• Member Since 17th Feb, 2014
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MegatronsPen


Other than a Cybertronian writing utensil, I am an avid brony that is partial to writing novice-level stories whenever an idea pops into my head, whether I like it, or not. It's mostly the latter.

Comments ( 14 )

Excellent start.
I wonder how quickly this'll escalate?

Er... that not Indigo Zap... that Sugarcoat. Just felt like you should know.... :P

How the fuck did this get up without me hitting the submission button??? The fuck?


6625094 Say what?

6625094 Are you referring to the picture? :rainbowhuh:

6625140 Yes I am. Did I do something wrong??

6625143 Oh. Yes. I suppose the summary does make it seem like I'm referring to the picture a little bit. I do apologize, but I do know its Sugar Coat. :P

6625154 Ah ok. ^^ Just saw the bio and thought that there was a mix up?

Lotta potential here methinks. I'll be watching.

Please use http://fromamida.deviantart.com/art/Sugarcoat-545593637 as source link as the one you used it just to the img. :pinkiehappy:

This is awesome. Just... hilarious and sexy and full of potential. I for one am intrigued about the relationship between the 5 Shadowbolt girls: between the way they're more or less badmouthing Sugar Coat and the way they interact with each other, it suggests to me they aren't exactly all friends - they just have a free period together or something.

Typos here and there, but nothing that detracted significantly from the experience. Brilliant details (I liked the licking), good dialogue. The pacing followed a good speed, with Zap frantically thinking more when she started to panic in the trees. Everything Sugar Coat does and says is fucking gold - deliberate and well-crafted. Her blushing was super cute.

I'm actually just really stoked about this story now :twilightsmile:

I can tell fuck face is about to be Zaps nickname...loved this and can't wait to read more! Honestly there needs to be more shadowbolts stories

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Glad you both enjoyed it. I've ignored this story for some time because the opening chapter was just so....meh. But, I have improved the first chapter and the second will be posted up right after I edit the first into what I think is a slightly better worded piece. Nothing major will change. Just descriptions and what have you.

7599403 honestly I didn't see to many errors or anything but that's just me it's your story and I'm liking where it's going so far...I've been thinking of doing a shadowbolts story just dunno who to start with

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