It began when Sunset Shimmer brought the Element of Magic from Equestria, though she tried to use the magic of the crown for her own ends she was instead defeated. Sunset's defeat attracted the notice of the Dazzlings who tried to claim the magic for themselves, though their plans ended in defeat as well. Both these incidents attracted the attention of this world's Twilight Sparkle who ended up causing a major magical incident herself. Who and what else has noticed the magical goings on at Canterlot High?
An individual known as Starwind has shown an interest in these recent events at Canterlot High and has allied with the Dazzlings. But what is their true intent?
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you have got me hooked! great chapter, loved pinkie pie she is my favorite! you did her proud! you have a wonderful writing style , and wow do you know how to capture each one of the girls perfectly! kudos to you for this great start, can not wait foe more!!
this is a tremendous chapter! this is one fine story, its funny exciting and a mystery all roll into such a fine read! well done to you! cant wait for more! bravo!
English is not my native tongue, yet I cannot help but notice your repeating of phrases and overusing of pronoun. You should consider getting a proofreader.
Overall, I like the concept of the story. Also, it's funny your depiction of Adaggio as the most
stupidimmature of the Sirens: trying to charm Starswirl as soon as she gets her magic back (like any wizard with two cell brains wouldn't see that coming) , or seducing him when that fails (another predictable move), and finally throwing temper tantrums for being demoted to evil sidekickSo the girls just openly spoke about Equestria and magic in front of Cheerilee...
man this is getting sooo good! onward girls to find answer! this is one fun story well done!!
So finally done with this chapter! I like it! The mystery deepens. Like what the heck is that creature? I'm gonna get one of Starwind's creations? At least I hope or something ELSE is skulking around the school! Man what IS it with that place? My guess...built on a Hellmouth.
Also maybe this is just me but when they were chasing that thing I had the chase music from the old Real Ghostbusters cartoon running through my head.
Finally got around to finishing this one. Another good chapter and things are getting quite interesting now. The confrontation between Starwind and the Rainbooms was quite tense. Just as it should be. Hopefully they'll be able to convince him they're not a threat to this world. Course I am wonder just what other magic users might have picked up on the rock being thrown into the pond? And what exactly THEY think of it. I have a feeling they're not all as level headed as Starwind.
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Awesome chapter, and great confrontation with Starwind. I'm curious will we see more OC's appear in the story?
7722615 Thanks nightmaster0
As for more OCs appearing; while I do like coming up with OCs I'm pretty sure I've introduced all that I'm going to for this particular story.
7730897 Ah just to say thank you for taking the time to answer my question. Also if you ever do need another OC I have one you might be able to use.