My name is Clarissa Ryker, Captain of the UEE Endurance and commander of the 2nd Battle fleet.
And this is my story of how I ended up in the world of Equestria.
This is a crossover of one of my most awaited games star citizen.
Teen for language. There will be gore and probably sex later on, however there will more than likely be no clop. Just light stuff, and in which case the story will more than likely be switched to mature depending on feedback.
(Main character is my OC)
I recently rewrote the first 2 chapters of this story for readers who have come back after the re-write
Said chapter marked with (x)
constructive criticism is totally welcome and very appreciated.
Special thanks to Arctikfox and Dragonoidsix seekers for all the suggestions and help
Thank you star citizen for creating such a amazing universe and game. Also cover art credit goes to Robert space industries. https://robertsspaceindustries.com/
keeping my eye on this one keep it going please.
6767939 Thanks! will do!
FINALLY. I'm not the only multiverse traveler on this site now! YEESH.
6768818 hhaha yup
I have been waiting for a Star Citizen/MLP crossover, so I'm totally on board for this. plus, i've wanted to write one myself. :P
I would love to see this story continue so I feel like I should give you my 100% honest opinion. I think the story is good so far, but prepare yourself for people to downvote your story on a few things like grammar and how it is written. Also the Everfree, if not used correctly, can make your story seem cliche, y'know 'everything happens in the everfree.' Also how Rainbow is automatically friendly towards the protagonist. I think your story could benefit from being rethought and tweeked, because the way it is now may turn a great many readers away.
The Endurance? By chance do you watch CaptainShack?
Again, I want this to succeed, so you get +1 like from me. Any help you need I would be more than willing to provide.
Hmm, no down vote here, but your eyelids don't get irritated from light unless you have disease of that sort. Nonetheless the proper term there would be retina. The part of the eye that changes light it to signals that the brain can understand.
Still like the story m8t I give it 8\8
6896431 huh I did not even realize that. Woops. fixing
I kinda wish we were as badass as she makes us sound.
6910578 hahaha, as in the humans?
6915962 yeah.
6916082 Well this is the star citizen universe so in this case we are like the most dominant race in the system. Our protaganist here is (was) somewhat of a proud human so boasting sure to be expected xDDD
6917023 still quite the badass.
Soooo... What's the plan on continuing this?? You have sparked my curiosity.
6960478 I have lots of work going on at the moment. I am going to be continuing it after march 2nd or so, after this festival I am working on ends. I PROMISE IT WILL BE BACK!
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I'll hold you to it!
6961354 IM BACK! xD I'm going over what I have already for the next chapter and hopefully I can get it out after the next few days or so.
7011584 Huzzah!
7012173 Lol, told you id be back! It shouldn't be too long before I get the next chapter out. Just having a little trouble because I realized how off track I had gone when I had started it xD
About midway through the chapter repeats, after the place were it says authors notes. Is this intentional?
7079745 Oh no it is not, my b, must have copied it over from docs wrong...again xxDDD
Fixed it though
Yisss
Definately loving this story so far! Can't wait to read more.
7080262 ITS HERE! FINALLY! *Gasps for breath* Thank...Luna for that...*promptly passes out on the floor*
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...I hope that isn't another way of saying you're gone again. What a tragedy that would be.
7085762 haha no I''m not gone but yes that would be a tragedy to be had for sure.
7085876 do you even next chapter bro?.....
......I'm done with life........
.....anyway, I'm out (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻
7130724 working on it, its been pretty slow. I travel a lot and work has been unfortunately busy. However I think I am going to have the next chapter out pretty soon as it's almost done and I have a bunch of free time over the next week.
7130829 alright then i can wait......
...............maybe.....
.....anyway, I'm out (╯°□°）╯︵ ┻━┻
(Ps if your wondering what the I'm out thing is, think of it as a signature)
7131759 huh, yeah tha makes sence xD
Well I might actually end up with some time today to work on the next chapter and tomorrow I plan on dedicating a whole day to it to hopefully release two chapters tomorrow. We will have to see how it goes really.
7131964 yeah that's alright mate, the fact is I'm bloody bored and I'm not currently working on my own story until season 6 starts, because of timeline issues and other excuses not to do it.
End of story.
It's back after 3 years........ Wrong story.
7217971 yes, longest writers block of my life, unreal, couldn't write a word for like 3 months
ya never sent me the doc for edits.
7218048 .... Just pulled a all nighter..... Feel like shit......contemplating sucide......*gunshot*
7218059 ah dammit, I totally forgot about that, my bad
7218074 welp, there goes another one *Yells into back ground*
"GORGE!, HEY GORGE! CLEAN UP ON AISLE 7!"
7218122 don't worry I'm a lich now, either waste my eternal life on the internet, or become a hero.......
.........I choose option 69, incineration by baby cats/kittens.
Can't think straight.
I've found that I've unfortunately played enough matches of cp_degrootkeep to translate almost any sentence into "Lunaspeak"
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Is it dead Jim?
7332668 no not at all.
Im on a exceedingly long trip right now and so i literaly have not been able to write anything for a while. This will change very soon
I shall return!
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Fair enough, thank you for the reply
What does UEE stand for?
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United Empire of earth :) If you want some info on the background of the UEE and the star citzen universe I would suggest going to their website here:
https://robertsspaceindustries.com/
They have a large quantity of info there for you along with the game they are developing and what this story is based on
Hope you enjoy my story! more chapters to come soon!
What is the cover art?
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The cover art is of a Vanguard Warden heavy fighter/gunship from Star Citizen. its more or less temporary until I can work up something better for the story.
ohhh the story lives :D
That cliffhanger!
Decided to take a break from revising and read this story. Got to say "I love it!" Some people might say Clarissa response to her missing 9000 numbered crew is wrong, in the sense that isn't expressing enough worry... blah blah blah.
However in all seriousness, not only is this your character, your story but I honestly like the fact she this calm, collected commander, having some awesome interactions with Luna. I like not seeing seeing a generic concerned captain, who can't realise even with a date set to search for crew members, can not stop worring and relax. In my eyes, this is a fantastic start to a story and I am most certainly eager to see who just chambered a round and what will happen to this merry band.
(Do you remember which story I commented on to say I would read this story?)
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I dont remember which story it was but i certainly remember reading that comment and I'm glad to see you make it to my little corner of the universe over here :DDD
And thank you for your words sir, I am currently about a 1000 words into the next chapter. Presently jamming out to music and writing as we speak! :P
This crossover admittedly didn't have much planned. I kinda just started writing. But when people seemed to be enjoying it I took a more serious look at it and created an outline/outcome/etc/etc yadda yadda yadda you get the point. I got invested and now were here, with (hopefully) a planned trilogy ahead of us. We will see where it takes us but I think I finally know what to really do with this story after a year long hiatus. (sorry about that by the way guys lifes a ***** sometimes :P)
*Finds a decent story* I sleep
*Doesn’t upload because of good reasons* real shit?
*at long last uploads a new chapter* ASCENDED
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