Fluttershy's Lament
A powder-white rabbit bounded through the open door, nearly colliding with his caretaker. He tugged on her coat repeatedly, an embodiment of the definition of insanity.
"Not now, Angel. I almost have your salad. You can stop fussing now, okay?" The long-maned, pale yellow pegasus said, carefully balancing the plump cherry on the mound of various greens. Angel continued tugging, and pointed outside with his free hand. Fluttershy carefully placed the bowl on the floor, and turned to Angel.
"Angel, what is it?" She asked, slightly annoyed, and Angel grabbed her mane, leading her through the doorway.
"What's the matter Angel?" She asked as Angel continued frantically guiding her outside. The duo descended the path from her house to a nearby stream, Angel scurried along with a look of anxiety. He stopped near a ruffled bush, and hid behind a nearby rock. "Is there something in here?" Fluttershy asked. Angel nodded furiously, and pointed at a small figure lying inside the bush.
"Oh, is it hurt? Should I go help it?" Fluttershy asked Angel. Angel shook his head, and continued cowering. "Stop being silly, Angel. Let me take a look at it." She said, and leaned down, peering at the figure. She whispered, "Hello? Are you okay?" She received a squeak, and picked up the figure with her mouth, gently laying it in the light. The sight appalled her, and she leaped back, sharing Angel's fear. A small white mouse was in front of her, shivering on the ground, a dark metal ring wrapped around it. Small black and gold tendrils spread under its fur from where the object touched it, glowing faintly with their respective colors.
Fluttershy leaned out from behind the rock, and cautiously approached the mouse. She slowly reached her hoof towards it, and made contact with the black device attached to the mouse. A burst of golden light engulfed her, and she felt it peeling away at her in a metaphysical tug of war, fighting to fling her through the dimensional void. She had no way to fight it, and helplessly watched as her surroundings faded, and everything disappeared, a black nothingness replacing it. She felt like she was watching herself, a spectator to the events unfolding before her. But as she began to calm, a burst of golden light again began spreading through the void. A stone-like surface began extending from her hooves, curling up and forming walls, and a ceiling, which were adorned with various gauges and pipes, strange glowing walls of text accompanying them...
Artemis watched in awe as not only the lab rat returned, but a ominous, pastel colored being. A long candy-pink mane swept over half of the being's snout, which in turn was coated in pale yellow fur. The rat seemed to be fused to the device, but that was no matter as of now. This tag-along had provided all the convincing he needed to use the device himself, but a necessary precaution was the examination of the creature, and the recovery and examination of the device. It's interaction with organic material was troubling, yet the fact that the pale yellow quadruped was unharmed by it generated a slew of questions. He would need more time
She began backing into a corner, her mane dangling limply over her face, hoping the gaunt figure would ignore her. To her relief, the figure backed to the opposite corner, and gently pressed a button protruding from the wall, but never averting his view from her. The mysterious biped was clad in a sleek, futuristic sport jacket, a ruffled, mostly buttoned, white cotton collared shirt. His dark brown mane was cut relatively short, a few strands of hair jutting in random directions, a tired, yet confident mask on its face. The metal section of wall behind it slid open, revealing a closet sized room behind it. The thing stepped into it, and the wall slid shut again, a whirring sound accompanying the closure of the metal panel.
Fluttershy emerged from her corner, and examined the mouse. The device was still bound to it, and as she appeoached, it pitifully squealed, begging for death. It was immobilized by the ring, and even with the health of a creature at stake, Fluttershy's fear and disorientation prevented her from assisting it. She was transfixed to the gruesome sight, the horror of the mouse's impending doom paralyzing her. She stared as the mouse stopped attempting to squirm, or scurry, and accepted its fate. She shed a silent tear.
Artemis emerged from the elevator and strolled at a brisk pace towards the security room, where Butler was monitoring the chamber. Artemis passed through the doorway, and peered over Butler's shoulder. The experiment was a success and failure. His destination's authenticity was confirmed, but there seemed to be a few kinks in the device. Butler rose from his chair, and turned towards his charge. The hulk of a man, towering over the twelve year-old mastermind before him, a seven foot tall brute, spoke.
"What do we do with it, sir?"
"What we would do with any miraculous discovery, my friend." Artemis replied, and beckoned for Butler to follow.
"Sir, what do you wish me to do with it?" Butler inquired as he paced aside Artemis, maintaining a brisk pace.
