Broken Hearts
The birds sang outside, awakening Rainbow. She tiredly opened her eyes. Upon seeing where she was, she bolted upright and gasped.
It was morning, and she was in Fluttershy's bed. Sunlight was streaming through the windows, and the sheets under Rainbow were still damp with tears and sweat. Her mane was very messy, and her eyes were sore from tiredness and crying.
From downstairs, Rainbow could faintly hear Fluttershy humming. Rainbow smiled; she sounded very happy.
Rainbow walked downstairs to find that Fluttershy was preparing blueberry crepes and hash browns. As she flew between her cupboards and stove, she had a blissful smile and was humming a sweet, romantic tune.
"Hey, Fluttershy," Rainbow said.
Fluttershy turned to Rainbow. "Oh! Hello, Dashie!" she said.
Fluttershy took some salt, shook a little into a bowl full of batter, and began mixing it. "I'm making us breakfast," she said.
Rainbow blushed. Neither she nor Fluttershy had ever made breakfast for each other; after all, that was something only couples did. "Yeah, um... thanks, Flutters," Rainbow said.
Fluttershy smiled affectionately at her, and Rainbow embarrassedly cleared her throat. "I'm, uh... can I use your shower?"
"Of course," Fluttershy replied.
"Thanks," Rainbow said, and she trotted to the bathroom to clean herself off.
As Rainbow stood below the seaming streams of water, she rinsed out her mildly-stinging eyes and washed out all of her sweat. After she had shampooed her mane, she relaxed and smiled at the memory of last night. "That," Rainbow muttered, "is now officially the best night of my life."
Rainbow couldn't help but wonder, however, what she was going to do next. Were she and Fluttershy a couple now? What would they do about it? When and how were they going to tell the others? How would they deal with the inevitable emotional breakdowns of Pinkie and Scootaloo?
Rainbow sighed wearily, turned the shower off, picked up a towel, and dried herself off.
When Rainbow returned, Fluttershy had set the table and was waiting for her. Rainbow smiled thankfully and gave Fluttershy a quick peck on the lips; she found herself blushing intensely over it, as she'd never done so before. Fluttershy giggled and also blushed a little.
"So," Rainbow said, "Are we, like... girlfriends now?"
"If you want to be," Fluttershy replied simply.
Rainbow grinned. "Yeah, I think I want to be."
As they served themselves their breakfast, Rainbow asked, "So, what do we do now?"
Fluttershy shrugged. "I suppose we do whatever feels right. After all, that's what we should have done in the first place."
Rainbow laughed. "Yeah, you're right. We totally should've."
After a few moments of silence, Fluttershy said, "Um, Dashie, can I... um, ask you something?"
"Sure you can," Rainbow replied.
"Well, um, it's just that... well... it's probably a bit... unpleasant, and... I don't want to spoil the mood..."
Rainbow considered it for a moment, then shrugged dismissively. "Meh. Go ahead. It can't be that bad."
"Oh, alright..." Fluttershy said.
After Fluttershy stared at her crepes for a moment, she said, "Why were you crying last night, Rainbow?"
Rainbow sighed. "Alright. This might take a while..."
Rainbow retold everything that had happened to her over the past two days, and at the end Fluttershy was staring at her with great distress. "S-Scootaloo tried to sleep with you?"
Rainbow nodded somberly. "Yeah."
Fluttershy covered her mouth. "Oh my goodness... Is she alright? Did something happen to her?"
Rainbow shrugged. "I don't know yet."
"And, is Pinkie alright? After what Gilda did..."
"I think she'll be okay. But speaking of Pinkie and Scootaloo..."
Rainbow frowned anxiously at Fluttershy. "When are we going to tell everypony? And what are we going to do about Pinkie and Scoots?"
Fluttershy swallowed. "Well, I... I think we should tell everypony soon, but... I just want to spend more time with you today."
Rainbow smiled. "Yeah. Alright, then- let's tell everypony tomorrow, and just relax and take it easy today."
Fluttershy smiled back and nodded in agreement. "Yes, let's."
Rainbow briefly flew out to check in a day of vacation time at the weather patrol, and then she returned to Fluttershy, and the two of them enjoyed a quiet, uneventful afternoon together. They read, ate, changed Fluttershy's bedding, and napped together on the bed. Rainbow had forgotten how much she loved just letting the hours slip away with Fluttershy.
The next day, they went to each of their friends' doors to announce their relationship to them. They began with Twilight; when they knocked at her door, she opened it, took a look at them, and smiled. "You two are together now?" she said.
Rainbow threw her foreleg around Fluttershy. "Obviously."
