My first story up here on FIMFiction. I came up with the idea during my school promotion.
When a young 14-year-old is experiencing a promotion ceremony, he is stunned to see Princess Celestia calling for him from the staging. She's asking him to return and help the Elements of Harmony fight off an unknown threat of Equestria. The boy agrees and soon discovers that things are much different and he has no memory of his last adventure here. But things aren't easy, and sometimes even the best heroes can fall...
Chapters (2)
Well after a quick read through it's apparent you can spell (which is more than I can say for a lot of people on this site) however you may get some heat about a few things. One is the story itself. There are quite a bit of these types of stories floating around the site. Two, you could condense chapters one and two into a single chapter. And lastly is pacing, I'd try to work on that. Anyway, hope this does well. Kudos.
Has some potential. Just lengthen up the chapters up a bit (2000-4000 words are usually good for chapters), and make sure the characters are developed and you should be okay.
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688218 Eeyup. lol Any advice? :D
688218 Eeyup. lol Any advice? :D>>687027 Aye. Thank you!