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Rinnaul


I do nothing of merit. On occasion, I give the impression of being creative, but this is a deception. I am merely derivative in clever ways.

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A broad, clear path runs through a deep wood on the far side of Ponyville.

No one goes there.

Four young colts want to know why.

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Creepy fun :twilightblush:

I like it.

Yes. This is one of the better horror stories I've seen on the site.:twilightsmile:

How'd they all get split apart? That's what I want to know.:trixieshiftright:

Welp, time to inform the Foundation.

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What the heck is that?!:twilightoops:

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People fall out of the world sometimes, but they always leave traces.

Creepy. Scary. Good! :twilightoops:

Possible typo:

once Snips way a few steps inside

Welp, it's time for Iron Maiden.

6513901 No one goes there because no one remembers anyone going there because everyone who goes in there is deleted from existence.

I guess.

*blinks*

*goes back to reread*

Oh.

Oooh...

OooooOoooooooOOooh...

I liked it. Though I don't feel it's a "horror" story. Dark definitely, but more suspenseful than anything else.

Bravo

This story was great! Took me a moment to catch what was happening, which doesn't happen often~

I know there was a reading of this done already, but I couldn't help myself. Have another! <3

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Thanks! This is actually the third reading this story has gotten, but I still always love seeing what people do with my ideas.

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Horror's been on my mind a lot lately, so with that in mind I say, this was fuckin' perfect. :D

Damn fine work with the atmosphere. This is a truly unsettling fic, all the more impressive given how little actually happens.

I'm going to go cry in a corner now.

Comment posted by Nope Nope Nope deleted Feb 23rd, 2018

Did anyone else have to go back and reread once they reached the ending? That was scary as fuck.

I can't exactly say it was scary but it made me think and then sent a chill up my spine, bravo sir.

Reminds me of the Weeping Angels

7678359 Kind of but Weeping Angels send you back in time, they don't erase you entirely.

Hmm. They were erased from existence. That makes me think of Corpse Party. BUCKING PERFECT STORY! :pinkiecrazy:

I'm not just scared i'm terrified i'm scared guys :fluttershyouch::twilightoops:

Crap. Halfway through and I was like: Where's Pipsqueak?

I imagine if I wasn't so spoilt by J-Horror I would've found this unsettling. All the same, it's a great horror story. :twilightsmile:

Wiped from existence. Reminds me of Background Pony

Memories are always the most horrifying thing you can mess with.

I did a double take after Pip dissapeared and Rumble started talking about being in the back. :rainbowhuh:

But I quickly realized where we were headed.
A cool creepy story.:ajsmug:

This was good. A bit short for my tastes when it comes to horror, but still effective.

It took me a while to realize that they were slowly disappearing.

I just read this in the Nightmare Nights collection. I can say without exaggeration that it is one of the few that has actually made me lose sleep. Achievement unlocked, I guess. :twilightsmile:

Damn..............that was very bleak and hopeless....................*sigh* What can you do?

I think it was a bit too short for me personally, but I can see how this would be considered a good horror story.

PT

The dawning realization of what was happening as the story progressed was superb. Haven't really seen that trick done in any other horror story in the site. Excellently done!

Reminds me of many eldritch locations I've seen. This is one of the more interesting ones though. Pity it is in another universe, where I cannot go.

Ya lost me at the end.

“I don’t know why you guys put me in the back,” he said.

Yeahhh I sort of figured this was the case. If ponies who walk along the path cease to have ever existed, then nopony goes down the path. RIP

I remember watching a Twilight Zone episode similar to this when I was a kid

Hello! I has done a reading for your story! I hope you enjoy!

Super high in creep factor. I had to read it twice to understand what was happening.

I thought for a moment that maybe if you sing the whole way you'd survive. It seems you only vanish during periods of silence. But then I realized the path is likely infinite. So you're doomed no matter what.

Another thing about this fic that will probably bother me for the next several days is how it ends. To me this is scarier than getting erased from existence. At least Snips didn't know that was coming. It's that in his final moments, Snips had no friends. Its likely those colts, Snails especially where his tightest friend group. In his final moments he existed in a reality where he had no friends. That is just really sad to me.

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