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Tumbleweed


A guy. A guy who writes stories. Stories about ponies. (And sometimes robots).

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Pinkie Pie and Rainbow Dash got to go to the Griffin Kingdom.

Rarity and Applejack got to go to Manehattan.

Stuck in Ponyville without any magical Friendship Quests to go on, Twilight can do little but try to unlock the secrets of the Cutie Map herself. Fluttershy tries to help.

It doesn't go well.

(Set in the same vague continuity as the rest of my fanfics- in particular, this takes place some time after I Am Trying to Break Your Heart)

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You know I was going to suggest that the table is keyed into the tree of harmony and that said tree works in the way a supercomputer would and when the icons on the table move to a place on the map there is a insufficient amount of the element represented by the cutie mark on the map thus the appropriate bearers are sent.:trixieshiftright:

But if you want an awkward romance then be my guest.:twilightsheepish:

You know? This was hilarious.

:twilightoops: “Rainbow Dash doesn't tell you much about her love life? I thought you talked about everything?”
:fluttershysad:“Um, actually, she tells me way too much, I just sort of cover my ears and try not to listen.”

This is the point where I started giggling. It didn't stop until I'd finished the story. Good job!

Facepalms per minute:3. This was a fun read from start to finish. Especially if you think of one manipulating the other.

Well, this looks like it's going to be fun. Looking forward to the misadventures of Fluttershy and Twilight the Adroit. :raritywink:

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...Fluttershy does seem rather unwilling to let this go. I wonder...

Holy crap. You took thoughts that were percolating in my own head, and transformed them into a hilariously awkward romantic comedy. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Twilight and Fluttershy play off each other excellently here.

And the fact it's incomplete leaves me eager to see the rest.

I chuckled. I chuckled a lot. :rainbowlaugh:

And then they get put together in an episode November 14. :yay: :facehoof:

On second thought, are you considering continuing this story? I'm looking forward to it, but you've been busy with other projects.

This was actually hilariously impressive. Sad to see a story of this caliber so underappreciated!! :twilightsmile:

I reviewed this story as part of Read It Later #64.

My review can be found here.

“So both, then. Wow, Twilight, you're into some freaky stuff.”

Hearing this in Fluttershy's voice in my head made my day.

Much as I want to like this...

Twilight's obsession with the map and her already massive need for therapy, combined with Fluttershy doing the whole, "Rambling on and not getting that what she's saying isn't helping/making things worse," just puts me off.

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