Am I the only one who was kinda hoping that Ryan would take advantage of Luna's offer? If not now later?

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I was tempted to write it ... but Ryan's not of that type ... yet. Perhaps. I don't know

Gilda and Trixie are more family to him at this point, or i'm assuming that's the vibe. Luna I could see him actually falling for in the future and since she's a character tag I assume she's going to be a very important person in this period of his life.

My only question to him would be if he misses them. Because he has to be close to some of them and it couldn't have been easy for him to just up and come back to what is essentially hell. Me personally, I would have stayed if not simply for the fact of knowing I didn't have to worry about losing my life each and every second of my waking and sleeping moments.

To be honest. I both respect, and pity the man or woman who would willingly give up what could be a comfortable remainder of life to return to that which has caused them so much pain and suffering. I'm almost certain now that it wasn't an easy choice. I can only hope that at some point in his life he'll meet them again, or be rewarded in some way, because everyone deserves a kind of happiness.

Then again, he may be happiest amongst the devil so to speak.

Either way fantastic story telling. I admit a couple of times I did gloss over a section or two because I just... didn't care. Not to be rude to you but a couple of things Ryan talked about weren't interesting enough for me to read through completely so I just kinna skimmed over it to get an idea and continued on until it got relevant again.

6707564 Response will be broken down per paragraph!

1)She plays a reoccurring role within his dreams, so she is indeed important in a contexty type of way. As for falling for her, all is possible!

2)Without adding spoilers, here is a response from Ryan: Honestly sometimes I do miss them, as they were a prominent part of my life for a bit, and they were unique. Yet at the same time, I've known a lot of people like that and they have come and gone through my life and I hardly miss them. It's all about how you think about them afterwards. If you remind yourself that they have a solid life now, then it's tough to actually miss them.

3)When pain, suffering, and hardship are the main components in your life, it becomes really tough for one to imagine anything else. Ryan as a real person and character is sappy in that he holds onto things of less importance only because they are sentimental. That's how he sees his home world. If he were to leave then he would be almost certainly giving up an aspect of his old life, a large part of him. It's not something he can do.

Skipping the one line.

4)I can understand the glossing. I do that as a reader as well :P Mind telling me what parts were uninteresting? Gives me an idea of what to keep shorter in the future.

6707624 He has a stronger will than I. I most certainly would have said "nope" to going back. But that's me and your making a very believable and entertaining character.

As for what I glossed over. These chapters are so long it's easy to forget sometimes lol. Now lemme see.
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Ah right so chapter 2, when he's just kind of wondering through the desert before he meets Gilda.

He starts describing what he was thinking, music etcetera. I'll be honest I pretty much glossed over that whole thing as I didn't really care to much about his thoughts during that time. If it had been more condensed and a few paragraphs I wouldn't have cared, but it did feel like it really dragged on.

Don't get me wrong it gives insight as to how his mind works but perhaps a little less on every single thought he had would be a good thing. So that's one example of an area I skipped over more or less because I couldn't care less, no offense of course. If I had actually been listening to him I probably would have zoned out for a while lol.

Like I said, fantastic story telling and I enjoy the character quite a bit. Just less of his internal thoughts sometimes may be more leastsome readers get overly bored. It's one of the reasons I stopped reading one of the more well known stories on this site, Diaries of a Madman. It's getting stupidly long, and honestly I hate the main character and how he acts, a huge prick.

Also I'm stealing some.of your Luna pics... cause Luna is best pony.

6707279 just saying I really do hope that Ryan and Luna become a couple

Question what powers his phone

My fav band is DragonForce song the game it really gets the feels out of me

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Answered by Ryan: You know I thought I answered that ... Alright, listen closely. There is a battery in it. That's how it's powered. Solid? ... Wait, misheard that. My hand held generator with it's attached rectifier allows me to charge it as need be. As for how the battery is still functional ... No idea.

Yowzer, another long chapter.

Hopefully Ryan comes up with an alternate way for Luna to pay him back for losing the drinking contest. Maybe a cask of whiskey with a 'be light as a feather' spell for him to stuff in Trixie's wagon when they go travelling again. Discord meanwhile remains our lovable troll who knows more than he's saying and it's obvious to Ryan that he knows more than he's saying.

I still see that Iron Will is on the list of character tags, so I wonder when we'll see him pop up.

6712813 For the Iron Will part ... give it another ... oh 3 chapters before he is mentioned, 4-5 before he actually appears and takes his place.

As for the Luna part, Ryan isn't the type to hold debts like that. He might ask for a favour later but I think it'll be paid in full shortly :P

Discord has a great knowledge of stuff but he ain't the Big Bad Evil Guy here, he's just our fourth wall breaking character that knows too much.

Finally, if you think this one is long, just wait for chapter 7! I have to break it up to ensure that the pacing was decent enough.

This chapter was without a doubt amazing in both content and its length.
I look forward for more to come. :)

For some reason the ending to this part of the story earned a daaaaw outta me... Oh yeah cause it's bloody ADORABLE (too me at least)

semi-operational. Australia and New Zealand.

Wooo! 'Stralia for the win!

I love your story

Hah, the Land Down Under survives! And Aoteroa too.