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We've all heard tales of what happens when changelings get taken in by ponies. However, in almost all these cases it's one of the so-called good ponies that finds and takes in the hapless insectoid. So what happens when an especially low-ranking changeling is found and taken in by an altogether less desirable character?

Well, as one might expect, things don't go to plan.

Artwork crudely modified by me, originally from: http://ackdari.deviantart.com/

First story, so constructive criticism welcomed!

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 109 )

Hahaha! Brilliant work! Finally, a changeling storyline - as with Smoke and Mirrors - that isn't a darned romance! Or about Chrysalis, thankfully.
Why, with Trixie involved, this could be a laugh riot! Consider yourself tracked, good sir! I'm excited for the future of this fic!


Thanks! :pinkiehappy:
Yeah, I'm not really a romance kind of person. I'm aiming for a sort of 'dysfunctional version of Twilight and Spike' dynamic between the two.

Shall be tracking, this certainly seems like the beginning of a rather good fanfic!

Excellent job, especially portraying Trixie's Narcissism. I shall be tracking this!

I've been waiting to read this story ever since you told me about it on my user page! It's really enjoyable so far and I can't wait to see where it goes from here!

Thanks for the shout out, by the way! For the record, though, Mirror's real name is just Mirror. She added on the "Match" part after meeting Pinkie and Fluttershy because she wanted her name to sound more pony-like.

Anyway, it's really good and I hope to see more soon! Please, continue!:pinkiehappy:


Woooops! Slight oversight there. Fixed. Glad you liked. :pinkiesmile:

Well, that could have gone worse! Wonder how Leech is going to fix this one?

It's nice to see an update so soon! I can't wait to see what happens next!:pinkiehappy:

Aw man, that chapter was epic. I especially liked how the crowd reacted to Leech, like he was some kind of bee or spider in someone's house.

Okay, so Trixie's show was a bust. Leech tried, the poor little bugger!

The chapter was a great success at least! Bravo, Gizmo! There have been some very interesting and (by their author's shock) unexpected stories achieving notable success lately! Looks like you're one the brave, the few, the... recent? Yes, that works!

I expect great things for you in the future. No pressure.


Why do I think Trixie's going to do something that'll make me dislike her even more?:trixieshiftleft: We'll see...

Always happy to see this update! Can't wait to see what happens next!

Trixie is an evil mare. That said, I do love her antics so! Maybe I quietly route for her?
Wait, wait. She's doing enough of that herself. Never mind!

:trixieshiftright: - So? Isn't Trixie always right?

Sure. Yes, of course.

Great chapter! I see that she's finally beginning to feel some empathy.

I have a feeling that Trixie's somehow going to simultaneously bungle her own plan, publicly humiliate herself, and nearly drive away Leech in the process.


I'll say this much - she's definitely going to get worse before she gets any better... :trixieshiftleft:

Trixie is great here; you pull off the "Villain Protagonist" plot very well.
Leech is such a lovable little oaf. :twilightsmile:

Slightly shorter chapter than usual this time, the original draft was a bit too long (in my opinion), plus the next half is quite dialogue-heavy. So I split it up. Chapter 5 arriving shortly. :pinkiehappy:

Short, but sweet.:pinkiesmile: This chapter seems to be more setting up the situation than anything else.

Trixie's use of dumb muscle is going to come back to bite her, I'm sure of it! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Hah! Messed up before they even started!:rainbowlaugh:

Serves them right, though, if they were going to beat up Fluttershy and ruin her life to fulfill this plan. Though I do wonder how Leech is going to deal with this. Will he jump in to help in the fight against Rainbow Dash? Maybe...

I love seeing you update! You do it so quickly, too! Keep it up!

Mm. Methinks Rainbow Dash will likely wipe the floor with these muddled miscreants. Leech is his own worst enemy it would seem! I do so hope Trixie doesn't hate on him too much, poor fellow.

On an entirely different note, this place needs a changeling emoticon!

Thanks once again. :twilightsmile: The speed of updates is down to two factors, really - first, I have FAR too much time on my hands at the moment. Secondly, I write each chapter in one go, with no pre-planning. I have a beginning point and and end point in mind, and I literally make everything else up as I type! :derpyderp1: It probably shows. :rainbowlaugh:

Thinking of possibly dropping the comedy tag at this point, reading this chapter back it all seems to have gone a bit metaphysical!

EDIT - Also worth noting that this is *probably* going to be the penultimate chapter. Let's see if I can get this thing wrapped up before the weekend is out! :yay:

Trixie's plan sounds brilliant, but I can see that she didn't take into account who she was working with, (Including herself).

I had a guess that the Diamond Dogs would show up at some point at a gem-themed Festival. I suppose they're somewhat better than a horde of hungry dragons.

I can't wait to see what happens next!

Why don't you have more likes this story is great:pinkiegasp:

Trixie finally gets it! Hooray!

I loved the part where Leech realized that Rainbow Dash busted his tooth. When he got mad, I heard the opening of Tenacious D's Beelzeboss song. Strangely, the song is about the reclaiming of a missing fang.

At least Trixie finally had her epiphany, so that's good.:twilightsmile: I'm more worried about Leech and Rainbow Dash. Which of them is going to take the fall for this? Or will Trixie arrive just in time...

Please get the next update out soon! I really want to know what's going to happen!

It's a crime that this story has so little viewers when it's really pretty damn good, and other changeling-centric stories full of Mary-Sue characters and schizophrenic plotlines are making the feature box every time they update.

