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Foals Errand

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Twilight Sparkle lives in the ideal world of Equestria. There, she is a pony, strong and proud, surrounded by friends, and with only studying as her job. Though some may try to mock this, as the student to the princess of this land, she is revered as one of the smartest and most amazing mares in the world. She even has the honor of defending the land, and going on adventures few even see in their dreams.

It is these dreams that for five years, Celestia has recorded, while looking over the human known as Twilight Sparkle.

Co-Write with Jumbled Thought

Chapters (11)
Comments ( 98 )

:heart: This is a serious twist on things.

Pure drama, free of implied details, rendering the setting moot.

Interesting start. I'm curious to see where you take it.

If FIM is all human Twilight's coma dream, then I wonder why her subconcious has it get attacked so much. Maybe human Twilight was an adrenaline junkie or attention seeker.

I have to say, I like this, not that I don't like when someone 'wakes up' in these stories or such, but this is a new angle in dying to see more of, foal

6695434 It's a realm of her dreams, a world she could not ever have had before. Why not some adventure for her to overcome?
6695468 Luckily, we have 10 chapters planned, all published by Christmas as long as Foals recovers from the E.R. alright.

6695477 huh, prayers to her. Trust me, better than being grounded

6695507 Not with this. Go see her recent blogs if you want to see why.

Barely any grammar issues, and it was just amazing! I really like the perspective of how Twilight's dreaming and such. This is amazing:pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss:

Is this story at all based off of Asylum?

6695657 :pinkiehappy: Thank you so much! It was a blast of a concept to plan, and I'm excited to see what you all think moving forward.

6695509 right, sorry, that came out wrong ^^'

This is an interesting concept that you wrote, it's unlike any of the fanfic I read. I enjoyed it so far and I can't wait for the next chapter.

Good luck. :pinkiehappy:

Well I'm curious as to where this story goes. Not much to go on but I think the mood was conveyed well.

:duck:*raises eyebrow* ...Go on...

wait is twilight celestia daughter or what ??????

6701545 After five years of watching over a girl, caring for them, and listening to them, while also seeing everybody else who seems to care for them so, Celestia has gotten attached to Twilight almost as if she were a lover or a daughter.

nuhuh just patient she just has grown to deeply care for Twi

6701565 ok what about shining armor

Shining is Twilight's doctor no relation to her.

6701690 ok suddenly a foal luna appears *wona wants to play whit tia* jumps on tia tickles her

Is she in the episode where Discord tricks Twilight and Cadance into believing he was sick?:derpyderp2:

Why is Twilight in a coma? You mentioned a accident, but what happened? :derpyderp2:

All will be revealed in time ^^ Don't you like a mystery?

6841896 Yes, but still curious :derpytongue2:

Fine, I guess I'll wait and see:ajsleepy:

6841912 You could go with my fun theory for now, and say she was just hit REEEEEALLY hard with a frying pan.

6842007 :rainbowlaugh:
Repunzel what did you do! :trollestia:
Nothing. I swear! :moustache:
Repunzel.... :trollestia:
I swear it wasn't me! :moustache:
I'm waiting :trollestia:
Well you see, Flen wanted to use my frying pan for a special mission. :moustache:
so that's where the crown went. I just thought it was Sunset again:trollestia::facehoof:

This should probably be quick imported into Word or Gdocs or something, then given an editing pass - there's a lot of odd little typos that seem to have made it through like 'a ware' or sentences that don't quite sync up. Still, curious-odd fun overall.

I don't understand how this got so little likes-it's amazing!

Good work you two, a few errors here and there but still very good


And i had the song

playing in the background.

Glad you enjoyed it! And damn, ironic music choice.

Thank you, sorry it made you sad.

1 chapter done... and it's automatically added to the sad bookshelf.

And now after several months, I finally begin reading this... First chapter and I'm already crying. There is no really happy ending waiting for us I think. If she wakes, Equestria is left behind, if she remains asleep all those around her will be sad. Then the really sad one is where she just slips away in her sleep losing both Equestria and the humans who have come to care for her. Either way this Twi needs all possible hugs available to her... I'll see you at the next chapter. Oh yeah and this is getting an early upward facing thumb because it is lovely, Tia is wonderful.

God dammit i decided to read fanfics before going back to watch an anime that's making me sad and boooooom this bomb felt :fluttercry:
still nice chapter :pinkiesad2:

Dang it Foalsy, why must you tear open my heart? So far we have found that Luna is best princess, Tia is most loving maternal figure, and Flutters is too wonderful to be made to cry... So... Keep up the awesome work... please.

I'll see you at the next chapter.

She bowed her head as Twilight stopped responding,

Twilight.EXE has stopped responding:twilightoops:

:fluttercry: I just want to hug Fluttershy now :heart:

Nice Chapter. I feel sorry for fluttershy.

I'm loving this!

Celestia place a hand onto Pinkie’s shoulder

Place should be Placed

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