Chapter 5 Redone
They say when you’re about to die, your life flashes before your eyes. Whether that’s true or not, you’ll have to find out for yourself.
But this was not the case for Sunset Shimmer. Instead of her whole life, it was one single event in her’s that took up this moment. A moment when she had still been a filly, not long after her parents had died.
She was whimpering into the mane of Princess Celestia, finally beginning to calm down after a long period of sobbing. Celestia had been whispering soothingly to her up until then, before going quiet for a moment, the only sounds being the filly’s sniffling.
Celestia looked up for a moment, her eyes landing on the dresser on which, was a music box that Sunset had had since becoming her student, which honestly, hadn’t been that long so far.
The box had been given to Sunset by her mother, and though Celestia wasn’t so sure it was a good idea at the moment, she felt it was the right thing to do in this case. So, with her magic, she quietly wound the box as it began playing.
Then Celestia began to do something not many had heard her do since she had banished her sister.
She began singing.
……………………………………….
It was not a sharp stab that brought her back to reality as she had expected. But, instead, the noise of doors being kicked open, as commanding voices came from all around.
“Freeze!!” Multiple officers stormed the area, wielding guns.
“Hands up, all of you!” The rest of the students were bewildered as to what else to do at this moment. They had all been taken completely by surprise, and so, with no other choice, they hesitantly complied.
Gilda on the other hand, still had the knife to Sunset, contemplating what to do, as other officers had guns pointed at her. Chances were that if she killed Sunset now, she herself would lose her life as well.
So, reluctantly, she lowered the knife, and let it fall to the ground with a clatter, putting her hands up as well, before an officer approached her and put her in handcuffs.
Being notified of the situation, they had also brought an ambulance with paramedics, who went to work with putting Sunset onto a stretcher, and removing her from the scene, putting her inside a heated ambulance.
Knowing that all would be ok now, her body let itself relax slightly for the first time since this all started.
No longer being in survival mode, it didn’t take long for her body to realize just how much pain it really was in, and before long, she felt the fatigue kick in, and she lost consciousness.
Rainbow dash was heading for the door to leave after she had hung up with Gilda, but just as she was approaching it, it opened up itself, to reveal Pinkie, and an expressionless looking Maud.
“Dashie?...What are you doing here? I mean, not that it’s a bad thing that you’re here, buuuut….How did you get in? Our door was locked.” Pinkie asked curiously.
“I….uhh…” Seeing no other option, she decided to confess.
“I….may have picked your lock…”
Pinkie just gave her a confused look. Maud spoke up.
“Why?...”
“Uhh, it’s a long story ok?...Look, in case you guys think I did, I didn’t take anything, I wouldn’t dream of doing something like that to you guys.”
“I’d never accuse you of such a thing Dashie! Buuuut, why DID you pick our lock?..”
“I just…I needed to use your phone.”
“Oh…Okie dokey lokie!” Pinkie simply walked into the house and threw off her coat, the odd situation not even seeming to bother her anymore, as she made her way into the kitchen to get a snack.
Maud on the other hand, was the one to inquire further.
“Where’s your phone?”
“I don’t have it on me at the moment.”
“hmm. That must have been some pretty important call if you felt the need to pick our lock…”
She sighed.
“Trust me Maud…You have no idea.”
Pinkie poked her head back around the corner at that moment.
“Hey Dashie! You should try the cupcakes I made earlier! Their to DIE for!!”
Rainbow considered turning Pinkie down, and leaving then and there, but now that she thought about it, she didn’t really know what else she could do right now in Sunset’s case. Not to mention leaving then and there might have raised some suspicions. She didn’t know what to do. So reluctantly, she made her way into the kitchen with Pinkie. Maybe she could help relieve some stress and take her mind off things…
The ambulance carrying Sunset made it back to Canterlot Hospital in record time, and they wasted no time getting her inside.
“We got a critical one!” Multiple doctors and nurses flocked to them.
“What do we got?” One doctor asked.
“Multiple broken ribs, cranial trauma, possible spinal trauma, badly frostbitten fingers and toes, not to mention the bruises and welts on various parts of her body.” They talked as they wheeled her in on the bed.
