• Member Since 14th Nov, 2014
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Kailoulou


I sell Celestia and Celestia Accessories

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Princess Celestia, Ruler of Equestria, sometimes needs a moment to herself. She creates the moment on a calm morning where the snow has fallen and the wind blows, with the accompaniment of tea.

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As much as I found myself surprised at the pace, I enjoyed it. Sometimes the details feel slightly rough? There's something about that shampoo line that bugs me and I can't quite figure it out.

The tone was nice, seemed like it fit the story well.

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Maybe it's because we don't understand of the magic of the Magical Shampoo :trollestia: . I mean this is my second story. and I've never been the best at making environments. Anyways, thank you!

As she finished brushing her teeth she spitted out whatever she could into the sink. She then took a cup and filled it with water and placed the water in her mouth, and swooshed the water around in her mouth and then spitted that out also.

The correct term here would be spat.

Also I think swished would be a more smooth word to use than swooshed, even though it's technically correct.

I have to say I thoroughly enjoyed this story. It was a very nice idea and you executed it quite well. :twilightsmile:

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