This was a really fun, simple story with fun characters to follow and an interesting set of events. I very much enjoyed it. Good show!

Well, that's it then! For now, at least. I think that went alright for a first fic!

Thanks once again for reading. Just thought I'd ask for a bit of feedback, because whilst I had fun with this there's some things I'm not sure about...

First up, was I too descriptive in places? I tried to implement some world-building, but fear at some points I might have just bored the reader with needless details. In turn, I think this made the pacing too variable, with some areas being overly vividly described and some parts being skipped over.

Secondly, Trixie's plan - did it actually make any sort of sense? It sounded a lot better in my mind than it came out in text. I fear this also made the last few chapters complex and quite difficult to follow. Is this me being pessimistic?

Thirdly, Chapter 7 was too long. I know. But there were no 'natural' ending points in the middle so I couldn't break it up! Sorry! :twilightblush:

Also, the comedy aspect - did it get lost in the story? I was trying to be subtle, with maybe a few overt moments. I fear it might have been too subtle and infrequent to warrant the comedy tag - most of the comedy I was trying to convey was situational, rather than straight-up jokes. Not sure it worked.

And lastly... does anyone actually *want* a sequel? Do the continuing adventures of Leech hold any interest to anyone? I've got plenty of ideas - but one thing's for sure, nothing's gonna go to plan for the well-meaning but hopelessly dim Changeling! :moustache:

A great end to a great story. I'm interested in potential sequels! :pinkiehappy:

Keep going, and throw this towards EQD just on the off chance - It's not at all bad.


If you want to write a sequel, I say do it.

As for the story itself, there were a few parts I felt lost its interest, but as a whole it was like watching an episode.

I say do whatever your heart is telling you to do. Don't write it for the audience, but for the joy of it. That's what really matters in the end!

I say you got Leech's character down fairly well. Continue, and your'e likely going to improve upon it. As for sequels, you could try experimenting on different characters or develop on Leech's own development. Will he always remain this loyal? What will happen to all the other changelings? You can use these to add more to the universe you've created.

I hope to see better improvements in the future!

Oh my. Trixie learned the value of friendship! From a changeling no less!

I thought the wrapping up was excellent - there was alot to tie together, after all.

I would love to see a sequel to this! Here's hoping!



Thanks for the feedback. :twilightsmile:

The working title for the sequel is "Back To The Swarm". This may answer some of your questions, or it just might create more. :rainbowlaugh:

I'd love to see a sequel. I really enjoyed this story, after all!:twilightsmile:

I remember when you first mentioned writing this story on my user page. I'm looking forward to anything else you may write!

Oh wow, we need a sequel, and she's right, the other ponies are not ready for The Great and Powerful Trixie! :trixieshiftright:

I loved your characterization and pacing in this. It felt like reading an episode from the show. I haven't read many others, but this has become my favorite post wedding changeling story. Can't wait for the sequel.


Thanks! :pinkiehappy:

But EQD? This is nowhere near that caliber! I'd be laughed out of the room by the prereaders. :rainbowlaugh:

732481 Better to try and fail then not try at all.


How do you know it doesn't already? THEY COULD ALL BE CHANGELINGS! :pinkiegasp: :trixieshiftleft: :applejackconfused:

Trixie of course, had her own agenda behind every facet of this plan. She had already instructed Leech to remove the finest and most valuable gems from the haul he was going to steal, and stash them separately to the sacks of gems he was to give to the Diamond Dogs. These precious stones would be Trixie's source of income, replacing the living he could no longer make as a travelling performer. The Diamond Dogs had no interest in the monetary value of gems anyway, so Trixie figured valuable gems would be wasted on them.

:trixieshiftleft: The great and powerful Trixie may even change her gender when she likes! This is how powerful she is, not even Celestia can do this!

:trollestia: Don't tempt me darling.

:trixieshiftright: Trixie is...unsure if she should be worried or curious.

It was definitely a great effort! Really loved everything about it. It reminds me of when Magica got stuck with one of the Beagle Boys in one of the comics. (Actually surprisingly similar due to the dumb-happy-guy/crabby-aloof-witch/wizard dynamic)
The gemstone heist didn't help either :rainbowlaugh:
I think you should leave it as 'complete' but change it to hiatus when you get back to actively writing a sequel. It can really stand on its own.


Thanks for the feedback, Eventually settled for adding the sequel separately. :pinkiesmile:

There are some fics you know you're going to like the second you read them. You got my favorite pony, acting awesome as always, shout outs to "Smoke and Mirrors" wonderful dialogue and 4th wall breaking. Yep, I think I'm gonna stick a while!:pinkiehappy:

Well that was a fail. Man oh man, this fic is STILL hilarious, even as I write a 1:00 a.m.:twilightblush:

"until an idea landed atop her bouncy pinky mane, crawled down her head, and squeezed itself into her ear."

Sounds like Pinkie to me! :pinkiehappy:

The more I read, the more I remember why I love Trixie so much!:raritystarry:

Hiring... Diamond Dogs... for muscle.

>Meanwhile, in another dimension<

Checker Monarch took a sip of her tea.

It's uncanny! Bonus points for relation.

Uh, waifu. Yes, my dear waifu, um... Your Plan... Your plan was retarded. Too are many hole that you simply can'y justify so you see, dear waifu, there is a reason why your flank will be planks.

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