7556813 Claps slowly.

good goooood

Man, he should have just killed Sunset, he should have just told Twilight to fuck right off and to stow it. If Sunset had her way Twilight and all of her friends would either be dead or slaves along with their Equestrian versions once she went through the portal.

Awesome chapter dude!

I think it would have been interesting to have Excal kill sunset instead of release her.

PS. Will serenity get the Gersemi?

7557094 No she won't. The armor she has is what she will keep. A... badge of honor is a way.

Just LOL just LOL whole 3 days just that.

Oh man I laughed way to much also can't wait to see drax getting some char dev gonna be fun to see him fit in the story

I can imagine Excalibur's reaction to the Dazzlings.

"Hey Dazzlings. Nyx called, she wants her mind-control power power back"

The country wasn’t run by seven rulers… or as they preferred to be called…
Executioners.

It's Executors. The worst one was Ballas. Now that's a case of a massive unchecked ego.

Hmmmm. Not my favorite chapter but you did really good!!

7566734 I know that now. That was the leading theory for the entirety of the game was humans in suits. Before second dream the lore was choppy. no one knew what the Ember Prime codex file meant, and there were so many other things. It wasn't until Second Dream that it was a confirmed deal. All we really knew was Stalker Quest, that was it. When i started this I was going off that previous theory so many had used. Since i had so much work invested into this story I really didn't want to change all the chapters i spent hours and late nights on.

7567774 Thanks

7557376 Was he the one that wanted the teno killed because they were "Devils from that Hell"?

That bit with Celestia was priceless

7556962 The only problem with that is he's pretty much pussy whipped by twilight.

Wait wait I'm confused Who's Drax?

7767965 Russian operating the chroma

With a shocked and saddened expression, looked at the shocked mares in front of her.

Who looked at the shocked mares? She looked at them. Write "she looked"

When the Tenno was to close, Sunset threw a fist. Only to have it get caught in Serenity’s massive clawed fist.

Replace the period in the middle with a comma.

Cal's no different than Derpy's dad. I can see him prepping his gun if someone decides to date his daughter.

Boomstick huh? where's Wiz for death battle huh? 😁 oh wait Wiz will show up next time they go there and then the studying to see who will win a death battle with Excalibur someone else in the story huh XD

“Actually, Rainbow,” I said, grabbing all their attentions, “Pinkie couldn’t be any farther from the truth.”

I think his meaning is wrong here, they are doubting what pinkie said and this shoots it down further instead of being contrary like rainbow dash's response implies