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Towkio


"I should stuff your face in cookie dough and make cute cookies!"

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Tired of their rivalry and hatred for one another in Canterlot High, Adagio and Sunset's mothers force them to have a sleepover.

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Comments ( 6 )

What if they made out the instant their moms come home?

You got the first like from me!:derpytongue2:

6558481 they could say that they truly bonded

Hmm...from a reader's standpoint, it's pretty good, but unfortunately, I'm a writer, and I can't overlook a few things.
1.) Fix up the grammar a bit. Not too many people know how to properly punctuate, it seems.
2.) Don't rush it. It's a good story, but it could do with a bit more volume, perhaps?
But, as a whole, I give it four stars out of five. Good job there.
:scootangel:

"Oh brother..."

Me:
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Hey! That's MAH LINE !!

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