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MetalBrony823


A brony that loves Heavy Metal, Africa, Rock, and Animals. Not to mention Ponies too. Fluttershy is best pony! \m/

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This reads like it was written by a 12 year old...
Concept is good, but you really got to work on your spelling, grammar, word choice... and most everything else.

'Pipping' ain't easy.

Anyone know any other stories where you bang Luna in your sleep?

My harem-senses are tingling.:pinkiehappy::heart:

6694572 Oh it wasn't a problem. Just too damn funny. Although now it's just ridonkeydick. That edit took away the funniest and best part. Pip don't know those words.

Cute as hell! Keep going, watch that grammar though:ajsmug:

This is why I never use Viagra.

Don't worry, it was apple juice, it was just blended with a small amount of Viagra in it.

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You could look over the errors in your story before I click on the story I saw feeling spelt feeltng or something like that.

Comment posted by MetalBrony823 deleted Apr 7th, 2016

Bet he can't charm Zecora!

Boo don't get my family involved:ajbemused:

If he did Bon Bon then Lyra will have to join in.

"Yes! Give me all your semen within myself." Rarity shouted.

10/10 what every girl says when they have a good time.

/sarcasm

WHERE DID THEY GET THE SOCKS FROM IN PIP'S ROOM?

Let's see if he could break the strictest mare ever.

7376501 They brought them without Pip's parents noticing

7376457 Are you at least enjoying it? or if you are just pointing some stuff out, that's fine.

Besides typos, which are numerous, another big issue I'm having with this story is the lack of world building. What I mean is that there needs to be a reason for this to be happening to Pip. Are horny mares coming on to colts just part of the culture? Is Pip exuding some sort of natural pheromone? Further, there should be changes in behavior with Pip coming to terms with whatever is happening to him while the mares he's been with starting acting differently around him instead of everyone just dismissing what happened like consequence-free one night stands. Consequences, in some form, are necessary to help engross the reader.

a vary good chapter I liked it.

I'm guessing Spitfire.

Bet he can't bang the Mayor.

O miss Milano I can help you out with that problem.:scootangel:

Great potential, but needs some serious work.

I would not mind taking the farm mare for a test drive my self.

I think Pip is confident enough to say it straightforward to Rainbow Dash.

i bet Rainbow Dash is next! :rainbowdetermined2:

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My main issue with the story is that all descriptions of anything is just 'sexy.'
No actual description, just "She did a sexy pose," or "This feels sexy."
Because seriously, define your version of sexy. Is it that one fetish of yours is the only thing you consider sexy? Or maybe a simple wink is sexy to you. It can mean so many different things in this story.

now this is a interesting chapter.
I can only imagine how pent up a super Villon gets.

Wonder if he felt a spark with Silver Spoon?

hum Zecora I would like to spend a little time with her my self.

What the Zodiac calendar says for this year?

I would've said it had an aphrodesiac potion or something.

What are the chances of him doing it with Limestone, Marble, and Maud Pie?

7917943 In dew time. There are lots of sexy mares for Pip to bang in Equestria, and griffons too

7951921 Yep, along with Gilda, Greta, and those two griffon sisters from Equestria games

Sunset hum I must say that was interesting.
but you are missing one of the too Twilights for pip to play with, who knows maybe their will be a new prince or princess out of that little play time.

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