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Two years had passed since Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy had started dating. Today was the day they agreed to start a family. This day was going to start a brand new beginning to their relationship. And they couldn't be happier when their foal was born.

But a mishap starts when Fluttershy reveals something. Something so innocent that it could break their family before it even started, and possibly, their relationship.

How could she hope to break such innocence?

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I love it! :) Amazing writing, as well as the Sweetie Belle part. That was hilarious xD

So no animal who visits, lives at, or temporary resided at the cottage has ever...

...um...

...never, ever, even once, approached a member of the same species with intent to...

...I mean, if you've ever lived with a male rabbit, they'll go after a bowling ball if they can't find a doe...

...not a single time in local history...

:pinkiecrazy:

...I'm gonna go lie down.

6580449 This.

Throwing my own two cents into this... The whole situation could've been avoided entirely of Rainbow Dash just explained it herself, but, oh well, at least a changeling is now living a happy life...

...I guess?

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The whole situation could've been avoided entirely of Rainbow Dash just explained it herself

Too bad it was such a sensitive topic. She couldn't find it in her to tell Fluttershy herself, just like everypony else. They had never seen a mind so innocent at such an age.

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"...not a single time in local history..." ->

->'...has she seen the magical event take place.'
Sweet dreams.

6580449 i dont think flutters was paying all that much attention, I guess…

In any case, awesome story.

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Your continuity, so...

Under one of the other hooves, I'm pretty sure you just explained why Angel's so angry all the time.

6580648 It's not really my head-cannon. It was really just a, 'what if and what would happen' idea.

6580627 Eh, if it were me, I'd either give her a book on the matter so she could figure it out in her own time, or flat-out explain it to her.

Regardless, it was a pretty good story. I just kinda have a problem with the whole changeling being their new foal. Mostly cause that would cause issues sooner or later. (eg: She accidentally screws up her form in front of them, or steps up and reveals she's a changeling when she's older, etc)

Those kinds of issues would make an interesting sequel, now that I think about it...

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Eh, if it were me, I'd either give her a book on the matter so she could figure it out in her own time, or flat-out explain it to her.

Rainbow Dash is no book worm if it isn't related to Daring Do. And it's not as easy for everyone to just flat out explain it.

Regardless, it was a pretty good story. I just kinda have a problem with the whole changeling being their new foal. Mostly cause that would cause issues sooner or later. (eg: She accidentally screws up her form in front of them, or steps up and reveals she's a changeling when she's older, etc)
Those kinds of issues would make an interesting sequel, now that I think about it...

A family doesn't end all conflicts at its beginning. In fact, a families conflict NEVER ends! They just find new ones.

Well, that wasn't the way I thought this would end. I can kind of understand why Dash couldn't tell her, but it would have been the better thing to do. Their friends are kind of jerks in this story, leaving Dash hanging like that. I do get it though, they're thinking that, as her marefriend, Rainbow should be the one to tell fluttershy rather than hoffing it off to them. In the end though, I think this is a terrible ending for Fluttershy. I mean, everyone around her is willing for her to live her entire life believing a falsehood. More than that, they are okay with Fluttershy never knowing the joys of making love. It's pretty awful when you think about it.

I distinctly remember a 'human interest' story that was in the news fifteen or twenty years ago. It was about a forty-something couple in China, married since they were teenagers, who went to a doctor for help because they couldn't figure out why they were still childless. After all, they kissed each other every day!

6582156 To them, Fluttershy's mind is still as innocent as a fillies, and possibly more innocent. Just like to their little sisters and other fillies, they believe it is better for Fluttershy to believe this falsehood until she is old enough to understand for herself. Just because she doesn't understand now, doesn't mean she'll understand eventually.

But this story isn't about their future conflict. This story is about their current conflict. Even though this conflict ended the way it did, it doesn't mean more will follow. And it doesn't even have to be related to their love or their foal.

6582448 I've... never heard about that...

the part of the video that is my comment is 3:20 to 3:53

Dat plot twist....duuude:pinkiecrazy::rainbowderp:

I half expected Fluttershy to reveal somewhere near the end that she knew exactly where foals come from, and was just messing with everypony else. Either that or someone would finally tell her and she'd be like, "Oh, so it's just like with animals." (Which, incidentally, was what my reaction was when my father gave me The Talk.)

Frankly, the idea that Fluttershy could spend so much time taking care of (intact) animals and not have any idea where baby animals come from is extremely hard to believe. Of course, I realize that part of the point is the absurdity of the idea, but personally I'm generally unable to enjoy stories that are based on concepts that makes no sense.

6688802 Like I said in another comment, this was more of a 'What if and what would happen' scenario.

This story idea came from how so many other stories would put Rainbow Dash in a scenario that seems extremely unlikely, yet people would believe them without a second thought. The main reason for that is of course, it's never been confirmed in canon, and even then, they're able to get away with it. After seeing enough of those, I wondered, 'Would people ever believe something as absurd as Fluttershy not knowing where babies come from?' When I thought that, a lot of ideas popped up into my head, and this story is its end results.