The doctor took notice of her face.
“Is that…a brand mark?...”
The cop cars pulled into the police station, unloading the students, before Gilda realized something important, and spoke up.
“Hey! Someone else was in on all this too!” She protested.
“Rainbow Dash! I would even say the majority of the blame of everything that happened would go to her cause she was the one who sold her out! Told us everything we needed to know to do any of this. If anyone should be going to jail, it should be her!”
The other students voiced their approval at this.
“Can you describe her?” One of them asked.
“Even better! I’ve got her phone. It’s in my pocket.” The officer pulled out Rainbow’s phone, and went to her pictures, scrolling through.
“That’s her.” She stopped the officer as he landed on a picture of her.
“She lives at Clydesdale Ave and Weather drive.”
The officer called some of his colleagues over, relaying the information to them, and they were off, not wasting any time.
Later on, they inevitably fell short. After finding no one home at Rainbow’s place, the police had decided to put a Wanted picture of Rainbow Dash in the news, along with the reason and story why.
After having done some chores around the farm, Applejack decided it wouldn’t hurt for her and her sister to take a break and watch some tv for a while, so she and Applebloom flipped through the channels, until a news story caught their attention.
As the story was told, Applejack couldn’t believe what she was hearing. Without a moment’s hesitation, she abandoned the tv, left the house, and got in their farm pickup truck, with one destination in mind.
Applebloom, after recovering from the shock of the news story, headed out the door, going out of earshot of anybody, and called her friends.
“Scootaloo, call Sweetie and tell her to meet up at the treehouse…We all need to talk.” She said before hanging up, and headed there herself to wait for the other two.
Arriving at the hospital, Applejack went to the emergency, speaking to the first face that she saw.
“Do you know if there’s a Sunset Shimmer here?”
“Yes, but you’re going to have to wait in the waiting room.” She gestured with her hand to a sitting area. Applejack looked back at her.
“It’s really important that I see her now.”
“I’m sorry but we just can’t allow that right now.” The lady tried moving away, but Applejack grabbed her arm.
“Just…At least tell me how she is…”
The nurse looked at her for a moment, then sighed.
“Not good, not good at all. I won’t lie, they brought her here in critical condition.”
Applejack just stared.
“…critical?” She asked quietly. The nurse looked sadly at her.
“I’m sorry, but it would be best if you sat down. I really need to go right now.”
Applejack didn’t argue any further, and let the lady go, while heading to the sitting area.
She took out her phone, calling Rarity, and Fluttershy to see if either of them knew where Rainbow was. Failing, she then called Pinkie, who by then, had invited Rainbow to stay the night.
“Pinkie, I’ve already called Rarity and Fluttershy. Please tell me YOU know where Dash is right now.”
“Dashie? She’s right here! She’s spending the night!”
“Can you please put her on?” Applejack tried to maintain a calm voice.
“Okie Dokie!” She handed the phone to Rainbow, who took it hesitantly.
“H-hey, AJ.” She did her best to sound calm and collected.
“Dash, would you happen to know where Sunset is right now?”
“Uhh…no, I was actually looking for her earlier myself actually…” It wasn’t a TOTAL lie….
Well, I’m at the hospital right now. I came here after seeing a very peculiar news story on TV…Know anything about it?..”
“Uhh…No…”
“Ah think ya do Dash…”
Rainbow gulped. Did she know? How did she know?! What was going on??
“It was on the news Dash…”
Rainbow felt her mouth go dry.
“…What…was on the news?...”
“Everything…” Applejack spoke without emotion.
Rainbow was at a loss for words. Did they get caught? How?!
“Dash, tell me their wrong about you. Tell me you had no part in this…”
“I…I wasn’t thinking AJ, I was just so angry after that post.”
“Angry Dash? I would call that the understatement of the century.” Applejack raised her voice, her own anger becoming obviously heard.
“What in tarnation could have even possibly possessed you to have ANY part in this whatsoever? This isn’t anger Dash, it’s outright murder, even if you weren’t actually there yourself.”
“I…wait, what? What are you talking about, murder?...” Pinkie, by now, was trying to hear in on the conversation.
