• Member Since 27th Oct, 2015
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Technovore


Mess with the best, die like the rest. I've died hundreds of times.

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I thought today was going to be a boring day, but I was so wrong. I find the Hasbro version of Q from Star Trek in my room and he sends me to a humanized version of Equestria. Now I have to get used to living in this world and try to find my way home. Why did this happen to me?

This is a story that has humanized ponies. You've been warned.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 14 )

6573771 I know it needs some work so what do you think needs to be worked on?

6573794
Nothing I can think of. Keep at it.

Interesting fic :ajsmug:.

the only improvement where a few typos in ''I thought it was going to be a boring day, but boy was i wrong. I found discrod in my room and sends me to Equestria''

discrod for example

6573808 really? I thought that there would have been something. thanks.

6573942 thanks for telling me, and it's now fixed.

Interesting, that is how I would describe the story so far. I think the character interactions might be a little rushed, but this is just the beginning of the story and most of the conversation has been between Stan and "background" characters, or at least I'm guessing they are background characters. (Just my personal opinion, but I'm just one reader) You've had a few grammar errors, but they were minor like: capitalization and a few words that were misused. Over all I actually enjoyed reading this and I'll be glad to follow this into the future chapters :twilightsmile: So far I'm going to say it's a solid 7 or 8/10, mind you I'm not as big of a grammar nazi as some people but so far great job and just a bit a friendly advise, look for a proofreader or editor for future chapters and catch those errors early and I am willing to bet you will get some praise. :moustache:

6575434 I know this story doesn't really have an original plot and things might be rushed but that's how it is with a lot of stories made by new writers. I tried to prevent things from being rushed but it happened so I'm going to have to roll with it. I am currently looking for an editor to help me with my grammar errors, so if you know of any send them my way please. time turner is just a background character, but I plan for lyra to have a bigger roll. thanks for the help:twilightsmile:.

Alright, back for chapter two! Okay, so already said what I thought of over all story pacing in the pervious chapter; aside from that, I enjoyed the chapter. The idea of human music being converted into an equestrian version, wasn't something I had really ever though of. I think you are doing a well enough job as a new write and for not having a proofreader or editor. I've enjoyed what I've read so far, and continue to look forward to new chapters.

6624003 Thanks! I really appreciate it!

Write in description that this is with humanized ponies.

7930185 Crap! I guess I do need to do that. thank you.

This is like a laundry list of writing blunders. Is this a trollfic? It's too bad to be a serious attempt at a story.

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It is a supposed to be a serious story but I'm not a serious writer compared to other writers on this site. Also, I did try to make it a comedy but it is most likely not funny and became more stupid than funny. I am very bad at grammar, very bad at story telling and you're probably correct about the blunders. I don't have the guts to re-read the chapters I've written because I'm too scared to see if there are any mistakes. I know that I don't have good writing skills. thank you for telling me the truth and not comforting me with a lie. I don't mean this in a sarcastic way. this is legitimately how I feel. thank you for your view point.

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