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Hat Trick's Nightmare

Is Hat Trick, husband of Trixie Lulamoon, ready for the next step in life? Or will a certain alicorn have to help him?

A heart-finding story of the realization of becoming a father
posted for my friend who thought it wasnt good enough

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EverfreePony

EverfreePony #1 · Apr 7th, 2019 · · ·

A lovely story, the beginning and the nightmare sequence got me a little scared at first with how chaotic they were, but the Luna part, as well as the ending flowed really nicely, with a certain sense of calm about them.

One thing I noticed: if there is a speaking action present in a dialogue tag, don’t end the direct speech before it with a period. Use a comma instead