“I’m talking about sitting in a waiting room at Canterlot Hospital, trying to see Sunset, but not being able to, cause the doctors tell me she’s in critical condition!” Applejack’s voice was starting to crack.
“…What?...” Rainbow whispered.
“What do you mean, what??”
“AJ…I…I didn’t know anything about that…”
“Well, tell me what you DID know Dash. What were you expecting was going to happen when you agreed to be part of this?”
Rainbow had no response for that, because she DID know Sunset would end up in the hospital…She just didn’t know it would be this bad…
“That’s what I thought…” Applejack said after getting no reply. She sighed.
“I really don’t know what else to say…You need to go to the police station. Their lookin’ for ya Dash. I’m tellin’ ya this for your own good…If you hand yourself in, then maybe they’ll consider givin’ you a lighter sentence.”
“…Ya…You’re right.” She said quietly, before hanging up.
“Dashie?...What was that all about?” Pinkie asked slowly.
Rainbow stayed silent for a long while, before finally answering.
“I’ve gotta go Pinkie.” She said as she opened up the door and left without another word.
“Hey Applebloom.” Scootaloo greeted, as she and Sweetie bell arrived.
“So, what exactly is this about? You sounded kind of anxious on the phone.”
“Scootaloo…Sweetie…Have either of you guys seen the news recently?...” Applebloom began quietly.
“Uhh, no actually.” Scootaloo said.
“I don’t really watch the news all that much.” Sweetie Bell agreed.
“Why do you ask?”
“Because just before I called Scootaloo, me and mah sister happened to be watching the news…When a certain story came up…” She paused before continuing quietly.
“Sunset’s in the hospital.” She said barely above a whisper.
“What??” Scootaloo gasped.
“What happened?”
“A bunch of students lured her into the school after hours on Thursday evening…Where they beat her.”
Everything went dead silent.
“….What?...” Sweetie spoke up.
“They say that after they caught them, there was one student who felt bad, and told them everything that happened…That’s how they found out about the attack at the school, because the police found them at an abandoned factory outside of town.”
“What were they doing outside of town if this originally took place at the school?” Sweetie Bell asked.
Taking a deep breath, Applebloom continued.
“After the attack at the school, they took her to this abandoned factory, leaving her there overnight where she just about died. They didn’t say all that happened there, but when they got there…She had a knife to her throat…They were going to kill her.”
Everything was silent for a long while, before Scootaloo found her voice again.
“Who…Who called this in, in the first place? How did the police find out where they were or anything?”
“Would you believe…two students from Crystal Prep?...”
“What?!!” Scootaloo screeched.
“I don’t believe that for a minute…”
“Well, believe it or not…two happened to come upon the place…saw what happened, and called the police, telling them everything they saw.”
“Wow…Crystal Prep is REALLY going to hate us now…” Scootaloo said.
“Worst thing is that now they have good reason to hate our school…” Sweetie Bell added.
“It gets even worse…” Applebloom looked at Scootaloo.
“What?...Why are you looking at me like that?...”
“Rainbow Dash…Well, she wasn’t actually there…but she was involved.”
“…What?...” Scootaloo said quietly.
“Apparently, Dash told them where she lived, and how to lure her.”
Another long silence permeated the air once again.
“Guys…we need to come clean…about everything…” Applebloom finally said.
“What?!!” Scootaloo shouted in objection.
“Bloom, we can’t do that! According to what you’re saying, they tried to KILL Sunset! What would they do if they found out it was US all along??” She put her head in her hands.
“Why did you guys post the thing about Dash? WHY?! I told you it was a BAD idea!!”
“We just got carried away! We never imagined in a million years something like…this would happen!”
“We have to tell the truth you guys! What if it gets worse?”
“They literally tried to kill Sunset! How could it possibly get any worse? The damage is already done.” Scootaloo said.
“I say we stop the Anon-a-Miss thing, and wait for things to blow over…The storm’s obviously already been had in all this, and if we come clean now, it’s only going to start everything over again. This time with us in the middle of it.”
“But if we stop now, and don’t come clean, then all it’s going to do is confirm everyone’s suspicions that it was Sunset all along…” Applebloom argued.