Twilight gave a hug to each of them, and Fluttershy said, "Thank you, Twilight," as she received hers.
As Twilight stood back from them, she said, "I'm glad you two seem to be happy. You've been through a lot."
"Yeah," Rainbow agreed.
Spike scampered to Twilight's side, and upon seeing Rainbow's foreleg draped around Fluttershy's shoulders he said, "Hey! Are you two Special Someponies now?"
"Guess so," Rainbow replied simply.
Spike grinned. "That's great! You guys make a great couple!"
Twilight nodded. "I think we should write to Celestia about this. Spike, I hope you're ready to write a looooong letter."
Spike folded his arms and grumbled, "Aw, come on... I was just about to go bowling..."
Twilight giggled and said to Rainbow and Fluttershy, "I'll see you two later."
Rainbow and Fluttershy bid Twilight farewell, then they went to see Rarity. She, too, responded by hugging both of them, expressing great happiness for them, and giving deep congratulations to them. When they told Applejack, she reacted exactly how they expected her to: she was disapproving, but tolerant.
When they went to tell Scootaloo, Rainbow said to Fluttershy, "Are you sure you want to be here? I mean, Scootaloo might get pissed at you..."
Fluttershy nodded. "Yes. I must face her sooner or later, and I want to help her as much as I can if she'll let me."
Rainbow nodded apprehensively.
When they arrived at Scootaloo's tent, Rainbow gently called, "Hey, Scootaloo?"
They heard some rustling from inside the tent, then the flap unzipped and Scootaloo poked her head out. Her eyes were puffy and bloodshot, and she seemed depressed. "Hey, Rainbow," she said.
"Hey, Scoots. You alright?" Rainbow said.
"I'll get better," Scootaloo replied. She looked at Fluttershy. "So, are you Rainbow's girlfriend now?" she asked.
Fluttershy nodded. "Yes."
Scootaloo sighed. Rainbow asked, "Are you upset?"
"Not that you have a girlfriend," Scootaloo said. "Just that I don't have you yet."
Fluttershy's eyes widened. "'Yet'?"
Scootaloo smirked at her. "Yeah. I might not have Rainbow now, but mark my words: give me a few years, and she'll be mine!"
"Oh yeah?" Rainbow said. "What if I'm still with Fluttershy by then?"
"Then she'll be mine, too," Scootaloo replied.
Fluttershy blushed and Scootaloo laughed. "See you later, Dash," she said, and she went back into her tent.
As Rainbow and Fluttershy walked away, Rainbow chuckled and said, "We'll see, Scoots. We'll see..."
They then went to Sugar Cube Corner to see Pinkie. When they entered and the Cakes greeted them, Fluttershy said, "We need to see Pinkie."
Mrs. Cake nodded and said, "Just a second." She went upstairs to summon her employee, and after a few moments Pinkie came bounding down the stairs. "Hi, Dashie! Hi, Fluttershy!" She cried cheerfully.
"Hey, Pinkie," Rainbow replied. She said anxiously, "Um, Pinkie, we have something to tell you."
Pinkie nodded. "Okay! What is it, Dashie?"
Rainbow glanced at Fluttershy. "Well, Pinkie, Flutters and I... well, we're, um, together now."
Pinkie's smile disappeared. "You are?" she asked quietly.
Rainbow and Fluttershy nodded.
"Oh," Pinkie said.
Tears began welling in Pinkie's eyes. "I need to be alone," she said, and she sullenly plodded back upstairs.
Rainbow and Fluttershy gazed concernedly after Pinkie for a moment, then turned and left together.
Pinkie's friends didn't see her for several days. During that time, Twilight took Scootaloo to a child psychiatrist and then personally interviewed her. Both drew the same conclusion: Scootaloo hadn't been abused, but a lack of oversight or parenting had lead to her disturbingly early sexual precociousness.
When they hadn't seen Pinkie in four days, Rainbow grew worried and went to Sugar Cube Corner to see her. When she went to Pinkie's room, she found the pink Earth pony curled up under her blankets with several empty margarita bottles scattered around the floor. When Rainbow went to the bed and prodded Pinkie Pie, she poked her head out and turned to Rainbow. Her mane was straight and horrendously tangled, she smelled awful, and she was obviously deeply depressed.
"Are you okay, Pinkie?" Rainbow asked.
Pinkie smiled. "Of course I am. I'm doing great."
Rainbow glanced at the empty liquor bottles. "Uh, Pinkie, you've been drinking."
"Of course I've been!" Pinkie replied. "But I've only been drinking a little! You always have some cider when you're upset, Dashie!"
"Not this much," Rainbow replied. "And we haven't seen you in four days."
"Exactly! I'm doing really well! I'll be back out in about three more days!"
