzips pants
unzips second pair of pants

uh… this might take a while. Damm winter weather.

Well, there's part of the clop. Can't say that I'm satisfied until I get the rest.

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Thank you! Glad you liked it!

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That would be pretty silly.

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But maybe I'm examining it too deeply.

Just a little.

Thanks for commenting though. I can't stand it when people dislike and don't say why, but I hope you can enjoy some of my future work!

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Cute!

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I wish you luck my friend.

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You're welcome! And I did make a few nsfw ones. You can see them here.

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It's coming damn it!

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I haven't disliked it. I haven't liked it either. I'm kinda waiting to see how you handle the, er, climax and denouement. I do enjoy the fact that you have kept Lily in character and not had her slide around the aggressiveness scale from meek to passive and have her remain mostly eager but nervous. I do get the feeling from reading it that she genuinely loves her mate, and that's good.

I will admit that I didn't really enjoy Chase Me... that's not my fetish, really. I'm liking this a lot more.

Am I weird for reading clop for the story and the characters?

6738619 it's cumming damn it.

If that's just part one, I can't wait for part two. Hope it posts soon

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Took the words right out of my mouth.

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You're not weird for wanting a story to go with the clop. I'm like that too. I tried my best to tell a story with my clop, and this one is no acception, but there really isn't much of one here. At least not as much as Chase Me had, and I knew that going into this. A part of me didn't even want to wright this because I knew I couldn't make a full and satisfying story with it. The only thing that Lily had to over come here is how embarrassed and nervous she is about tyring something new/unfamiliar and acting in front of her lover with a silly outfit on, which she can do pretty easily since she's so eager and willing to begin with, even when it's something that doesnt cater to her kinks competent. So... this story is more for the clop and the loving moments between these two.

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I see what you did there.

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I'm hoping it will come out soon... but I'm still waiting for final edits.

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How could you not love Lily! She's the cutest! and thank you!

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Oooooooh yiiiiiis

6736670 That's what she said

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It is now official, I suck at colouring.

I'll take my time touching this up, redo the colouring and fixing everything over the weekend. Need to go dream of ponies in maid uniforms.

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HUUUUUNNNG! That's so damn cute! Haha. This is the best! Your the best Pen! and the colors looks fine to me!

Slow, sensual, delicious. I like it.

Will the two discover just how compatible their fetishes are? The maid bound in birthday ribbons? The willing prey served as a birthday cake?

6739677 PEN, I thought we''ve told you to stop fanarting for people and get back to writing?!

(That's ridiculously cute-as-fuck by the way. Nice one)

Friendship is magic = lie
Friendship with benefits = truth.
lots of moist hard truth.

I like it, you show very well how they establish this whole master maiden situation is, and how they can find a confort zone for both of them, its really beautiful when they are used right, the level of trust they had to one another, the…enrichment of their relationship by proving they really are willing to do what they do, is really very nicely done

>>Chicago Ted Lol true. Nice pun btw

Try this one on for size *Ahem*

Henry touched Lily's dripping marehood with his hand as she moaned softly at the touch of her sensitive spot... "Might be and idea for later chapters >>Pusspuss just suggesting tho

Punchline: Let's hope things don't get out of hand here.

6739677 Dude I could help you but I have school to worry about (not that much tho) but remember The Fluttershai Lebouf "JUST DO IT!!...um if it's alright with you?"~Fluttershai Lebouf

Heh, I just realized that the book titles in the cover arts are references to other stories

6740003 Xd Dude water came up my nose after reading that bit.

longer than I tought, I think I´m going to read it later, I liked how you had written the first story.