• Member Since 29th Apr, 2015
  • offline last seen Jul 12th, 2021

Thomas Hunter


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Bright Eyes is a sentient parasprite with a staggering intellect. Doublemint is his adventure-loving unicorn assistant. Join them as they work together to solve mysteries and become the greatest crime-fighting parasprite/pony duo Equestria has ever seen.

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Special thanks to my friends who made this story possible:

Moro, an amazing help to my writing and an even better friend!

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Papermoonwolf who came up with the concept of Port Alas, and helped with other aspects of the creative process.

Coverart by the wonderful KarmaDash

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 33 )

You have an amazing talent for writing!:pinkiehappy:

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Thank you! That's very kind of you to say. :twilightblush:

Why is Doublemint's horn curved in the cover art?

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That's just the artist's interpretation of her. There's no special reason other than that. :twilightsmile:

Nice start! ^-^ I really enjoyed reading this.

Oh, darn, *sigh*. I wanted to hate this after that "puppy-monkey-baby" promotion of yours. I really wanted to hate it. I love it. This is character creation of the first order. How you handle 'story' and 'plot' will remain unanswered until we have more chapters, but for now your character creation is more than enough (that sucking noise you hear in the back of your head? That's me being drawn in).

Clearly you know what you are doing. Do you do contract work as a promoter? I have some stories that could use some more views.

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Haha! Thank you! Let's get coffee. We'll talk about my terms. :raritywink:

Very nice so far! I love the breezy Sherlock Holmes-ish style, you pull that off so well. ^^ Already looking forward to more of this!

Okay short nitpick. Why counterfit bits? I mean aren't they made of metal and look the same? Sorry just had to say that. I rather enjoyed this chapter and Doublemint is a great character. I also love the interaction between the two characters. It feels natural and had perfect pacing. (Also why is it that I can analyze stories and critique them but I can't write them?

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Why, to become richer than Celestia of course! :trollestia:

Haha! I'm glad that you enjoyed the characters, and I hope that you will continue reading the story in the future. :twilightsmile:

6917016 Okay it's just a pet peeve of mine. I would love to read more!

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Thanks. I appreciate your support. :pinkiesmile:

As someone who kinda-sorta, unofficially has a Parasprite OC, I am excited for this story.
You have a good beginning so far. Introduced parasprite, and your other main character in an excellent manner that displays a few of their more (what I'm assuming to be at least) outstanding characteristics, and provided a bit of a taste of how we can expect your mysteries to play out.

Just for the sake of the Parasprite OC, I really hope this turns out to be a success.

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Thank you! I hope that you enjoy the rest of the story as it is released! :twilightsmile:

Pinkie fetch my detective gear we're going to try to solve clues before their reviled

:pinkiehappy:Okie Doki Loki here they are

Excellent bring on the next inquisitive investigation.... Pinkie why are their crumbs in my hat?

:pinkiehappy:OH I didn't have a bowl for my muffins so I had to make do

(Sigh...) Go wash it out before the next chapter is out

:pinkiehappy:Sure thing Sherlock hehe

This was so great!! I'm super happy I found that apostrophe:raritywink:

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Thank you for your kind words! I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed my little game and your prize for playing it! :twilightsmile:

6942956 you are a very creative person:derpytongue2: good way to advertise your story:rainbowwild:

:twilightsmile: I'm enjoying this so far.

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Awesome! I hope that you will enjoy the rest as it comes out! :pinkiehappy:

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Enjoy it! I hope to make it a fun one! :pinkiesmile:

Impressive story so far. Certainly not a usual "detective" troup. Intriguing to say the least. Keep it up!

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To economically destabilize the kingdom, and present himself as a better choice than Princess Cakemagedddon....?

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