Rainbow stared astonishedly at Pinkie. "You know exactly when you'll stop being depressed?"
"Of course I do! Everypony does!" Pinkie replied exasperatedly.
After blinking a few times, Rainbow asked, "So how long would you hole up in here if you were doing badly?"
Pinkie looked up, thinking about it. "I'm not sure. I've never done badly before. But I imagine that I'd have to be in here for two or three months."
"...What would make it so that you were doing badly?" Rainbow asked.
"All of my friends or family dying in a train crash," Pinkie replied.
Rainbow shrugged. "Seems fair. So, you're really gonna be alright, Pinkie?"
"Not until three days, but yes. I'll be completely okay then."
"Are you angry at me or Fluttershy at all?"
Pinkie giggled. "Of course not! I'm happy for both of you, and Fluttershy's very lucky!" She frowned. "I only wish that it could've been me..."
Rainbow smiled sadly. "Yeah."
Rainbow hugged Pinkie, and then Pinkie cheerfully declared, "Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to get back to my moping. Bye, Dashie!"
She flashed Rainbow a smile, then reassumed her morose frown and returned to her fetal position beneath her blankets.
As Pinkie promised, after three days she was up and about again, as excitable and chipper as ever. Rainbow could tell that Pinkie was still in love with her, but they were able to go back to just being friends again, and Rainbow was deeply grateful for that. She wouldn't have wished for it any differently.
After talking with Fluttershy and Twilight about it for a while, Rainbow asked Scootaloo if she'd like to live in her house with her. Scootaloo eagerly accepted, and was able to move into one of Rainbow's empty rooms. After she did, Rainbow gave her her old collection of porn magazines, to which Scootaloo smirked and said, "Fluttershy making you get rid of 'em?"
"No," Rainbow replied. "I just don't need 'em anymore."
"Just give me a few years, and you're gonna be mine."
"Are you sure? You're really awesome, Scoot. What if you have tons of fillies falling at your feet before then?"
"None of 'em are half as amazing as you."
"You never know. Have you ever thought of trying with Apple Bloom? She's really cute; maybe you should ask her out sometime."
Scootaloo smirked. "Yeah. Maybe I will. But I promise: I'm still going to sweep you off your feet when I'm a teenager."
Rainbow smirked back. "We'll see."
Rainbow and Fluttershy's relationship wasn't always easy; they still lived in their own homes, and they still only had a few things in common. They sometimes wondered to each other if their relationship would last. Nonetheless, every time they asked they came to the same conclusion: even if it ultimately didn't work out, they would still always be best friends. After all, both of them were still able to be best friends with Pinkie. They speculated that if they broke up each of them might try with Pinkie or Twilight instead, but they would never regret that they tried with each other; at the moment, they were happy, and they were going to savor every moment of it that they had.
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The flagship is going to be awesome. I know from experience. Be excited. Are we going to work on it today Morgan?
OMG
I NEVER EXPECTED THIS ENDING! HOLY SHIT GREAT JOB MAN! BRAVO!!!!!!!!!!!! THIS IS THE BEST STORY EVER
sorry if that was too much, anyways I loved this story.
7045215 Thanks.
HOW AND WHY IS THIS NOT FEATURED!??!?!??!?! THIS NEEDS TO BE FEATURED!!!!!!!!!!!
7045486 I'm glad you think so highly of it.
Well, it is my first fic... 
I'm still kinda sad that Gilda's appearance was both short and heartbreaking. Still, since you're making your stories work into the show's canon, I guess whatever story is after 'The Lost Treasure of Griffonstone' will feature her.
That said, nice to hear that Rainbow and Fluttershy will be together throughout your series.
7045673 Oh, yes. FlutterDash is my favorite pairing; expect to see a TON of FlutterDash in my MLP:FiM fan fiction.
I was actually pretty disappointed in this last chapter. The reason is that we get a chapter where Gilda, Fluttershy, and Scootaloo all get dealt with one way or the other personally. Then in this chapter Pinkie just gets a summary. Frankly of all the characters to just a get a summary break up Pinkie would probably be the worst choice. The reason being is that in this story you spent a good bit showing how Pinkie cares and tries so hard to be a good match for Dash and that Dash is tempted but ultimately decides to go with Fluttershy. Considering all that time and potential drama it seems so lack luster to just leave her story arc finished by a summary. I think you missed out on a lot of good drama because Pinkie has good reason to be very sad and it would be interesting to see how Dash handles the situation, how Pinkie responds, we know Dash was tempted to have sex with Pinkie was Pinkie just as interested, did Pinkie ever stand a chance and how does she feel about the potential answer. These and more would make for a great chapter worth writing and reading.