That's why this story is as absurd as it is. You don't have to believe it at all.

7045594 I guess! But yeah, Rainbow should have just set Fluttershy down, and had a talk about the birds and the bees in PRIVATE and not have announced it to half of Equestria!

I enjoyed reading this, I liked the ending!

"You see, as the Princess of Love, I can help ponies understand their difference and give them advice on how to maintain a healthy relationship. But anything from intimacy and beyond is between the two parties. I'm afraid I can't get involved in that. And some things are better left for them to learn on their own." I want that Cadance everywhere, she sounds like she would actually let others start their relationship themself, without to manipulate them.

All Shining Armor could do was stare his eyes off at the front entrance of the throne room, one pupil bigger than the other as it twitched.

okay that one I really don't understand.

The changelings were all falling down from Rainbow's attacks

and suddenly Rainbow woke up from her dream and loosing her super powers. I just think sometimes there should actually be a scene where Rainbow isn't able to stop a whole army, not even by being Rainbow Dash. (I mean often enough it looks like being Rainbow Dash is reson enough for the most, but I love it a little bit more realistic. However nothing against this story, I always have to state my opinion if I read something a certain amount of time in a random story.)

"YOU WOULD DO THAT TO HER?! AAAAHHH!!!"

Chrysalis shot through the roof with her own body, not even caring about the damages being done to her hive. All of the changelings scattered, either going through that same hole, creating a new one, or just using the actual exit. It didn't matter to them. The chaos caused multiple debris to fall like an earthquake. Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy covered each other as the whole hive collapsed.

:rainbowhuh:

But how could she? Fluttershy's mind was so pure and innocent. How could she give the talk of something like this and break that innocence? She still couldn't figure out how this was possible in the first place. She just had to ask something.

Now I understad, but that would need to mean that Fluttershy would have to be Flutters**** after that.

Nice story, but I shouldn't have forced myself to read it right now. I just noticed if you don't have the time, and are to tired or just not in the mood, that can already be a reason why something isn't as good as it could be. (if you know what I mean).

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I want that Cadance everywhere, she sounds like she would actually let others start their relationship themself, without to manipulate them.

I don't read many fanfics or fan depictions of Cadance. Does she really manipulate their love like that?

All Shining Armor could do was stare his eyes off at the front entrance of the throne room, one pupil bigger than the other as it twitched.

okay that one I really don't understand.

I think I was trying to describe a face expression like this:
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and for some reason thought Shining Armor did that kind of face.

The changelings were all falling down from Rainbow's attacks

and suddenly Rainbow woke up from her dream and loosing her super powers. I just think sometimes there should actually be a scene where Rainbow isn't able to stop a whole army, not even by being Rainbow Dash. (I mean often enough it looks like being Rainbow Dash is reson enough for the most, but I love it a little bit more realistic.

I think by realistic, it's more on which side you want to perceive it from. I like to perceive Rainbow Dash in the best of her abilities, (where she, and the rest of the Mane Six, are able to hold back one of Changelings on their own while a Royal Guard army couldn't even protect their citizens) rather than the worst of her abilities for plot convenience. (where her flying skills supposedly is worse at keeping up with a ball than Fluttershy's is.) I'm on the side that shows the better side of her abilities and I hate it when stories take the other approach. That being said, it sounds like we're on opposite terms for this subject.

Now I understad, but that would need to mean that Fluttershy would have to be Flutters**** after that.

I don't follow...

Nice story, but I shouldn't have forced myself to read it right now. I just noticed if you don't have the time, and are to tired or just not in the mood, that can already be a reason why something isn't as good as it could be. (if you know what I mean).

Well, I hope you enjoyed it for what it was. And I hope you enjoy its sequel too if you plan on reading that. Just a warning, it's not finished yet. Happy Reading!

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I don't read many fanfics or fan depictions of Cadance. Does she really manipulate their love like that?

At least it always looks to me, like she would force the main char or others to make their move on the other Pony even if they aren't really comfortable with it, or if they don't even know if they want it.

I think I was trying to describe a face expression like this:

http://image.prntscr.com/image/5e7fd6c399cf4f62af5428e4ff5641ba.png

and for some reason thought Shining Armor did that kind of face.

I think I didn't understood what reason he had to be kind of shocked about it.

I'm on the side that shows the better side of her abilities and I hate it when stories take the other approach. That being said, it sounds like we're on opposite terms for this subject.

While the guards are maybe not able to act really well, I always think the way of......
Well I kind of agree with the saying "no matter how strong someone is, a huge number on enemys would get the better of them".

Cartoon or not, in a story I can't really understand if they can fight off a huge amount of enemys without combat training, (even if the guards are a good example why they could, but in some storys they are actually good.)
Maybe I just like the Changelings really much, or I can't see Rainbow as a Bruce Lee or something like that.

I don't follow...

If I remember it right I made that comment about Rainbow thinking to hard about destroying Fluttershys innocence, and I just thought she was overreacting. I thought that Fluttershy didn't had to be the worst and most frisky person ever, after she knows about the sex, or would do it once. However I'm not sure anymore what happened before that, so I can only guess what that was about.

