I'd say, you did a great job with the rewrite, and oh look, you even made it over 2,000 words.
Good for you! You deserve a pat on the back for effort!

When are you going to write the next twilightxsombra fic?

Well written. That is all We have to say

It was greatly written

8918717 Thank you!

Hmm…

I think this is the first fic I've seen where Twilight's more angry and defiant than desperate or worried.

I want part 2 lololol