"Restrain it. If it is necessary, you may harm it." Artemis replied after a brief moment of reflection. The duo arrived at the elevator, and Butler began shifting his suit slightly, scratching his leg, and generally appearing to be lost in thought. To the above average Mercenary, Assassin, or soldier, the slight glints of steel that accompanied Butler's shifting would've alerted them to the mobile armory he carried. The Sig Sauer P226 in a shoulder holster, plethora of throwing knives in his boots, garrote in his watch, stun grenades stuffed in his various pockets, and a good old ball bearing cosh stuffed in his shirt provided ample security for his charge. But on this occasion, he had a weapon he rarely used on his person. A specialized tranquilizer dart rifle, fully automatic, and extremely accurate. He planned to please his charge.
The door slid open with a metallic hiss, and Butler stepped inside.
"I wish you luck, friend." Artemis said. Butler nodded, and pulled a throwing knife from his boot, twirling it in his gargantuan hands.
Well, how was that? Constructive Criticism is appreciated, and please up/down vote fairly.
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I'm guessing this is an alternate-Artemis world, one where he didn't meet Holly and the people, but ponies instead? Our young Mr Fowl appears to be quite ruthless, which fits with his first appearances. His voice doesn't appear quite right, but I can't put a hoof on why just yet, so continue on!
Love the premise
I liked it. Didn't notice any immediate errors, I'll take a closer look later once there is more. Good luck!
*Before reading* I was wondering how long this would take to show up an Artemis Fowl/Equestria cross over... lets see what happens.
... wait it's Butler 
... um... I'll grab Mulch Diggums and sick him on Butler whilst I save Fluttershy... yeah that should work. Did last time 
*After reading* He tries to hurt Fluttershy AT ALL and I will personally use my own interdimensional transporter, travel into this story and
I need moar
I mean if that's all right with u I guess....
I'm so gonna read this, I FREAKING LOVE ARTEMIS FOWL thanks man!
Artemis Fowl crossover??
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OH YES OH YES OH YES OH YES THIS IS SO AWSOME OH YES OH YES!
and.. welcome eoin colfer. long time no see of that sort of crossover.
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You forgot about Juliet.
Huh! I loved the first three Artemis Fowl books. (Still need to get hold of the others.) So I appreciate what you're trying to do here. As mentioned above, you've remembered that Artemis was origonally realy ruthless, brring on vilian protagonist. I think that you're doing well so fr. I'll keep my eyes on this fic.
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Wait a second...
YOU!
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Oh, crap.
I look forward to more updates. Also, you've portrayed Artemis very well. Keep going.
Thanks to everyone for the likes and comments, they motivate me. More is definitely on the way.
I VERY much enjoy the Artemis Fowl series, and I believe you have done a good job with the start of this. And as for the constructive criticism request, I have this to say, be very careful with the use of technology, if you are going to go the route where he doesn't meet "The People", then he will not have access to basically everything that he made after the first book. Other than that, I don't really see anything else.
btw: Muahahaha, poor Fluttershy
715471 Haha! You thought I had forgotten!
I loved the Artems Fowl books, definitely going to be following this story
I got so excited just seeing the cover of this...Artemis Fowl is without a doubt my favourite book series of my childhood, I can't wait to see what you've done here.
Before reading this I was intrigued about how Artemis Fowl and Equestria were going to mix. I read through what there is so far and it's written really well. I like the idea. But if Artemis Fowl or Butler ouch a single hair on Fluttershy's mane I will seriously..
This is not acceptable. No one hurts Fluttershy!! 
But excited to read further and see what you do with this
Oh shit. If butler even touches a hair on fluttershy's head, most of the brony community will be after him.
Of course, then there's her "massage" techniques that could take down a bear...
I wonder what they would do to a human if applied "improperly".
I assume you are going to incorperate the demons into the story. Even though this is a what if? Scenario, I would still love to see that. Pweese?
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Poshibwy. Poshibwy...
And to all the
"Don't hurt Fluttershy" people, I'm probably hurting Fluttershy.
Oh, this is going to suck for the ponies. Artemis is smarter than them, and probably would use lethal force if he had to, unlike the ponies. There might be, at most, one problem he couldn't take out if he had to, but it depends on whether or not Celestia and Luna are passively invulnerable.
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Do yourself a favor and stop after Book 4.
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I went up to 7, all but it were good to me.
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Well, I wouldn't call any of them "bad" per se,(except maybe #6) but there is certainly a noticeable drop in quality (not to mention continuity) starting with 5.
Edit: and now that I have your attention: as for the Fic at hand. Thank you for this and please continue it.
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The demons, six I think? That was pretty good, but the first 3 will always be best.
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nono, the demon one is 5, 6 is the time travel one.
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Ah.
One thing, remember that Artemis is an asshole. He ain't afraid to choke a few bitches to get what he wants.
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I know that.
Chapter 2 is practically done, just waiting for my proofreader. By the way, sorry for the delay, I've been trapped in Idaho for a while, and can only type on my phone. Have you ever tried writing a fanfic on an iPhone?