Just a warning, it's not finished yet.

yep I enjoyed it, and as usually I hope it won't be finished for a long time.

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I think I didn't understood what reason he had to be kind of shocked about it.

The reason for that was the same reason all of the other Mane Six were shocked.

Cartoon or not, in a story I can't really understand if they can fight off a huge amount of enemys without combat training, (even if the guards are a good example why they could, but in some storys they are actually good.)

Well, Rainbow Dash IS taking training at the Wonderbolts Academy, which looks quite a lot like a Military Training Camp. (Especially since, when Spike turned into a full grown dragon, the Wonderbolts were sent to try and stop it.) If anypony of the Mane Six has actual combat training, it's Rainbow Dash.

Maybe I just like the Changelings really much, or I can't see Rainbow as a Bruce Lee or something like that.

The former, I can relate to with Rainbow Dash.

If I remember it right I made that comment about Rainbow thinking to hard about destroying Fluttershys innocence, and I just thought she was overreacting. I thought that Fluttershy didn't had to be the worst and most frisky person ever, after she knows about the sex, or would do it once. However I'm not sure anymore what happened before that, so I can only guess what that was about.

Oh, I think I understand now. Rainbow's line of thinking was, 'If Fluttershy didn't know it already, how could she tell her now?' To her, it's like she's literally trying to make this talk to a little filly that shouldn't be told about the subject yet. She knows Fluttershy should know, but with her mind thinking like that, she isn't able to.

yep I enjoyed it, and as usually I hope it won't be finished for a long time.

Wait... Are you hoping my sequel NEVER gets completed? Or do you just like it that much? Did you already read through all that was available already?

7632209 While I don't agree with everything you are saying, this is your world building there, so I just endure what I don't like, and enjoy the story for what it is.


I just already hope the story is getting a bit longer so I can enjoy some good chapters till my other favourite storys get updated.
To be honest I have to learn for two tests, have two or three different games right now, and I have bought a new book while I still have to finish another one just for the sake of it.

Then I try to do other stuff as well, and that is a little bit difficult at the moent, but it has nothing to do with the story.

7632387 Um... okay then.

Oh my gosh, that was super adorable!

Suspending my disbelief that Fluttershy, an animal caretaker somehow wouldn’t know where foals come from and …
“Just… try it again another time and be patient. Just be easy on Fluttershy, okay?” LOLOLOLOLOLOL The moment with Twilight was probably the loudest I laughed, but at large the whole thing was funny.

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Suspending my disbelief that Fluttershy, an animal caretaker somehow wouldn’t know where foals come from

My response when stories pit Rainbow Dash towards something I don't believe. (Such as one speculating that she doesn't know how to swim.) I eventually wondered if people would believe unbelievable scenarios like that with other characters. So I thought of something that another character would most likely know of.

I made a random comment asking, "Would people believe a Fluttershy not knowing where foals come from?" When I made that comment, so many ideas started popping into my head. That's how this story was born. (I don't remember how the sequel was born.)

And now you've learned where stories come from just like foals!

“Just… try it again another time and be patient. Just be easy on Fluttershy, okay?” LOLOLOLOLOLOL The moment with Twilight was probably the loudest I laughed,

Really? It was that funny?

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Also what did Rainbow want to do to Fluttershy? I mean how could it be so bad that Chrysalis would run away in terror.

I don't really want to give mature details, but...

I really want to know what that potion would have done. :rainbowlaugh:

relates to this. There was one small hint I made to it.

“You had a very easy job. Slip into that family’s tent and siphon their love! And you’re telling me nothing was there?!”

Basically, when their love goes too deep into private areas, it becomes toxic to the changelings.

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Hmmmm. So sex then? Rainbow didn't have like a weird fetish she wanted Fluttershy to do to her, it was just normal lesbian sex then.

It could go deeper than that, but like I said, I didn't want to make this mature, so I didn't go into detail of that.

Some people think it's stupid enough for 2 mares to have a child they could both call their own without adoption. And that's where this story was going, in Rainbow's mind until she found out how innocent Fluttershy really was.

My only problem with this story is how Rainbow acts like their relationship is over just because she couldn't explain sex to Fluttershy. I mean is she that desperate? I can understand why Fluttershy as upset.

Fluttershy wanted to start a family. Rainbow's upset that she can't work up the courage to make that happen. She feels trapped in a certain part of their relationship that can't go further, as if she was stuck in a 'friend zone' area, but a friend zone area that's already in a relationship. She really wants to start this family with Fluttershy, but isn't able to, and it's making Fluttershy really sad. (Essentially, it's letting her friends down, letting her lover down.)

Also I gotta give you props for not going with the usual ending. The usual ending the being either explaining what sex is, or just having sex anyways.

Well... there's still the sequel.

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All I said was there's still the sequel. So, unless you've read that already, you haven't reached the ending yet. If you read it, hope you enjoy!

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