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Gold4tune

Gold4tune #1 · Oct 29th, 2015 · · · Chapter Two ·

6580557

*angrily shakes fist at comma splices*

"I'll get you someday!"

Seriously though, thanks for the comment. Always enjoy hearing that I did a good job.

TheArquius

TheArquius #2 · Oct 29th, 2015 · · · Chapter Two ·

Is there a link to the cover art?

Gold4tune

Gold4tune #3 · Oct 29th, 2015 · · · Chapter Two ·

6580730 http://41(dot)media.tumblr(dot)com/f16cb20aac5261dc2859d8096ac4d5a0/tumblr_nq7k3suR5V1tdte8jo2_540.jpg

Just replace the (dot) with .

pahnazd

pahnazd #4 · Oct 30th, 2015 · · · Chapter Two ·

Besides a few grammar errors, a decent read!
And decent of the good kind, not the bad one

Heh, AJ will certainly be walking funny for more than a day from all that.
And Rarity will be Rarity. Though her last comment was quite interesting. Joyous times all around! And all over.

ClosetKnight

ClosetKnight #5 · Oct 31st, 2015 · · · Chapter One ·

rarity, no, don't stalk them!

Amm

Amm #6 · Oct 31st, 2015 · 2 · · Chapter Two ·

The sex was good, the rest of it was just mindless gary stuing. Skipping that made it a fair bit more enjoyable.

jc75

jc75 #7 · Nov 1st, 2015 · 2 · · Chapter Two ·

I have never written feedback before but i enjoyed this enough that i thought to give some x3

I didn't really mind the OC, all I could tell you to fix is some misspellings here and there and maybe use some more synonyms for stuff (repeated use of "cum" was most noticeable, and there's plenty of words for it ;)

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