Sombra was defeated by the Royal Sisters many moons ago, cast away forever.
However, he left one thing in Equestria that would guarantee his return. One thing that would let him rule not only the Crystal Empire, but all of Equestria
And he did return...and lose. Thanks to one, small, miniscule baby dragon.
That just means one thing...
His weapon is getting stronger even now.
In the world of Remnant, Roman Torchwick has been arrested, the efforts of the White Fang have been halted, and the tournament has begun. Things are looking up for Team RWBY otherwise known as, Ruby Rose, Weiss Shnee, Blake Belladona, and Yang Xiao Long.
However, on their way to see their friends, Team JNPR, fight in the first round, Team RWBY find themselves being pulled into not only a new world, but a new conflict.
Oh, and they are all ponies now.
Can the Mane 6 and Team RWBY overcome Sombra's forces?
Or will shadows of past sins plague the land forever
I got to say, I'm look forward to see what happens next. I also have a good idea what these "creatures" are and can't to see the reaction from the main 6, good luck and see you in the next chapter :)
6629536 Thank you for your feedback. I'm currently working on Chapter 2. And I think you'll get what you're looking for.
Well the grimm are now in ponyland and all hell broke loose! Also awesome chapter and can't wait to see how team RWBY react to equestria and the fact that they turn into ponys xD . Also I got a question that's bugging me for a bit...... who's faster, Rainbow dash or Ruby???? The million doller question is now up!!!! Also do you have a time fram of when your posting chapters (like every two weeks or every month etc) or is it when you post them when you post them???
6641658 Well first of all, it's not the grimm. It's an entirely separate creature, but hasn't been given a name yet. Have you ever seen a grimm with crimson claws and teeth, made of shadows. Also, if it was a grimm, I would've brought up the skull on it's face. Second, it's really I post them when I finish. No real schedule, but I'll try to get one out every week starting now. Thank you for your feedback. I appreciate your interest in the story.
6643274 Really not the grimm? huh I thought they were since the big wolf sounds a lot like the were-wolves from the RWBY red trailer...... oh well again can't wait to read next chapter :)
6643284 I didn't think about those creatures. Huh...I guess I did describe them like those creatures. Anyway, they are still an entirely separate species and are not from Remnant. Good observation though.
It's Faunus and she's part cat not fox.
Firstly: OH GODS IS AJ TURNING INTO ONE OF THEM!!!!! Secondly: poor pinky T_T and lastly: Yay team RWBY is in ponyland! This is a awesome chapter, the feels oh the feels there is so much! Can't wait to see what happens????
First of all, Faunus.
Second of all, Blake is part Cat.
Third of all, it's Pyrrha or Pyrrah.
Finally, Grimm cannot infect or transform another sentient life into a creature of Darkness--It doesn't fit with Grimm lore. Grimm lore has been established in series, they are sensitive to negative emotions which draw them in and the are purely creatures of Chaos and Destruction not an infection.
Anyway, I await the next chapter.
What an interesting chapter.
6670593 You are right, and I apologize. It was 3 in the morning when I wrote this and I didn't think to check the spelling or Blake's oter species. I'll make sure to change that. Thank you for your feedback.
6670993 You are also correct Shadowpony12. I was trying to get this out as soon as possible and that led to two different spelling mistakes and a continuity error. I will try to be more careful next time.
Although, you seem to be mistaken on your last comment. I already pointed out to DemonG that these creatures are not Grimm, they are an entirely separate entity, and thus have their own properties. Please keep that in mind when reading the rest of the story. Thank you for taking and interest in my work. I hope you will enjoy what I have in store for these characters.
6671261 Next time, take your time. No need to rush, taking a little extra time is good not only for you, but your story.
Secondly, when I posted that comment it was before Demon posted.
Finally, I maaaay have skipped over creature description
, so that it my own fault. Anyway, I see what you mean now that I re-read that particular description.
Love the story so far, keep it up.
Welcome team RWBY to the land of equestria...we need your help!
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this is awesome
7015159 Thank you! support like this is what keeps me going and I thank you for it. I am going through some tough times and the next chapter got very...very delayed. Thank you taking an interest in my work.
It lives!!!!!
This should be interesting... You have my attention!
Holy throne, that was intense!
7116693 Yes, yes, I know it took forever. But now it indeed does live my friend.
7116714 Thank you. Hopefully I can keep your attention until the very end.
Dang dude, really pulled on the old heartstrings with AJ and Pinkie!
7116734 Believe me, I plan on keeping an eye on it, activating the tracking beacon now...
7116743 You haven't seen nothing yet.
It's back! Had to read back a bit to resume the situation.
It's nice to see that you didn't left AJ impair and make her have a quick recovery, but I had expected team RWBY to already interact with the main cast since you seem have already brought them to Equestria.
Oh well, maybe in your next chapter that I hope will come soon. But do take the time to write it till you're satisfied.
Also here are a couple of mistakes I witness.
stolen
I think you missed a word or two, depending on what you tried to say.
Luna is here as well.
Full stop missing
Need to be rephrased.
Needs an additional point.
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Missing full stop.
bit: stay in Equestrian currency for immersion. - Question mark at the end.
Missing full stop.
Missing full stop.
"Oh, she said that her heart was in a good deal of pain, correct?"
Missing full stop.
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7116983 Thank you for your feedback, and thank you for the help with all the typos. As you can tell, I'm not good at finding the smaller mistakes. I appreciate your help and I hope I can continue to entertain you.
7116983 And about your concern with Team RWBY, this chapter takes place before that part in Chapter 3. Next chapter is when we will see them get called to Equestria from the other world's point of view.
Can't wait till next chapter
I like the art can't wait to read the story
Great descriptions! But I will say this.
I just...OWWWWWWW!!!
Merciful emperor...
Everything seems to be falling apart.
It raise again.
I'm seeing reference from "the Fall of the Crystal Empire" fan animation and Chrysalis' comic book backstory.
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This is really a continuation of that fan animation, so everything that happened in that animation, happened 1000 years ago. As for Chrysalis, I didn't take any inspiration from that comic so I guess its just a coincidence
im getting Danganronpa vibes from this
Lots of despair and stuffs
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While that was completely unintentional, I am a MASSIVE Danganronpa fan, and if I conveyed that kind of feeling, I won't complain.
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I reviewed the chapter again to single out mistakes since I saw some the first read. There is quite a bunch. May I suggest you to use Grammarly. It's a free software that checks your grammar, syntax, etc. It's not perfect but it could greatly reduce the number of mistakes you oversight.
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"him" doesn't sound right in this context. If talking about the one creature who wounded AJ it's better to use "it", otherwise use them. / thought
I am going to have to politely
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Not wrong per se, but "Tartarus" being their determination of "Hell", it would be more logical to use the former or you could use their pony expression "the Hay". Though this being Pinkie speaking, you decide if you want to change or not.
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Thank you once again for your help. It is very much appreciated. I just want to say, however, I considered using tarturus, but it just didn't feel right and didn't really carry enough punch. Phrases like "Rot in Tarturus" I'll still use, but there is nothing explicitly stating its anything more than just a prison. Plus, I've seem plenty of stories that have the characters use "hell" but I won't be using the word too much so I don't think its that big of a deal. Also, I have reasons for saying "him" instead of "it". He wasn't talking about the creature that attacked AJ.
So, the Grimm have found their way into Equestria.
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When is the update?
I can haz update.
hay do continue it I want to see more chapters
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