Sibling Rivalry

With great longetivity comes a great affinity for pranks. And when two alicorn siblings start to prank each other, anything is possible.

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War · 13th Nov 2015 · 1,628 words
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The Chapter Is A Lie · 15th Nov 2015 · 2,398 words
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Peace · 17th Nov 2015 · 614 words
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Macgyver644200

Macgyver644200 #1 · Nov 14th, 2015 · · · War ·

Well, I didn't notice anything. In any case, this is a good, hilarious start.

Neko Majin C

Neko Majin C #2 · Nov 14th, 2015 · · · War ·

Princess Celestia, whom at present was finishing up hearings with her audience but yet had a few last minute stragglers,

This should be "who".

Luna herself was in her bathrobe, mane still pinned up from her shower, and was standing next to the telescope that jetted out from her window.

"Jutted", unless it zoomed around the room.

Having pulled away from her audience thinking something was wrong, she sounded vaguely annoyed now..

You either have an extra period or you are one period shy of an ellipsis.

It must have burned out.

Extra space.

Yay! You have returned! And you brought pranks! Happy Pranksgiving!

This was cute. I was kind of hoping that Celestia would not do anything and the thought and anticipation of a prank that would not come would drive Luna insane. However, this was better.

I look forward to the next chapter.

~KBO.

Tatsurou

Tatsurou #3 · Nov 15th, 2015 · 1 · · The Chapter Is A Lie ·

So, Luna enchanted the coffee to make Celestia taste everything as alfalfa?

And Celestia countered by making her eat something plainly designed for dragons?

lunabrony

lunabrony #4 · Nov 15th, 2015 · · · The Chapter Is A Lie ·

6636405 They're alicorns, they can handle it

Neko Majin C

Neko Majin C #5 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · The Chapter Is A Lie ·

She was almost at the delicious cake, but efore reaching it, the trumpets sounded again.

Missing b.

And just like that, the princess of the night stode in, during mid day, sipping gently and elegantly of some strong coffee.

'Strode".

She could hear cameras snapping away the moment the it lifted up.

I am sorry, what?

Alfalfa biscuits, alfalfa donuts, alfalfa liqourice, alfalfa jello, utterly unsweet toffee…

"liquorice" or "licorice".

But there just wasn’t a moment to scold Luna for this clearly out of the line, prank.

The "the" and the comma are unnecessary.

Luna froze the instant she closed her mouth her around it.

This is unneeded.

Ooh, a slight cliffhanger. I look forward to seeing how this plays out.

~KBO.

The Diplomat

The Diplomat #6 · Nov 16th, 2015 · · · The Chapter Is A Lie ·

That was a fcked up prank Luna pulled there. Even the lava cake wasn't enough since she basically ate the equivalent of a ghost pepper. Keep going!

Sigmacipher

Sigmacipher #7 · Nov 17th, 2015 · · · Peace ·

"Everything alright in here, Shining?"
The Captain grinned.
"Just fine, Private. Just fine."

Considering the fact that the said private somehow forgot he was talking to an officer I'm half-expecting it to be Cadence in disguise.

lunabrony

lunabrony #8 · Nov 17th, 2015 · · · Peace ·

6643154 I imagine he's always been laid back and cool about it

Plus I know zero about military stuff so

Sigmacipher

Sigmacipher #9 · Nov 17th, 2015 · · · Peace ·

6643159

I imagine he's always been laid back and cool about it

To be fair...considering how sloppy Equestria's military is...I kinda ready to agree with you on that.

Bronzedragon

Bronzedragon #10 · Nov 17th, 2015 · · · Peace ·

As some of my classmates from high school have just found out these many, many years later, it's the quiet ones that can get away with many things. And if you say nothing than you can set back and enjoy the chaos.

Neko Majin C