First!

Oh shit...

Man, you are really good at not letting me go to bed. I tell myself "one more chapter, its already too late at night" and then you give me this! A hanging point, not a cliff hanger, the action just leads from one chapter to the next, eternally stringing me along. Stripping me of much needed sleep!
The grammar may not be the best, but my god if the story and action doesn't make up for it.

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I've been working on it. I'm... close. Its not quite how I want it just yet.