“Probably…But I think it’s safe to say that the school has already vented their fury against Sunset…Surely they’ll leave her alone now. Things can only start getting better from here…”
“So that’s it then?...We’re just going to let Sunset take the fall for what we did?”
“I think we already did…” Scootaloo said quietly.
Applebloom turned to Sweetie Bell.
“Sweetie…What do you think?”
Sweetie was silent.
“I…I don’t know…” She finally answered, having tears in her eyes.
“How could this have gotten so out of control?...It isn’t right to put the blame on Sunset any longer, so…I say we confess.”
Applebloom and Sweetie both looked to Scootaloo.
“You guys…I can’t. I seriously can’t! Rainbow sold Sunset out, thinking SHE was the one who let her secret loose…What is she going to do when she finds out WE were responsible the whole time?”
“I don’t know. But we can’t keep hiding behind this…” Applebloom said.
“…We’re going to jail…” Scootaloo said quietly.
“We. Are. Going. To. Go to jail for this!! Do neither of you care about that??”
“Of course we do…” Applebloom said quietly.
“But we should care more about Sunset…” She finished, as Scootaloo went silent for a while, before sighing.
“You’re right…”
“Applejack went to the hospital right after the news story…Maybe we ought to go there too.” Applebloom said.
Nobody argued, but merely nodded their heads, as they began making their way away from their fort.
They rode their bikes to the hospital, texting Applejack to see where she was inside.
They felt nauseous as they made their way down the halls, trying to think of what exactly they were going to say to Applejack.
Soon enough though, they came upon the waiting area Applejack was in.
All rehearsals of what they were going to say were lost to them though, as Applejack got up and gave them all a group hug.
“You three are such good girls you know that? To show concern for Sunset after everything she’s done to the school. Most people wouldn’t give a second glance to her, even in the state she’s in right now. I’m just here because I’m against killing. Sunset did some pretty horrible things, and though I may never forgive her, or want anything to do with her anymore, I also would never condone killing. I’m glad to see that you three share that same feeling.”
Applebloom cringed inwardly as she pulled away from her sister.
“Big sis…It’s true we are very concerned about Sunset…We wouldn’t be here right now if we weren’t… We do care deeply for Sunset…It’s the main reason we’re here now… But it’s not the only reason…”
“What do ya mean Bloom?” Applejack asked.
Applebloom sighed as she looked at her two friends for a moment, before focusing back on her sister.
“Sis…If I told you I did something really bad…You’d still love me right?”
Applejack looked shocked at even the prospect of what that question implied.
“Of course ah would Bloom…there’s nothing you could ever do to make me love you less.”
“….Even if I did something unforgivable?...” Applebloom whispered with tears in her eyes.
“Bloom….” Applejack spoke softly, looking Applebloom directly in the eyes.
“There’s no such thing as unforgivable.”
“If that’s true…then forgive Sunset.”
“I…I’m sorry?”
“Tell me you forgive Sunset…Please big sis…”
“Bloom…why is this so important to you?...”
“Because if you don’t….Then you can’t justify forgiving me for what ah’ve done…”
"What are you getting at Bloom?...”
Applebloom took a deep breath, readying herself…and then broke down crying. She took out her phone, wiping her eyes to try and be able to navigate to the Mystable App and sign in to the Anon-a-Miss account. Once she had managed, she wordlessly, and shakily handed the phone to Applejack.
Applejack took the phone, looking over the page, multiple feelings overcoming her as she scrolled through the page.
First came shock. Then realization. Then betrayal, hurt, and finally anger, as she looked up at Applebloom.
“Is this some kind of joke Bloom?...” She asked barely above a whisper.
“Cause it sure as heck ain’t funny.”
“It wasn’t just her….” Sweetie Bell spoke up quietly.
Applejack looked at the other two, realization dawning as she slowly shook her head.
“It’s not true…” She said in denial.
“It is…” Scootaloo confirmed with tears of her own.
“You guys….” She said, trying to comprehend this.
“Why?...”
“Looking back…It all seems so stupid now….Back when you guys were having those slumber parties, and spending so much time together…we got jealous…we wanted you guys to spend more time with us.”
