"I'm a failure Derpy! A failure!" Rainbow wailed between sniffles and audible cries. Derpy hadn't removed her wing from Rainbow's back.
"No you're not Rainbow! You are a great flyer! They just think you're too good for the team!" Derpy tried. She was determined to make her friend feel better, but to no avail.
"But that means that I tried too hard to get into the Wonderbolts! They think I'm desperate! A silly filly who is too much!" Rainbow yelled. She had caught the attention of a few residents below, who had started to gather under the flying cloud home of Ponyville's best flyer and weather control caption, not to mention the barer of one of the Elements of Harmony and one of the best friends of a princess.
"Rainbow Dash!" a familiar voiced called to her. She turned to see none other than the Wonderbolt himself, Soarin'. She had been one of his biggest fans ever! And there he was in his suit, which mocked her.
"What?" Dash replied, putting her head back in her hooves as she sniffled loudly. Derpy finally stopped her relentless wing wrapping and backed off to give the two space. She even considered flying back to the mail room, but just flew over and sat on the nearest cloud.
"I came to check on you. I care about you and..."
"Save the stupid sappy stuff, Soarin'! I failed at becoming the thing I dreamed of becoming my entire life! How am I supposed to go on like this! I just need some space..." Rainbow said. Soarin' was a bit overprotective of her sometimes, but she had never known why. She had planned on questioning him when she got into the Wonderbolts, but all of Equestria knew how that turned out by then.
"Dash, I..."
"I said save the sappy stuff!" Rainbow snapped. "I can prove to Spitfire that I'm more than just a show flyer! I can prove myself! I can be a Wonderbolt like you!" Rainbow continued. Soarin' knew this process all too well. Grief. Stage one: denial.
"Rainbow, I know that this was your dream all your life, but you don't have anything left to prove! You gave your all at tryouts, and I should know! I watched them! It was the most graceful flight routine I've ever seen! I'm sure you'd make an excellent entertainer, but you just have to..." Soarin' said, being cut off early by Rainbow once more.
"You watched my tryouts? That's....weird...." Rainbow stated. She shook her head. "That aside, I know you wanna help, but let me handle this! I'll go back up there and demand that I get accepted tomorrow!"
Soarin' shook his own head, knowing that she'd be at stage two by then. Anger.
6640175 I know, poor RD. She was TOO much for her dream team!
6640329
Slow down pls
6640428 why? XD
6640430 at the rate it seems your going at you will make RB's grief like a joke.
6640443 Have you not gotten the hint that I'm not the best at pacing...
reading back over this, yea it does seem fast, but I'm still a growing writer. I have to just get into the feel of things. Its not gonna be perfect the first time around. Like you and grammar issues, I have pacing ones. You can seem to slow down a lot better than I can, but when my mind says "here's and idea" I just go. It just comes out and there it is. Also, I don't do planning. I just write as ideas come to me. It is my own style, and just don't judge me on bad pacing.
6640461 I have gotten the point which is why I told you to slow down
6640470 I'll, try..alright? It's not that easy to slow down a mind that running at 400 MPH, but I'll certainly try
6640481
Well I hope you can because this topic hits VERY hard
6640489 It'll be quite a while before I write a new chapter, thus giving me time to really really work on my poor pacing
6640596 Well good luck
Why must your chapters be so short?
6641870 idk. If ya want to see REALLY long chapters, check out my other story The Story of 3 Hearts cause I think the chapters are a lot better
6640428 don't be rude shadow. flutter is a very good writer and is trying her best and you don't need to dis her. let her write her stories and don't tell people how to write
6643787 bro she's helped me with stories and I've helped her just chill.
6643787 Pencil, shadow is a good friend of mine. He's only trying to help me out. I never thought I'd see the day that the people who read my things would start to do this...but thanks for following me and trying to stand up for me anyways. I know I'd do the same too if I felt I needed to :) Just keep it nice in the comments plz
6643797 don't egg it on Shade. I know your a bit stubborn sometimes, but just try to contain yourself...for me?
6646720 fine, but only for you.
6646766 yaaay!