To me considering the detail everybody else received that it feels like you just wanted to end the story quickly and just gave the plot summary as the last chapter to quickly tie up the loose ends.
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Yeah, I agree with you 100%. You're right; I'm a very impatient person. One of my biggest problems as a writer is that whenever I come close to the end, I just want to get it done. I'm unsatisfied with it myself; that's why I haven't made its completion "official" yet, and I plan on continuing to refine it, especially expanding upon the last two chapters and giving Pinkie her proper screen time.
I'm sorry I disappointed you. Believe me, I'm just as disappointed with myself. The ending really does not satisfy me at all yet...
*headdesk* *headdesk*
7046521 If you like, I can tell you when the fic's "officially" completed so that you'll be able to read Pinkie's arc be properly wrapped up.
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Sure. I just want to say overall I liked the writing in the story. While I am a big PinkieDash fan I can still like a story that goes a different way. I just was disappointed in not seeing it happen especially since I liked how you wrote Pinkie and how she loves Dash.
7046608 You're in luck, then; remember, Rainbow and Fluttershy's relationship is rather unstable. I'm going to explore different "branching" scenarios, some of which they break up in. I'm almost definitely going to have a pure PinkieDash story as one of those scenarios. I also would really like to eventually do an alternate fic to Break Your Heart where Rainbow does something... *ahem,* different at the end of Gentle Snows.
Amazing ending cant wait to see your future stories
7047446 Wonderful to hear.
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Well I am glad I kept this in folder. I look forward to seeing these chapters. They were a big favorite for me personally.
Interesting story. Since you mentioned in the notes that this will serve as the base for other stories, would that pertain to au fics as well. Where Dashie choose one of the others instead of Fluttershy?
7069895 Writing good comments is every bit as difficult as writing good stories. I must express my flattery at receiving such a lengthly, bluntly critical yet well-written comment.
I'm glad you liked all of my character portrayals. I'm not at all surprised Scootaloo was your favorite; she was the most fascinating character to me as well. I must confess to feeling a little proud of myself, as your reaction was entirely the one I intended for her to cause: a paradoxical, simultaneous rooting for and against her. I was also hoping that the would be considered "a little creepy."
I agree that I didn't have Fluttershy enough; unfortunately, I don't think I'll ever be able to fix that. After all, her doing so would have ended the story rather quickly, and so you wouldn't have gotten to see all of the others' interactions with Dash. That's why I attempted to compensate by putting a ton of work and passion into Storm Clouds. I've always found shipping fics focusing on the actual relationship between Flutters and Rainbow to always be far more interesting than the ones about how they got together. That's largely what motivated me to write this one first and "spice it up" by making it more about Rainbow's other admirers than Fluttershy herself. I promise, my future fics will show their relationship in much greater depth now that I've got them together.
7075972 Yes, it absolutely will. I suggest you follow me if you want to see them. For instance, I plan on writing a fic eventually in which Rainbow makes a different decision at the end of Gentle Snows.
Well I think it is a definite improvement from its first draft. I can see you are going with the idea that Pinkie is very forgiving (really forgiving) which I can see to a great degree though I fell for her because it is clear that she still has feelings for Dash and she put a LOT of effort into courting her.
I see you also left the future uncertain which is an interesting take as well.
I will look forward to the alternative chapters and future stories for sure.
7354418 Oh, thanks!
7354510 "Buck" can mean "kick" or "fuck," and its vulgarity depends on the context it's being used in. It's sort of like how "dick" can mean "penis" or be a nickname for "Richard," or how "fag" can mean "cigarette" or be a slur for gay guys.
This is best story of all time!
7561951 7561997 7562796 Alright, I'm gonna dress your comments chronologically.
Thanks! I'm glad you enjoy my writing so much.
I only wonder why this story has so many dislikes... 
I think that bisexual people are heinously underrepresented in fiction; especially bisexual males. The idea that you can like guys AND girls seems to really freak people out for some stupid reason. I'm working to change that, though; in fact, the protagonist of my magnum opus is a bisexual boy.
I am really, really happy that you left that comment at the end of Storm Clouds, because it happens to be my favorite chapter. It allows me to believe that I'm a skilled writer, if readers enjoy it as much as I do.
The best story of all time? Really?
Wow, if you really think that, I am flattered beyond all imagining. 
Especially considering that my ultimate goal is to write the greatest novel of all time. Actually, that particular novel, which is titled Rainbow (no relation to Rainbow Dash), is the novel I was talking about with a bisexual male protagonist. 
So if this, in fact, is the best story of all time, I have but one goal: to surpass it with Rainbow. 