Love's always in season and love is love. The world is changing and everyone has a view.
Fluttershy has been worried about her sexuality for a long time. Upon deciding to come out to all her friends, she begins to feel a little better.
However, she has a new problem.
This problem cannot so easily be solved, however, as it is one of quite the unusual nature.
A co-write with my good friend, GravelordNito.
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So did angle bunny out her? Or when she turned gay she got sorta killy?
6591888 u will find out soon enough
Good story so far.
That's either one small motherfucker, or a huge goddamned sink.
6599298 meant to be a deer hide. So its folded up and draped down the side
6594838 thanks
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The only thing I can find objectively wrong with this fic are the grammatical errors that are mostly located in the dialog, but even that isn't to bad, nor does it occur that often. So I have one question, why is the like/dislike bar the way it is right now? There should be way more likes than dislikes.
P.S. I won't be leaving a like because I only do that with fics that are complete. Personal policy.
6606188 that's the question i've been trying to answer, thanks for the feedback.
6606420
No problem.
I just did a search, because I didn't know 'mystery' was a tag on this site before this story, and found out that this story is the only one right now that is both tagged 'mystery' and has Sunset Shimmer as a character tag. What is up with that?
6606457 Cause new tags have appeared so people haven't gotten the chance to change any stories yet
6606484
Oh, OK. Thanks.
0_0 that was fucking terrifying
6626338 I'm guessing that you liked it then
Yes
6626338 Haha, I try.
Don don dah!
6606420
OK, I may have figure out why the like/dislike bar is in the state it's in. It's probably the dialog. It's not bad, it just doesn't feel natural. It's not enough to break the story, but I can see some people being overly critical because of it. I can tell you've improved compared to some of your earlier works, but yeah, dialog is your weakness here.
This is in no way meant to be insulting, it is meant to be helpful critequing. If it comes off as insulting, let me know and I will apologize and delete this comment.
Looking forward to more.
6672146 I've tried to fix the dialogue as best I can without it no longer being her work (most dialogue chapters are hers, I'm trying to refine my action/horror descriptive writing skills). We designate chapters as we co-write (except chapter 1), but I help her along with her own chapters. She is definitely improving as we work, I can see it, and it's pleasant to witness.
Love from Lord Nito
8 out of 8 mate
Well... that happened.
A few grammatical errors in the narrative every couple of chapters.
I continue to want to know what happens next.
6733752 I don't even know what's going on any more. I just sort of let her take the reins, and I'm just adding dark twists here and there, but hey, it's a thing.
6736449
May want to add a gore tag for that last chapter though.
6736488 The murder was her attempt at a section. It shouldn't be too hard for you to recognise the difference between her parts and the parts I completely re-wrote (hint, I used words such as pellucid).
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There are many things I am not good at. Discerning between two or more people's writing styles when they're co-writing a story is one of them. I may be able to notice subtle changes here and there, but oftentimes it goes unnoticed until I look back on it.
Sorry, the face made me nervous. Hey! This is my first nervously written comment.
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6739205 Applejack's pretty unnerving, right?
If you don't notice, I suppose that means my editing is pretty good, so it's actually a good thing that you can't tell. It also means that our story blends together better as a whole, I guess.
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Correct on all accounts!