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Marli_Lin


Hi there, you guys can call me Alex and i'm 20 years old. Likes drawing also writting.

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Soarin is a young singer, famous in Cloudsdale that reappeared after four years of avoiding the world of showbiz.

"I just want you to be my girlfriend for the media." Soarin said to the girl standing in front of him.
Rainbow Dash who had already recognised Soarin from the beginning, but was not in the least impressed. She looked up and stared at him, then said, "Well, as long as my face is not visible."
Soarin unsuspecting why Rainbow Dash immediately accepted his offer, smiled. While Rainbow Dash could only hope she would not regret her decision. The days of summer as Soarin's 'lover' began.

But what the both of them didn't realise, was the truth of the story four years ago was still haunting them.

Chapters (19)
Comments ( 96 )

What's your native language?

6671146 Mine is Indonesian

6671175 Ah, that explains it. No offense but this reads like a trainwreck.
Did you just translate straight through google or did you write this using your own knowledge? I'm not judging either way btw.
I'd be impressed if it's your own knowledge.

6671177 Nnope, Just using words what i know and is really make me feel Dizzy. Also i need find a prof reader as fast as posible :twilightsheepish:

6671197 Don't be offended, but it's also making me a bit dizzy.
I'm not really sure what to suggest to help you, Google Translate is an option (not a favourable one mind), but you could try find some help from a person who's fluent in the english language, or at least the writing part.
Also, impressed that you managed to write 9,700+ words in a language you don't know much about.

6671204 will do it my friend, and sorry about make you dizzy too...:facehoof:

I guess I like it but how do you make new chapters and give them a title?:applejackunsure:

I love the idea of story. I love it so much that I can't get it out of my head.:pinkiehappy: Your story would be much, much better if you find an editor. Let me give you an advice: Visit this group for finding an editor/proofreader. Just make a blog post and ask people who are ready to help.:twilightsmile:

Hey can I be your editor?

I love the story idea but I have to agree with everyone else. You need to get a proof reader specifically to help translate it to English :)

Great story so far I like we're this is heading! :raritywink:
Question though, do you want a proof reader?
I don't mind doing cause I already help someone else with their story as well.
All I would do is change the words around because you've go the general sentence correct just in the wrong order. But your English is really good! :twilightsmile: :pinkiesmile:

i can tell that English isn't your language. It is very broken and some doesn't make sense. like you useing he instead of she and vice versa :applejackunsure:

Great chap! I'll start getting back to editing in Thursday, if you don't mind?

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sorry dude...
english is really not my thing...

Once again, love the story! You just really need to get an English translator/editor to help you :)

Good story just it needs editing but my story may have errors so don't be embarrassed:pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

Plez update :applecry:

Wow, that was fantastic. :twilightsmile: Keep it up!:pinkiehappy::pinkiesmile:

As amazing as always. :raritywink: Keep it up :pinkiehappy:

Wow, it's now getting to the super exciting parts :pinkiehappy: NICE JOB:rainbowkiss::twilightsmile::raritystarry:

6844257 Something was telling me that you're gonna appear :rainbowlaugh:

6850550 Oh, please. How can't I read such a wonderful story? Really, the plot is magnificent.:pinkiehappy:

I can't say anything but right now, I'm exactly like this...
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THAT. WAS. COMPLETELY. BEYOND. WORDS.:rainbowkiss::pinkiehappy::raritystarry:
*leaving and starting to scream in happiness*

Whelp, Dashie's in for it now. Paparazzi galore! :coolphoto:

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I'm so glad that you like it :twilightsheepish:

Cute!! I bit of mistakes made here and there, such as missing words in sentences but that's not too noticeable and doesn't take fron the actual story. This was great to read, definitely earing a fave :twilightsmile:
.....once I finish reading all the other chapters...:pinkiegasp:

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Well gladly you like it and sorry for the missing word :fluttershyouch:
My english still pretty bad...

GOD OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG!!!!!!!!!!!! Shiz About to get real!!!!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHH FFFFFFFFANNNNNNNNNGIIIIRRRRRRRRRRLLLLLLLLIIIIIIINNNNNNNNNNNNNNGGGGGGGGGGGGG!!!!!!!!!!!

This getting more and more exciting, I can't wait to keep reading! :pinkiegasp::raritystarry:

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I know,me myself got excited when write it :rainbowlaugh:

Comment posted by Marli_Lin deleted Jan 21st, 2016

It was incredible :pinkiehappy: If you need some ideas, I have some to help you. :twilightsmile:

Fun. Now she has to deal with Thunderlane. This has seriously gone bananas. :facehoof:

Nice chapter! :pinkiehappy:
It is a bit confusing to understand at times though. :ajsleepy:
Just wondering, is English your native language? Sorry if this offends you.

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is Okay, actually my native language is indonesian and sorry for my bad English.

And sorry confusing you my friend :facehoof:

6862794 Would you like help? I can try to help proofread it. :pinkiesmile:

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Is that okay for you of course :pinkiehappy:

6867179 Sure. Just send me a message with the story document or file.

That was so sweet!!

:fluttercry: That... was so touching.:raritycry: I was smiling through the whole chapter.:pinkiehappy: You really made my da... err night.:rainbowkiss::raritystarry::twilightsmile:

That was soooooo cuteeeee!!!!!!!

Must not explode for cuteness :rainbowkiss:

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Aw thank you guys, i really hope all of you enjoy the story... and sorry for the error:pinkiehappy:

Awww that's so sweet.

6951638 It's an aswome story!!!!!!

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Gladly you enjoy it my friend...

Omg, if you actually would've ended right there, I would've screamed XD

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