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PastaSparq


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The Valley of End was a wretched place. Sasuke hated it, and despised it. Meanwhile, Naruto saw the beauty of it. After their final fight, the two boys are left for dead on the ground, without arms. After Sasuke admits defeat to Naruto, he willingly accepts death, and a shining light takes him.

When Sunset is trying to earn forgiveness from everyone, she can't seem to get anything right. Trixie harasses her, Everyone despises her.... Even her friends belittle her. But on one fateful day, she meets a new student. His name? Uchiha Sasuke. When they become acquainted, will Sunset finally be able to show someone the Magic of Friendship? Will Sasuke find that magic by looking through her eyes, or live in the eternal darkness of his eyes?

ALRIGHTY GUYS!!!! LET'S SEE IF WE CAN GET THIS ONE ON THE FEATURE BOARD!!!!!!!!!!!!

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This story was promoted only moments ago.

You have my attention. Although I am getting a little tired of the dying and being reborn/send into a new world bit but most of them are focused on Naruto so Sasuke is a nice change of pace.

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Yes, and it was promoted shamelessly.

YESSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Finally a Naruto fic that ISN'T a complete peace of garbage!It's about time that something of high quality is produced.


By the way,please tell me you're going to let Saske have chakra in this world.

6628153 KO awesome dude hope you make more awesome than ever also who is going to be Sasuke's lover in this story. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

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It will officially be a Sasuset shipping. I totally ship them together.:raritywink:

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Yes, he will be able to use chakra.

Sasuke DOESNT DESERVE SUNSET HES A JERK

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This is reformed Sasuke. Of course he doesn't deserve a hot lady like her, but she's gonna show him the magic of Friendship.

Travis X Sunset...:rainbowkiss:
Sasuke X Sunset....:rainbowderp:
I know barely anything about Naruto but this is a good story!:twilightsmile:

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I thought it was Travis X RD...:rainbowderp:
Ehhh, whatever! I ship almost EVERYONE with Sunset, so...:rainbowlaugh:

6629163 hmm sappy and still reforemed or not even before the betrayed the leaf he was still a jerk

6630245 Oh right! Sorry, I actually ended up forgetting the sister brother thing:facehoof:
Sunset can definitely be shipped with a lot of characters, anyways:scootangel::rainbowkiss:

Comment posted by The laid back hunter deleted Nov 16th, 2015

Saske is not afraid to let his dark side show.He is a killing machine that care for no one.He has nothing to lose because he has already lost everything he once cared for.

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But this is after he revealed that he was changed. He isn't a mindless killing machine. Most likely why he didn't just kill the Humane 6.

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But he has nothing to loose and this dark version of Saske will probably already know everything about HIMSELF.It probably would not have a mind of its own or would easily be able to leave him it PART of his personality,not an evil spirit.This same thing can be applied to Sunset.The crown of twilight only SHOWED what was in her hart.Basically what kind of a person they were and it has probably changed by now.I thought one of the Akasuki would have hunted him down to finish him for going back on his word and failing the Akasuki.

6637385 KO awesome chapter hope to see more of Sasuke's powers and skills as well as finding his love interest. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2:

O...M...G:pinkiegasp: SO AWESOME!!!!:rainbowdetermined2:

This is gonna be a good story! I can SO tell!

YOSH!! The Flames of Youth burn brightly in this fic!!! Awesome!!! I'm loving this! Please update this soon!:pinkiehappy:

6637623 KO please that the next chapter is coming soon. :pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::rainbowdetermined2:

Critic Review:
Okay, this chapter has certian issues that need to be worked if you want to continue this fic and make it the best you possibly can. A major issue I've seen is that, the story isn't being properly conveyed. There's some words and sentences that don't match up correctly with several characters' personalities, such as what Fluttershy, Rainbow, and Pinkie said in the beginning. Flutters was way too quick to assume the worst and that Applejack would be fine alone. I'd expect her to be worried for her safety actually. What Rainbow said is just out of place. It would flow way better if line about the she-demon was just a joke with her winking at Sunset. And that blowing people up line from Pinkie doesn't exactly suit who she is and doesn't work well with this because that's not happened or will happen. It's the power of friendship, so it pretty much voids killing. If she just said to use the ultimatest powers of friendliness it would be fine, if it was something from Equestria. If not, I have no idea what the effects would be. You can actually come up with that on your own. Overall, everything just needs to flow better. You have a decent story here, but being unable to write with a certain quality can really destroy it. Try to find ways to make it act more fluid-like and not clunky with any major abruptness about it, and don't forget the true personalities of the characters.
I hope you can take anything away from this. Good luck writing.

liked it so far. definatly gonna keep an eye on it

so..........
WHEN, or is this goin' to be a
i.imgur.com/hz9tMJZ.gif
thing?

7620323 I don't understand. The pic won't show up

What changes are you making? Honestly the whole bit of the two dying has been done to death.

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I just felt that this wasn't executed properly enough. I sorta rushed into it without thinking.

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Well, this definitely isn't in my top priorities. It will be sometime next year.

Lemme know when the new version is up!

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As long as the new version is more creative than the whole dying/send over to a new world overused bit that a lot of authors than it'll be good in my book.

Maybe: Sasuke is sent over to the EGverse via some accident or something and is trying to find a way home, meets and slowly befriends Sunset, maybe asks her to go with him following the Anon a Miss incident?

Then you forgot a step mark this one was cancelled

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