“You girls…You did this cause you were jealous?...” Applejack’s voice cracked.
“We never meant for it to go near this far! We never imagined something like…this would happen…Can you…Can you ever forgive us?...”
Applejack had by now, sat down and had her head in her hands. She looked up at them.
“I want to… Bloom I really want to…But it’s like you said…How do I justify forgiving you three without a moment’s hesitation…While I wanted nothing to do with Sunset for thinking she was the one who had done all this…It would be like a slap in her face…”
Applejack paused for a moment, deep in thought, before continuing quietly, barely above a whisper.
“Oh sweet mercy…I wouldn’t even talk to her…”
“…..CHS did this?....” Sunny spoke quietly after seeing the news story on TV.
“I’ve always known that school was no good…” Cinch said solemnly. Though deep down, she couldn’t help but feel a little happy that this had happened. This would totally destroy any chance that CHS had at ever gaining any sort of reputation. Now this incident was all it would be known for in the future, and Crystal Prep’s reputation was sure to remain safe.
All of this good fortune may have come at the cost of a girl nearly losing her life…But that was just it…She didn’t, she lived…And even if she hadn’t…well…People die everyday.
She honestly would thank the people responsible for all this if she could…
The last day of school had been a long one, and Celestia was just glad it was finally done. She had called the CMC into her office that morning after yet another update had been posted by Anon-a-miss. She couldn’t accuse them of anything just yet without any solid evidence, but she asked them if they knew anything that may help them solve who was behind it all, to which Scootaloo had denied, with Applebloom and Sweetiebell following suit.
Celestia sighed as she got into her car. She had to get some extra stuff done after school hours, and it was nearing 5:30pm now. She decided to stop by Sugarcube Corner for some coffee on her way home, pulling into the lot.
Coming up to the counter, she greeted Mrs. Cake.
“Evening dearie, how’s the school been treating you these days?”
Celestia sighed.
“You don’t know the half of it…”
“Oh, I’m sorry to hear that…You do look rather stressed out. Tell you what, I’ll make you a latte on the house.” Mrs Cake smiled at her.
“I’d…really appreciate that, thank you.”
“Think nothing of it dearie.” She went to the back to make the drink.
Celestia smiled. You could always count on Mrs. Cake to brighten up a mood. It was no wonder she and Pinkie worked together so well.
As she was waiting, the tv they had hanging in the top corner caught her attention. The news was playing, but what really caught her attention was when they showed a picture of Rainbow Dash.
Mrs. Cakes came out with the drink, about to say something, but saw Celestia’s eyes glued to the tv screen. She glanced at it to see what had caught her attention, and upon seeing the picture, and hearing the story, she slowly put the drink down on the counter, suddenly being as mesmerized by the tv, as Celestia was.
There was silence between the two for a moment after the story ended and went to the next one.
“Mrs. Cake…Pinkie wouldn’t happen to be here would she?...” Celestia asked quietly.
“I…I gave her the day off…”
Celestia slowly got up, abandoning her drink, and made her way out.
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With Rainbow frosting perhaps?
Yes more i hope sunset hates dash her friends and the cmc also i hope twilight gets involved
6892196 Me too, I feel like the crusaders always get away with this a bit too easy in these stories. Also
So much better then before. Also the damage Sunset suffered is more realistic then it was in the original story. You know, I though that you were just going to let this story die. I'm glad I was wrong.
Lighter sentence? AJ, even not directly involved, she's taken part of an attempted murder. I highly doubt they'll give her a lighter sentence. So in this case, since attempted murder sentences last from 10 to 15 years in prison, the "lighter" sentence would be 5 years.
This is certainly a much better Chapter 5 than the previous version. I'm glad you decided to scrap that one.
Ooooooh, Gilda, you b
ch. I love this chapter. Can't wait for what happens next. I definitely want to see more of Crystal Prep and Cinch. That will be fun.
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She had no idea that anyone involved was planning murder and will likely testify against them and plead guilty. More importantly she had no reason to even suspect that she was taking part in a murder attempt. She'll get a reduced sentence. She would be on trial for a lot of "conspiracy to..." charges, though.
