Twilight thinks Celestia is addicted to cake, and decides to do her best to save the alicorn from the addiction.
Yeah, that'll go to sweetly.
All bad puns are just icing on the cake.
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Shadows cannot exist with light. Where there is light, shadows spawn. There must be balance. And that burden belongs to me...
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A really nice and funny story.
I also thought the way you wrote Twilight and Spike was great.
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I was really worried that I messed up their characters.
Thanks!
Funny.
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Thanks!
masterfully down you captured every pony and spike perfectly! this would make a great episode on the show! it would be a fantastic slice of life episode. well done to you! it was a pleasure to read it!!
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Wow, those are some really strong words of praise! Thanks!
(I also like that you separated Spike from everypony. You would be surprised how many people miss that.)
And thanks for following me! I hope to not disappoint!
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to your post
, I am genuinely terrified.
Looking from your profile pic
One small comment that amuses me :
"Luna would be there to cover her cuties for a few days" -> I think you meant 'duties' but the typo leads to amusing interpretations on its own
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I can't read you comment and look at your profile pictures with a straight face!
That cornwallin' varmit typo has been sent to pasture!
I half expected this to end with Celestia trying to get Twilight off her book addiction.
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Hm, I never considered that angle when writing this. That would be a nice direction for the story to go, but this started with cake, so I decided to have it end with cake!
Like the character dialogue with each other. The topic would be a problem if it really had some negative results on the person/pony involved. It doesn't, so this is just funny.
Now, Twilight's addictions can be a problem. Let's talk about that!
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turn (I mean, it's an addiction story!) but I wanted to keep this story lighthearted. I thought this would be an 
way to address real issues.
Yeah, this story could have taken a very
It didn't hurt that
's cake addition had been a popular fan-concept for almost forever.
Ah, yes. Twilight's obsession with books and late night studying
. I must admit, that could make a nice story, but I don't have any immediate plans for a story like that in the near future.
(Yay, redundancy!)
Thanks for reading and commenting!
(Especially the latter!)
This was certainly well written. The characters are spot on with what I've personally seen in the show; Twilight's tendency to get tunnel-visioned, Spike being the voice of reason that's all too often ignored, and especially Celestia's wise but lighthearted attitude felt very natural.
The first few paragraphs felt a little slow with getting to the point, but the feeling wasn't enough to discourage reading further. Plus it was funny hearing Spike point out Twilight's book addiction.
As for the topic of addiction itself, it can be a serious issue, and I think you handled the general premise well without diverging too far into the more gruesome details of addictions. Though I was a little disappointed when Luna didn't make an appearance to talk to Celestia about her 'problem' in an over-the-top dramatic manner. Just imagining it gives me the chuckles.
Also that last bit with Celestia... *Long inhale* I saw it coming... I knew it was going to be there, and I still found it hilarious.
Nice job sir.
Now if you'll excuse me... I'm out of coffee.
Now get the shotguns and ski-masks, we're going to Starbucks again.
Jeeves! Get in the car, we're getting more!
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I know I've already had twelve cups today.
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No I don't have a problem.
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Pay for the cof- ?! Have you seen their prices Jeeves? We're going there to rob THEM, not the other way around.
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You're the author of Escapades of a Changeling Soulstoke: Skyrim...
Your long juicy comment is like a slice of carrot cake with granola sprinkles and mango pepper jelly filling! Don't judge my tastes!
Originally the opening scene was shorter, but as I continued revising it I found there was a lot of stuff I could throw in before diving into the heart of the matter. Now I see that I walked dangerously close to the line of overdone intro. I'll make sure to play it safer in my future stories!
I think at one point they actually were going to bring Luna in, but I had Spike scrap the idea before I lost control of the story.
Luna's an awesome character, but I'm not sure if I would be able to portray her accurately and humorously without this story sprouting wings and a mind of its own.
Thanks!
It's moments like these which make me love my
jobseasonal occupationhobby. I know a good wolf Doctor who would be more than happy to speak with you about your problems.No matter how you slice it, this many-layered tale was marvelous. What could have been a vanilla joke was magnified to multi-tiered magnificence. At least Celestia was able to nip this in the bund. She was able to get Twilight to come round reasonably, and that was the carrot that kept me reading.
Twilight's ability to get panicky and let her world turn upside-down would have pretty much anyone else seeing red velvet, and thinking she was coconuts. Having such a warm personality lets Celestia glaze over such things though. Now, Celestia's no angelfood, but her handling of this is marbleous...
And Luna getting involved would have lead to a sweet prank ending, letting her vent any lingering yellowsy at Celestia even if the prank didn't pan out. The way you ended it is icingoff though.
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Oh sweet Celestia! You buttered me so up I almost died in sweet bliss! I'm so glad my roommate is wearing earbuds so he doesn't have a mousse 'cause of me taking a pound to my bed!