Hey! That picture looks awfully familiar...

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lol

Uh-huh? Oh, yeah, it was supposed to be a story 2.5, forgot
Glad it's out
See you tomorrow, after I'm done with it

Woohoo! It's out! Bow chica wut WUT!

You know, I dont like Rarity. To be honest, she's one of my least favorite of the main characters, and she certainly my least favorite amongst mane six... and today I'm on her side, name of the fic give me a hope that Ataxia will really learn well

And, here goes nothing

would would

the the

albit

albeit.

nopony else nopony else

His the last words were

I do that believe there is no need in "the".

Her smiled increased

smile.

pointing at the little red but that

button.

was reworded as

"rewarded", in this case.

herself off watched the twins

I think it should be "watching"

Twins, at least as far Ataxia knew anyway.

"as far as"?

The smaller one, the with the

No need in first "the".

There were two ponies in the stall, but didn’t surprise her though.

I'm not sure if there is anything wrong

he was truly enjoying

she.

being e new

a.

continuted to llick

Was looking for one mistake, found two

as mile as the saw

a smile; as she.

somethings

some things.

to green and blue i, before

to green and blue, before

stories

"storeys" or "floors" instead of stories, i would say

Look out for double gap if you wish, there's about five of them in the text.

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Ataxia will really learn

I think you answered your own question here. It is Ataxia and you already know how she turns out. lol

I thought Pinkie was your least fav of the mane 6? Or at least that's what your page says.

>Twidashforever uh-huh, yeah... when i make that test i make it kinda lame, wasn't even able to remember about 1/3 of ponies, so...
Gotta change it, thought, if it missleads people

"Ataxia downed half the bear"
Aren’t ponies vegetarian? Since when do they eat bears?

6985483 Good find, corrected, thanks!

Explicit sex has entered the series

These stories didn't get the attention that they should have and now you're gone. It's unfortunate, but nothing lasts

Educated guess that may be a spoiler if I am correct:
Also thought Ataxia was an avatar for Chaos from the first mention. Your story beats in TiM haven't been a surprise for me at any point so far but that isn't necessarily bad. Sometimes getting exactly what you expect can be fulfilling.