6893124 Fine by me then. Probably expecting at least five years in prrison.
I have to say great Chapter I like it.
You did well for each character on how they would react, act, and respond.
Except maybe Cinch for being ok that her school will be better despite the fact it might cost a life.
I would love to see everyone who blamed Sunset would all feel guilty.
Hopefully Sunset survives though don't let her die.
I would like to see Sunset either going to Crystal Prep and leave Canterlot, She goes back to Equestria, or maybe Celestia adopting Sunset.
Then again for a person who is a principal she was pretty useless for not stopping Anon-a-miss in the first place.
I think that this remake is much better... Good Job!
I'll look forward to the next one.
I was worried that you might have given up on this.
Glad that you're still going forward.
Heh, imagined this scene in hosptal with all Rainbooms near emergency room:
Principal, we come here as fast as we can. How's Sunset?
...
erm...Why is here so hot?...
Er, Principal, please, talk with us. Ya're scare us.
Thank you, girls for your concern. But there's just one problem. Women stared on girls with fiery eyes, her arms with heavy golden bracelets absent-mindedly petting curls of Sunset's hair. You're talking to the wrong Celestia.
Sorry for bad English.
****'s really going to hit the fan now, with the truth revealed about what Rainbow Dash did, what happened to Sunset and the truth about Anon-A-Miss. Makes me wonder if theres a way for Twilight and Princess Celestia to find out what happened, as we saw the pricincpal watch a news bulletin that her students nearly commented murder, and one helped arrange it.
Rainbow is so screwed, not even an explosion would blow her off the wall she's screwed to. Good riddance for that, as she knew that Sunset would end up in the hospital.
From the looks of things, Sunset has a very low chance of surviving, all thanks to three jealous clingy brats and the 'sister' one of them worships.:flutter cry:
P.S: As for Prinipal Cinch..She's right about the scandal improving Crystal Prep's repetition. Cause, who here would want to send their kids to a school who's students murdered an innocent person?
As for her lack of concern for Sunset's life..We're talking about a woman who didn't care about anyone getting hurt when one of her students nearly destroyed her dimension only because she was bullied into Unleashing the Magic.
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There actually is.
-Twilight to Sunset, Chapter 10, Anon-A-Miss
But there's a possibility that that might not be a thing anymore since the point of divergence is right after Ch 5 ends.
A heavy improvement over the previous draft. Though I have to say, even though she was only here for a few lines, damn Cinch, that's stone cold.
I felt empty reading this story, but now that justice is going to be served...the terrible things Sunset has gone through...the poor, poor girl.
I really hope that Equestria learns of this. In a way, this is major. You could say that the humans in the EG-universe have essentially declared war on the FiM-universe since they almost killed one of their citizens, if not successfully have if Sunset's surgery fails. Please, please do this! I want the ball to roll, and size into a WMD. There needs to be serious repercussions for these kind of actions, especially for attacking the ex-student of Princess Celestia and, essentially, her daughter.
And the cupcakes reference
Cinch is an reputation maniac
Oh man, this chapter really got me. Especially Applejack's last line. Gods, it was so heartwrenching, the entire thing. However, now I'm kind of excited. I don't know what to expect of Celestia in this fic. Is she going to try fixing things as best she can but ultimately leave it up to everyone involved? Is she going to go on a war path (tch, Celestia on a war path, that'd be a hoot)? Something else entirely? Gods, I'm so excited!
Side note: Can someone kill Cinch already? No matter what story I see her in, I just really want her to die...
My heart keeps being ripped and stomped into the ground with this story
Look like Cinch is still a bitch hey that rhymed
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We need to make this into a poem!
Umm...
Cinch, is a grinch,
Like the grinch, she's a bitch,
It's quite a pitch, but hey, it's Cinch
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how about...
twas the night before christmas break
when everyone thought sunset was Anon-A-Miss,
though it was quite fake.
then a body of thirty said enough of this.
poor innocent sunset was then lured into a trap
the thirty beat upon her in act of vengeance in hope of quelling the menace
they took sunset to a old factory to when she finally awoke felt like crap.
but what the thirty didn't know they were about to pay a penance
that's all i got right now
I think this would work better for the song